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Voted For: Kesse

DRAKEL

nice drop....
a difficult topic in my opinion but you approached it well and remained on topic all the way through.....a good structure to ya piece, the flow to it was excellent.....a few little multies in the verse itself helped with that...ya vocabs was nice, the rhyme scheme itself was only basici n a couple of bars, but mostly it was very complex.....the imagery delivered was dope, you made a nice picture of the contrast between light and dark with some very nice metaphors in which you defined the light and dark opposites well, i definitely liked the closing four lines, they ended the piece real nice and put an all round good end to the topic........9/10


DRAMA QUEEN

also, a good drop....
you had a nice structure to your piece also, a good flow although not as fluid as Drakel's...couldn't see any multies, not a necessity but they do help the flow go better and add something extra to ya drop....you approached the topic well, put a different spin on it and you managed to stay on throughout, rhyme scheme was cool...more basic in places than it was complex but it was still nice....imagery was nice and some nice emotion in your piece as always....i was feelin the verse throughout, just feel ya could have been a little less basic with ya vocabs........7.5/10

OVERALL
nice drops from both.....
i feel that Drakel had the better flow, he added multies in that helped him there, his vocabs were more complex than drama queen's and i think what helped him is he took a more direct approach to the topic and did a verse that put a good image on the whole thing, whereas DQ took a more complex approach which is good, i just dont feel that she pulled it off as good as it could've been done......

so my vote: DRAKEL

RTF!!!! dizzee rascal battle - links in my sig!!!

Voted For: Kesse

drakel-this piece was perdy solid, i liked how you wrote it, it fell off at times with the flow but overall i was feelin the way you wrote it n your content, n dope way of putting the ending, props man...
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drama queen- i think you focused a lil to much on metaphoric value of your words n lost track of tellin something real
i got what you were trying to say but constantly your verse was jumpy n your ideas werent well rounded..
it was ok, but i was really feelin drakels drop the way he put things into perspective

This was feedback posted for Kesse
 

checkin polls fam.....good drop by both.....gl to ya bpth :thumbup:

whoa, did this ever take off, lol, nice to see......i'll get on RTF'in in a bit though, busy tonight.

Voted For: Kesse

DRAMA QUEEN-oooooooo I like your verse, the imaginary was decent, I loved it. The emotion didnt come out until the last verse, which was good, but i say use more throughout your whole verse. Nice I like the way you approach the topic and the flow was decent more poetic to me, but it was nice. The vocab you had was balance which was good. Add some meta'z into your imaginary next time...Overall=Good drop.


Keese- Alright i like your drop also, it lacked emotion, you need to work on that. Ok i like your imaginary so many details in your imaginary man. Nice creativity in your lines. I like the way you approach the topic, the "out-view" way. You came good. The flow was nice. Overall= Good drop.

Conclusion= Alright, this battle was decent in my eyes, but both lacked emotion. SO i guess i need to vote on imaginary, my votes goes to keese, cause he had more details in his imaginary, more clearer and eye-sight. DQ you had a good verse, but your imaginary Didnt come more detailed than Kesse, it would've been better if you came good with the emotion you'll get this battle for real, but your imagination wasn't detailed like kesse. soory.

V/KESSE