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Voted For: Sin`cere



Good battle by both.........SIn........you opened great...you had strong imagery in that first paragraph describing ya every movement an feeling in detail...it really got me in the story but then u fell off in the next paragraph an never really regained form....your flow was good...structure good....vocab was ah'ight nothing great...coulda used some multies....if u had finished like u started..u woulda had a MONSTER piece but as is..its jus good.


Paran......your imagery was lacking.....you were forcing certain words to rhyme so u would use "out of place" words so that ya lines would rhyme wit the line before it.....your story was good but it jus lacked that imagery an development...the flow of the story from one scene to next had holes in it an that hurt u.....however ya flow was good...coulda had more multies.....structure good...vocab was eh.......if u had took more tiem to develop the story better u prolly woulda took this but good anyways...stay up yall.........1

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this is gettin lame man. should we just get a bunch of expeinced topical heads to vote, you i got trip to vote and he voted honest so i dont think you should worry bout me gettin people to vote for me.