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M&rk 08-27-05 09:40 PM

This was feedback posted for Robert De Niro
 
neither good ,but RDN came with personals and was less complicated and still had his few punches hit and i think they hit harder and made alot more sense since they didn't need to be explained with ** these.
stan's to much of a self glory person, you don't need medication*
you could board a plain an write your verse still would succeed in elevation
^^ your best punch but played to hell
"Changing The Wheels On My Car" Is The Only Time Youll See me "Re-Tire"
^^

Stanza 08-29-05 05:09 PM

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Torch. 08-30-05 08:56 PM

This was feedback posted for Stanza
 
LOL.....You Talked About Him Being Shit To Much Man..But Word No Hate.

Stanza 09-03-05 12:19 PM

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DoContinue 09-03-05 07:38 PM

This was feedback posted for Robert De Niro
 
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Deranged 09-03-05 08:10 PM

This was feedback posted for Robert De Niro
 
polls.............................................

Stanza 09-05-05 01:28 PM

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AITZ 09-09-05 05:26 AM

Voted For: Robert De Niro

Stanza
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He "Runnin Assfault" In Jail So He Get "Passed Around" Like "Track Battonz"
How Can You "Beat Me" When You Workin With "Pussie'z" Like "Yvonne?"
You Shit Doesnt Carry "No Weight" Like You is Writting With "Light Text"
But Your Lines Still Dont "Shine" Even If You Was Rockin "Oiled "Spandex"
Two Wins? Ha Thats Not a Winning Streak Thats A Shit Stain In Rv's Draws
So Ill Clorox Your Nutz So We Wont See The Division In Your Balls (lol)

6 Lines Done Now You Got The "Shit That Runs" So Ill Call You "Lil Squirtz"
I Know You a "Pussy" Bcuz I seen Your "Stuff" When You Wore That "Skirt"
"Changing The Wheels On My Car" Is The Only Time Youll See me "Re-Tire"
Then Ill Put You In A "Skillet At a Camp Fire" So That You can Be "On-Fire"
You Week So Ill Let The Punctual Actions of my Keyboard Finish Him Like
!@!#!@!@@!#!@#!@#!@#!@@#!@##!@#!@#!!!!!! You Dyke
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WhAt EvEr It TaKeS
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exposed, cause stanza couldn't come sick if he had a fever
stanza could 'shit out an award' but still wouldn't be an 'achiever'
when i'm done, the pan'll be attach to you sort of like peter
the edge will leave stanza cut up, cause i come with e meat cleaver
slow progress cause his process of making it come's like a snail
any slower you can move back, cause his delivery slower then mail
IM'ed me and said "please vote for me against nostradamus"
i promised i votes so i voted nos, well at least he lost honest
if stanza wanted to conceal his identity, he couldn't be able to
i'm like a life machine i bring him a flat line like it's fatal dude
stan's to much of a self glory person, you don't need medication*
you could board a plain an write your verse still would succeed in elevation
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Flow:stan
Structure:both
Word Play:stan
Metaphors:what ever it takes
Punches:what ever it takes
Personals:what ever it takes
Creativity:stan
Enjoyment:what ever it takes
Vote:what ever it takes

Explanation: both had good verses...personals and punchlines got it for this battle.....what ever it takes...wins on my count

pCe

can i get a RTF on my battle homies.....honest though....werd...its in my sig!

Red Stroke 09-09-05 06:21 PM

This was feedback posted for Stanza
 
Checking This Out Yo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !

Dickard. 09-09-05 07:18 PM

This was feedback posted for Robert De Niro
 
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Willa 09-11-05 01:55 PM

uppin this.............................................. ........

Shazz 09-11-05 02:07 PM

Voted For: Robert De Niro

Stanza -
nah not feelin much of the @(&#$()@^##$(^#$ even though i do it but its too much...Didn't make sense at all...Flow was nothing..Wordplay was maybe the only thing you had no hate or D/r but i don't like your verse at all

WhAt EvEr It TaKeS-
You had not many personals ok word play and good flow. Good structure easy to read and i understood it , its better than what he spit , not sure if i would really take this verse in pride but ya you got the win good job.

V/WhAt EvEr It TaKeS

RTF
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Ryan Hughes 09-11-05 05:16 PM

Voted For: Stanza

exposed, cause stanza couldn't come sick if he had a fever
stanza could 'shit out an award' but still wouldn't be an 'achiever'
^^^Weak opener....Fever Shit is played an the Punch didnt connect right
when i'm done, the pan'll be attach to you sort of like peter
the edge will leave stanza cut up, cause i come with e meat cleaver
^^^Set Was ight but The Cleaver Shit No..
slow progress cause his process of making it come's like a snail
any slower you can move back, cause his delivery slower then mail
^^^Weak punch
IM'ed me and said "please vote for me against nostradamus"
i promised i votes so i voted nos, well at least he lost honest
^^^Good Personal
if stanza wanted to conceal his identity, he couldn't be able to
i'm like a life machine i bring him a flat line like it's fatal dude
^^^No.....Punch was weak
stan's to much of a self glory person, you don't need medication*
you could board a plain an write your verse still would succeed in elevation
^^^Nice CLoser

He "Runnin Assfault" In Jail So He Get "Passed Around" Like "Track Battonz"
How Can You "Beat Me" When You Workin With "Pussie'z" Like "Yvonne?"
^^^Good Opener wit the Personal
You Shit Doesnt Carry "No Weight" Like You is Writting With "Light Text"
But Your Lines Still Dont "Shine" Even If You Was Rockin "Oiled "Spandex"
^^^Good Punch.....
Two Wins? Ha Thats Not a Winning Streak Thats A Shit Stain In Rv's Draws
So Ill Clorox Your Nutz So We Wont See The Division In Your Balls (lol)
^^^Ight punch nuthin special
6 Lines Done Now You Got The "Shit That Runs" So Ill Call You "Lil Squirtz"
I Know You a "Pussy" Bcuz I seen Your "Stuff" When You Wore That "Skirt"
^^^Lol.....this was a good one
"Changing The Wheels On My Car" Is The Only Time Youll See me "Re-Tire"
Then Ill Put You In A "Skillet At a Camp Fire" So That You can Be "On-Fire"
^^^Naw...REtire Lines ol an The punch Didnt hit hard
You Week So Ill Let The Punctual Actions of my Keyboard Finish Him Like
!@!#!@!@@!#!@#!@#!@#!@@#!@##!@#!@#!!!!!! You Dyke
^^^IGht CLoser Nuthin to different
V/Stanza.....this was An ight battle.....Rob...ur verse had only acouple punchs that hit....u need to elevate on ur Wordplay an personal use...ur structure was good but some ur punchs didnt make sense an were worded wrong....No hate Jus work on those things....Stanza ur verse had consistent punchs an good personals wit lil bit of vocab an wordplay....u had a couple of played lines but ur verse was strong enuff to get my vote.......RTF In THe Sig.......Or this Vote will be REmoved.....1

Stanza 09-13-05 04:29 PM

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Stanza 09-15-05 12:39 PM

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