d.j em sce 2 40.00%
FlOw InTeLLiGeNt 3 60.00%

Voted For: d.j em sce

I'm going for d.j here.
dj- You had a nice deep piece, more complex and the structure was on point. Nice vocab not over done, and it flowed well.

flow-Nice piece, but too simple to me, good use of vocab and you told the story well. structure was good and appealing. But d.j. just had the edge.

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~Nice poem you two i couldn't vote, was too close.......... i deleted my explanation cuz this is a tie... so good luck.. 1

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Posts: 3,031
Joined: Feb 2004
From: sacramento
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Text Record: 46-11
Audio Record: 7-2
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alright my name is SEAN and her name is SHEA
(pronounced..SHAY)
we broke up and now we are back together forever....


Sean and Shea forever

Sentimental thoughts keep me reminiscing on the day we first met
Every thought attacked my emotions, but still I try not to forget
As our eyes locked I would soon believe in love at first sight
Not knowing my heart would be broken, I kept your smile bright

Approaching a new level in a relationship, it hurt once “WE” became no more
Now that the truth was spoken I was wounded in a way I had never felt before
Despite the demise to my first real relationship, you still are the one I adore

Sensations would almost immediately grow stronger day after day
However, I would hide my love but every night I would pray after Shea
Exiled from my own passion, I would shed tears before I would sleep
Awaiting a phone call that would guarantee Shea’s affection to keep

Formulating a love that will last forever, I set my soul for this mission
Obstacles lie ahead, but our love shall stop, as I await shea’s decision
Reasonable doubt lingers on, as the question remains in her mind
Extreme measures dwell in my midst, but love has left me blind,
Visions of eternal love wonder in a maze, so this I must confess
Ever since the first day, I did nothing for you but try my best
Real love is what we now have, Shea I thank you for saying yes



my SIG is not part of this poem but i wrote it just write now...it goes with this poem but if i added it i would exceed the number of lines i can use....


PS I LOVE MY GIRLFREIND
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Its good clean fun... but if you are beating off when you are sending me a PM, I don't wanna know about it!

he posted that in a thread made about masterbation..
nuff said

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Voted For: d.j em sce

Aight, this was a pretty dope battle
First things first, DJ, The whole scheme an creativity of ya Topic, was creative as hell, using your name an hers forever, an makin it all fit into place with the lines, thats dope, loved it, 9/10 for creativity an you kinda got my vote for that...

Flow, cause DJ's topical was somthin diffrent, he gets my vote, but you came hard, stayed on topic throughout, right on point for the mosy part, just wasnt as creative, so my vote goes too DJ, sorry homeboy

Both were deep an meaningful, but As i said many a times, DJ was a little more creative with his peice, so he gets my vote
No hate an try an return the favor Vs spektikul, only battle i got open lol,

Good lookin out y'all

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uppin for one more vote....................................

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uppping this bulll shit
and remeebr if i win then i get 5 million Rv money

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damn this song im listening to is mad nice.....lol tight ass lyrics.....

but yeah upppin this battle