yea its pretty nice.....the chorus is kinda boring tho....everything else firm...i liked the vocab you used preticurlay the Second Verse...well keep it up..i'mma peep more....

overall-8.5/10...

peaCe~1~

thanks for the feedback Infector...

Uppin' for more...

Ight, you wanted my feedback, so here it is..............

The storyline was indepth and deep, but there were a couple of lines that I didn't understand at first, but reading on, I got the gist. The base of this open mic was your word play, it helped the paper flow in and out of each topic. However, the "bitches, stitches, snitiches" line is old, I have heard it too many times. You had a few metaphors, but I insist next time, add a little bit more than what you have.

I give it a

8.5/10

Very Good Open Mic

lol... Deucy... there's more metaphors than you think... :)

Thanks for the feedback (finally)

lol i glanced at dis thing like 5 times n FINALLY read all of it..!! damn boi u got a lot of talent...i was REALLY feelin dis piece
good creativity, luvin da vocab(hot), lots of good multies n punches up in there also
keep droppin da hottness! 10/10

thanks for the feedback.

that song is hot- keep it up kid.

thanks for the feedback conclusion...

uppin'.........

I liked this, I liked Breathe Better tho

iight... thanks for the feedback...

yur welcome I liked the authenticay of it

welll thanks again...

uppin' for more feedback...

ye I read this a while ago..but I aint crit it ...so ashamed :(

but it is REALLY good..sounds so realistic..and speaking true shit..

If i wasn't so cocky and full of myself I'd give this a 10

rating 9.9/10

thanks indeph... I'll get on that Default one soon... promise...

man this was pretty tight, you got skills, liekd the vocab and the multies, nice flow, didnt see a bar that stood out strong tho, but its was crazy...

thanks for the feedback.

now I know you are always looking in here so let me say..PM ME MY SIG YOU HO...sorry had to get that off my chest. lot of feedback..nice..next time you make an open mic you have to put in their how I get all the ladies at school cause i am so hot..LOL..see ya monday

^ no you really don't steve.

BTW... Congrats vp... post number 300 since you came back word.

100 replies to this open mic... it's been fun kids but I doubt I get anymore feedback. Thanks to everyone who voted on best open mic, whether you voted for me, Prem, or Indeph...

^ And you were wrong:thumbup:

^^^^ damn man........ go give feed on my SHIT!!! givin it to open mic of the month from like a few months ago!!!

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^^^ HEY, A Deals a Deal Indeph!!! \/ \/ \/ \/ \/ \/ \/ \/ \/ \/ \/ \/ \/ \/ \/

yeah... I have no Idea what you faggots are doing but yeah... uppin' for feedback bitches.

That Was Sick....i Love The Humor ....i Feel Like Maken Love To Your Vocabulary Cuz That Shyt Was So On Point....lmao...but Keep It Comen ....i Got Some Open Mics To So Rtf Please...~1~ 9/10

meh, i feel if you put this to audio, if would be more worth it....i couldn't really get into it, sorry bro

Didn't like the one line bars...Other than that, it was decent and would do MUCH better on an audio track than in here. It doesn't really grasp the peoples eyes, you need an attention grabber, comedy is still okay though.

I wish my drops got feed for a year straight. That would be dope.

i wish people would leave feed on my shit, persiod!

all i'll say sdis that this have to be good to get this many responses nothing much else to say keep up the good works

haha... damn y'all still leavin' feed... and Drakel, it's on Audio...

www.soundclick.com/robbymccallister

^I think that's it.

hmmmm I musta not read what these other peeps did... cuase 1st off ya verses were just too damned short... the hook was decent but it's easy to stay on topic with verses this short... and even then other than constant multies... I didn't see anything too impressive... yeah there is alot of vocab stuffed in... however un-neededly it's like you did it solely to impresss... and if you really want to get the point across the title implies... why in the hell would you use an extended vocab?

"y'alls lives...all while your alive"

^ that quite possible is the most redundant thing I've ever read... what is the alternative to kill them while their dead? ... *smh* yeah so I'm just not feeling this... it's too short, there are stupid segments in this, and I just expect better form someone callin' himself the OM king