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This was feedback posted for Ghost
 

That last bar in EC verse was just plain stupid. LOL. Thats guna loose some points.

good battle....

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This was feedback posted for Ghost
 

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Voted For: E.C

Ghosts Verse

Leave Ya In "Critical-Condition" Like This Battle Was Involved In 'Physical'-Contact
The Only Time Ya Lyriks "Vulgarized" Iz When You Key Them On A 'Explicical'-Contract"
^ Rhyme good flow poor structure stretched perhaps due to font but not good flow

Your Gonna Be 'Another' 'Casualty',So I guess Ima Have To Add Ya Name In Addition
You Could Gain Tonz Of 'Fame',But Your Still Gon Be Lackin Of Grippin My Ambition
^ punch not super strong kinda basic really...stretched again flow weak

Leave Ya Linez "Evaporizin",Like Boilin Water Waiting To Be Replaced My Humid-Steam
Leave Ya Donating Ya Lyriks To "Good-Will",Along With Ya Useless-Team
^ better punch like the bar needs re-wording to flow...it DOES matter in text

Redeem Yaself From This Forum,Cuz your Resposible To Unregisterin N Not Returning
Your Like A "Mentally-Retarded" Child,Goin To "School" But Steady Not-Learning
^ good bar flow weak again...could be better

No Need In Proceeding To Battle,Cuz Its Over, by Just Readin Half My Verse
My Lyriks Similiar To "Sprite-Advertisement", They Make Ya Havin To (Quinch-Ya-Thirst)
^ no diss played punch self-glory direction in this bar was poo

Your A Child Homie,Fifteen?,Your Barely Probably Developin Hormonez And Genez
Your Lyriks Couldnt Be "Tight",If "Aretha-Franklin -Squeezed- Ya Verse n Her Jeanz
^ closer meh...punch aimed...hit but not OHH material...again coulda been better

Overall
Still need improving Ghost reading this was hard structure wsa stretched causing weak flow punches were hmm ok at best but 1 or 2 bars slipped in places personals were basic "look at his profile ish" so average marks there...you need to think about re-writing verses as well...you may feel comfortable writing like this but everyone has a different style and honestly...why type word like "evaporizin" when evaporising is more clear...coz i had to keep goin back to make sure i got the right word...

E.Cs Verse

i hear you got tight wordplay, but that shit never worries me,
cuz whippin down ya pants to flash ya bits is the only time ya sonnin me,
^ Eugh nasty lol...good flow punch there re-wordin perhaps but ok to start off wit

a texas cat, howdy! like toy soldiers i'm telling him a "toy story",
but the only time u seeing "woody" is when u get morning glory,
^ lol good bar personal/punch there nice flow too

your the one and only... what makes u think people wanna be you,
soul rebel said i was battling ghost, i replied......I CAN'T SEE YOU!,
^ nice flip on his name good bar there again flow on point

go and take a "shower", chill out, fuck it man take one wit ya "wife",
u could be "stabbin" like "bates", and still not get a feel for "knives",
^ not really feelin this like previous bars kinda lacked...the ooo factor

every ghost has a story, he "drowned" in his "shit" at his own house,
figures why he "swears",well at least you went out with a "foul" "mouth",
^ lol @ this bar foul as in fawl no doubt lol nice pick up from previous bar

good sportsmanship fam, get eazy to play "ball", and maybe clean up,
coz the only time u playin wit "b's" is when ur fondeling b "cups",
^ again no ooo factor in it but the punch was there though

i'm all for the occation, whip out the "trainers" i'm running this grande,
ill leave "tread" on your face just to say you got stomped by a "brand"
^ ok closer coulda been better though IMO

Overall
E.C walked wit this...verse not great but enough punches were more on point flipped the name, flowed reasonably well...the wording a lot more clearer than Ghosts as well IMO...

V/E.C...this is an RTF no limit on vote is required :thumbup:

Voted For: Ghost

This was a close battle, but i think ghost took it with tha pnuches and wordplay. his punches and wordplay were consistent, and made more since. i think his disses against ec were harder, than ec's disses against ghost. ec had a okay verse, but i dont think his punches were that hard, and his last few barz were off point. and grande and brand dont even rhyme.
overall- i think ghost took this one because he was more conisistent wit tha wordplay and his punches and had harder dissses...ghost gets my vote. but it was a close battle../


-peace

This was feedback posted for E.C
 

feedback....

close battle......

both ppl had their ups n downs

to pick a winner............i say E.C by a hair......a small tiny pubic hair :thumbup:

Voted For: E.C

Iight Not a real strong battle here

Ghost, you had a couple decent punches, but I saw way too much self-glorification in your verse. Save that shit for open mics, because it doesn't belong in a battle. Wordplay was mediocre at best, definetley no where near the best I've seen out of you in the past. You had a few personals, but they could've been better. Also, you need to work on your structure. Overall, This was a pretty weak verse from you fam.

E.C.

Definetley not the best I have seen from you either. You had punches, which is a plus, but they lacked creativity, some of them were played, and some just were not hitting as hard as you could've made them hit. Wordplay was pretty decent, could've been a little better in some spots, but this wasn't really a huge problem. I didn't really see any personals. However, I am giving you my vote because your punches hit, and his didn't.

V/ E.C.

LoL BARZ OF STEEL n MADDOG that Line Yall say was Self Glorifying READ HOMIE!
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No Need In Proceeding To Battle,Cuz Its Over, by Just Readin Half My Verse
My Lyriks Similiar To "Sprite-Advertisement", They >"Make Ya<" Havin To (Quinch-Ya-Thirst)
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Dayum What Do I got to Do to Make You NIggaz Understand!
And My Personalz Are Listed Below!

Your Like A "Mentally-Retarded" Child,Goin To "School" But Steady Not-Learning
Your A Child Homie,Fifteen?,Your Barely Probably Developin Hormonez And Genez
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Explanation=1stPersonal
He goes To School,But Steady Dont LEarn Nothing!(Talkin to Strangerz)Myself
Explanation 2nd Personal
Hes Fifteen,And hes Probably Barely DEVELOPIN hormonez n Genez!
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But Its All good!Thats Why i said before the battle LISTEN CLOSELY!
in other wordz read it out loud n LISTEN CLOSELY!

the thing is u dnt listen u look fool lol... uppin for more votess

LMFAO yeh yeh true true But Uppin for votes.........................

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