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Voted For: Young Dollar

Ya claim you Exeed all expectations when it comes to skill
But when it comes to rap battles ya couldnt come up to 4Fil
^^^Nice personal.....6/10
And I can tell you really got this rap Game bent up and twisted
Just cuz ya gota Banks Mixtape, Dont mean ya Lyricaly Gifted
^^OK......lil on the weaker side...5/10
Homie you aint really real like Saint Nick livin in the North Pole
Ya workin Salvation Army shifts is da only way ya own my Sole(Soul)
^^wordplay involving soul/sole is played....but it was a personal still....5/10
N you just some fat boy in ya mommas basement out of the states
Get liposucktion,Mix wit coke,smuggel it in,still cant slang ya weight
^^Nice flowing here...good punch....6/10
Can't beleive you said you kick up dust and cough till ya stir up spit
U can be CuriousGeorge N toss monkey fetus Nstill not stir up hot shit
^^meh...ain't feelin it...3/10
Like you got black bags to your lips, Talkin trash aint gonna get that Far
Because for Dollar, I got you on Smash, Like broken cars at a Junk Yard
^^OK.....6/10

Good verse here.Stayed consistant with the decent punches throughout the whole verse.Structure was good...flow was smooth through the verse.A lotta personals...so that's a good thing.Only bar below decent was probably that curious george one.

Hes got his first note, decides to save it into the "PIGGY"
The child's lost.........this battle too, like "babe pig in the city"
^^basic and gay...Babe?....3/10
playin his coins safe....................... livin life as a gamble
He has lost it all,please free fone "1-800 MY LIFE'S A SCANDAL
^^ite I guess....4/10
He Prays, & wants to be like "50Cent" dreams to become huge
he aint even "half that" and still "lives in the Cube"
^^umm....y u say he wants to be like 50?..explain next time...or it's a fake personal?...3/10
"living outside the square" he trys to become famous
the only thing seperatin this child from Fame is his Anus
^^NO....NO...NO!!!....2/10
Like Donald Trump says ....... "dollar you're fired"
ooooops i made a mistake the kid wasnt even hired
^*sigh*...u set it up nicely...but the punch sucked
despite the man's fate he never be a "young buck"
"straight outta trashville" he dont have nuff money for his Bus
^^NO...2/10
Winnin' for him is like a streak at the lottery
"and the winner is" young dollar for the best role of Comedy
^^Wtf you goin with this verse...2/10
see you comin at me is like the dollar witout the sign
the kid's "bankrupt" i "loaned" him the verse hes about to type
^^not much of a punch...1/10

OK...flow was ite.Structure...get rid of the capitals and (")...just makes it look newbish.The punches was the main problem.As opposed to Dollar's...you were all over the place.His lines were based off personals...ur's was just outta no-where.LIke..why you say he's poor or wanna be like 50?....do you have a link or sumtin to show it..or is it fake personal/generic diss?

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