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Voted For: ~Lady Fiya~
flow-Lady fiya because with a shorter verse...it's easier to keep a good flow goin.I felt as though tweety had a basic rhyme which is something I utterly hate so bad!SO flow was all LAdy Fiya here. Imajery/Emotion/content...etc.- Well...as for the concept...I think TWeety's 1st character/2nd character was more unique and innovative.But both of you had that emotion/sad shit. imajery was even...while readin it...it was easy to picture it. as for content as a whole...fiya had it "like the lips of Judas revealed Christ, weak judgment blossoms the blessed" ^^This was dope...i like this line the most in this battle. But wording needs to be improved by the 2 of you.There were some line worded beautifully..yes...but there were also some worded horiibly. Vocab went to Fiya as well.Tweety's vocab was a lil bland. Vote-Lady Fiya rtf in one my battles in sig. |
Voted For: ~Lady Fiya~
ummmmm,ok, tweetys piece to me was all about imagery, altho there was a certain degree of emotion potrayed in ur piece, i jus felt that fiyas was more powerful. Lady fiya's verse flowed easier, and ur use of varied vocabulary and alliteration here and there made it nice to say out loud. The topic was nice and the stories that u both told were good. But i thought putting the quote as the introduction was a nice touch for LF and gave the whole story a very distinct moral. overall i think LF's verse flowed better, had a more extensive range of vocabulary and was a more original topic. but both were nice to read. no hate. |
wow thanx.... and if Macreep = K-Trini, i really wasn't expecting that, i thought you had beef with me.. but eh, uppin for some more explained votes, thanx for takin y'all time to read both or pieces.. :thumbup:
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