Nice man, structure was bad as a text verse, but i read it as if i were spittin it and it did flow so fucka structure.

2nd verse was better, but i was feelin the imagery and vocab throughout, overall nice peice.

sup fam..this was straight...first off it was a nice concept.I liked the way you set it out.really creative.Structure was good...vocab was hot which always attracts me...

loved the way you write about the present day..and then write about twenty years from now..and then ended it making us think what it will be like another 20 years from that...overall this was a dope piece...would like to collab with you..i like your style..overall 9/10

return the favour on my dark disguise OM please.Its in ma sig..pz

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Good concept you used here. Never encountered a piece like this before, it made me think because it was so down to earth. Most lines I could see happening, imagery was cool, and so was you're emotion. Despite you're flow being off, I thought the messages connected well throughout each bar..

Overall - 78/100..

Keep dropping..

thanks yo I appreicaite it.

uppin for Indeph...

I think it has the potential to be a great piece.But it just fell short in certain parts.
See the flow? even though it was an audio piece, it was mad choppy inbetween bars
fix that dawg, i mean i do audio to, but the flow doesn't have to be that choppy
a different bar structure could help, lyrics were good, concept? i seen it before but good
Overall:7/10. nice drop though..thought provoking!!!

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ay deph!...whats hood wit u fam?...we gotta collab on sum real shit my nigga...dis was sum good shit, is it on record yet?...hit me up on AIM later...im at work now, gotta go...eat cookies, save hoes

-Bagz

Lol...you know my aim fam. hit me up:confused

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