Voted For: Lay-Text

rated- this was a real nice piece, from the flow to vocab to imagery to your full interpretation of the topic the whole thing was solid, this is straight up one of the best topicals ive seen from you, i can tell you really wanted to take the time to protray this well...you succeeded...nice job..props ~R~!
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enjoyed this read alot
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tweety-good take on the topic, you had a good sense of
imagery in your verse, but i found you lacked emotion n didnt
protray your idea as vividly with your vocab as you shouldve.
i was feeling the last half of your piece more so then the
beginning, the beginning was really draggy in a way that
it bored the reader n it didnt set the tone for your overall
piece...decent,Daz