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PrahJect 07-06-05 11:39 AM

upppin............................................ ...

Mad Dog 07-07-05 07:32 PM

Voted For: Daubs

Intermentals verse

IP:


Daubs's punches can be classified as WEAK-AND-POOR, your style type is BORE Your Threads coudln't be felt if they were SOLD in a FABRIC-STORE
^ for a start structure wack...fabric store punch i know it's been used so played...

You beating me is like TUPAC & BIGGIE resurrecting to do a VINYL You think you got a backbone? How when I just ripped out ya SPINAL
^ meh @ 2nd bar tupac and biggie played spinal ending ain't no punch personal not there wack middle bar


Daubs, these PUNCHES-HURT im like stomachs my CRUNCHES-SUBMERGE
Till your fill with a HURT AND BURN i leave this dude broken down in a stash like DUTCHES-N-HERBS
^ meh closer structure sorted itself here but punch wasn't ooo material jus focussed on multies and contrary to belief...multies don't win battles unless backed up wit punches and personals...which clearly weren't in this verse at all

Overall
Honestly...not feelin it structure was mad newb and the capping of the multies wasn't needed perhaps something simpler like "---" woulda been better...punches and personals were sacrificed for rhymes which was a weakness...overall dissapointing verse

Daubs verse

I have 'time' for crazy patients, so 'watch' this pshyco enter..
And i fucked with millions(milans) of brains so....................
.............................................no wonder Inter's Mental!!
^ nice flip on his name better opener IMO coulda toned down on the self-g side though and not feelin the 3 line lay out on bars but better than previous verse

Like firing faulty greetings, all you caterpult is insults..
And inter, you wouldn't be "straight G".....................
.........................................With bad exam results!!
^ nice good punch flowed well liked it

Inter man, your a has been who never even had it..
And you couldnt take my hitman status.................
................................If you were a crack addict!!
^ Closer = meh flowed better i'd say but weakest bar outta 3 definitely IMO

Overall
Better verse better layout better punches name flip was good 3 line bar thing i'm not too keen on but it was better than his layout yea piss easy win IMO you should really be walking this IMO have no idea why you ain't though

V/Daubs...RTF in my battle vs E.C within 3 days or vote removed

P.S Intermental do NOT remove this vote yourself because in all honesty...this was an honest vote i had no prob wit the vote you dropped in my battle vs E.C us need to clear that but i think you need to tone down the rhyming and focus on punches/personals more then try to blend it all together

PrahJect 07-08-05 03:55 AM

Yeah why would I remove it? Its an honest vote not a hate one...uppin

PrahJect 07-08-05 09:10 PM

upppin cmon people.................................this battle been up for 40 days....cmon..will RTF

PrahJect 07-10-05 11:37 AM

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Daubs 07-10-05 11:39 AM

How the fuck is this still open...

RV IZ LAZY BEOTHCETTES!!!!!

B. Magik 07-10-05 12:29 PM

Voted For: Daubs

Intermental:

Daubs's punches can be classified as WEAK-AND-POOR, your style type is BORE Your Threads coudln't be felt if they were SOLD in a FABRIC-STORE

Kinda played, but pretty good

You beating me is like TUPAC & BIGGIE resurrecting to do a VINYL You think you got a backbone? How when I just ripped out ya SPINAL

Blah

Daubs, these PUNCHES-HURT im like stomachs my CRUNCHES-SUBMERGE
Till your fill with a HURT AND BURN i leave this dude broken down in a stash like DUTCHES-N-HERBS

Stretched...decent

Daubs:

I have 'time' for crazy patients, so 'watch' this pshyco enter..
And i fucked with millions(milans) of brains so....................
.............................................no wonder Inter's Mental!!

Good wordplay, nice personal and punch

Like firing faulty greetings, all you caterpult is insults..
And inter, you wouldn't be "straight G".....................
.........................................With bad exam results!!

I thought the worst grade you could get was an F? Maybe its different in the UK...Decent wordplay

Inter man, your a has been who never even had it..
And you couldnt take my hitman status.................
................................If you were a crack addict!!

Not feeling this

Overall, Daubs gets the vote for the better verse...He was more consistent with punches that were creative, connected, and hit, and he had better wordplay and personals...Intermental, not a bad verse from you man, but you just got out done on this one.

Daubs RTF on my battle with CALI within 2 days or I will have to remove this vote

Thanx

PrahJect 07-10-05 04:57 PM

upppin yo daubs this turnin out to be a decent battle dawg

Daubs 07-10-05 05:01 PM

Ye man.
Up....................................... :thumbup:

PrahJect 07-16-05 10:35 AM

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Daubs 07-31-05 09:49 PM

still open........................................

Macreep 07-31-05 10:27 PM

Voted For: Daubs

Daubs's punches can be classified as WEAK-AND-POOR, your style type is BORE Your Threads coudln't be felt if they were SOLD in a FABRIC-STORE
^^^OK.....lil on the uncreative side....4/10
You beating me is like TUPAC & BIGGIE resurrecting to do a VINYL You think you got a backbone? How when I just ripped out ya SPINAL
^^^no.........1/10
Daubs, these PUNCHES-HURT im like stomachs my CRUNCHES-SUBMERGE
Till your fill with a HURT AND BURN i leave this dude broken down in a stash like DUTCHES-N-HERBS
^^meh............4/10

Ight...you started with a good punchline.But then...ya last 2 punches spoke about yourself too much.It's all about wordplay and metas.Ya were a little on the uncreative side and kinda basic.NO hate...just my opinion

I have 'time' for crazy patients, so 'watch' this pshyco enter..
And i fucked with millions(milans) of brains so....................
.............................................no wonder Inter's Mental!!
^^^This was weak...that set-up was just gay....3/10
Like firing faulty greetings, all you caterpult is insults..
And inter, you wouldn't be "straight G".....................
.........................................With bad exam results!!
^^huh...exams go from A-F....3/10
Inter man, your a has been who never even had it..
And you couldnt take my hitman status.................
................................If you were a crack addict!!
^^best bar in this battle 6/10

After the 1st 2 bars....I thought ya lost...but ya came back in the last bar.I don't like the 2nd bar because exams go from A-F....not to G.SO that line made no sence.THe opener was shit.Milan/million doesn't sound identical.Simialar...yes...but not identical.

Vote-Daubs

Vote in my battle against Un-Fuck-Widable

B To The D 08-01-05 04:47 PM

Voted For: Daubs

flow-inter liked his betta daubs seemed a little stretched
puches-daubs took this wid betta an funnier punches
personals-daubs
multis-inter obviously
originality-daubs
wordplay-Daubs good wordplay set ups


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