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B To The D 08-25-05 05:28 AM

man ima get dis closed i aint in t.t.i no more.......

B To The D 08-25-05 02:05 PM

fuck it upping..........................................

L.E 08-25-05 02:58 PM

Voted For: Apostrophe

This was a weak battle...

Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*

Played...4/10

I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**

Worded very awkwardly...not really feelin it...4/10

Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest****

Didn't even really make sense...forced multies...4/10

.:: Finish It ::.
Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics

Your best bar...7/10

A'ight basically put...You need to come up with more creative punches man...multies don't win battles...punches win battles. Just keep workin on it...if you use multies AND punches...that turns out way better. I also saw a lotta forced multies...try to avoid that.

who is this herb?? ur rec's nice.. but watch him get spanked this time..
and i know your eagor to get the win.. but kid im not doctor frankenstein..

Meh.....5/10

UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'

Decent, good wordplay, otherwise played...6/10

i'll strap on my kicks.. and just put the steal toed boots to your back..
and you could have some construction shoes and still be toe tally wack..

Nice metaphore and wordplay... 8/10

F.uck Y.our I.ntelligence shit kid you know that we are next to none...
So BQ give me a holla back girl.. cause its no doubt i've already won....

Meh closer.....5/10

Overall this was a weak battle...but Apostrophe gets my vote because he had slightly better punches...no hate...elevate both of you.

Rile1 08-25-05 03:35 PM

Voted For: -UNF-

Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*

rofl good punch good opener should have used a better personal

I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**

nice lmao..

Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest****

could have been worded better but connected well

.:: Finish It ::.
Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics
rofl nice punch


you had some aight personals but you need work on that area the punches
all seemed to connect but you dont need to use as many multis try
using less multis it makes the verse go off and makes it sound complicated
ya know?i think you got this but you should word things better like your
last bar needs wording better and you definitaly use too many multis lol it makes
the flow go off and it makes the readed lose the track

vs


who is this herb?? ur rec's nice.. but watch him get spanked this time..
and i know your eagor to get the win.. but kid im not doctor frankenstein..

nice wordplay but didnt connect well

UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'

rofl good punch connected

i'll strap on my kicks.. and just put the steal toed boots to your back..
and you could have some construction shoes and still be toe tally wack..

this woz aight but bit off flow good wordplay though

F.uck Y.our I.ntelligence shit kid you know that we are next to none...
So BQ give me a holla back girl.. cause its no doubt i've already won....

self glorifiying n y have u got b/q in ya verse


you had a alright verse but most of your bars had self glorifiying in them i some
way or other you should try and use more punches concentrate on them and dont just
do self glorifiying your verse seemed to be full of ideas which werent worded
properly or needed a better punchline you should work on personals as the only
personals you used was played out as rec personals are played out and i wouldnt
really class them as personals but good drop both of yu and elevate

.Ike. 08-25-05 08:44 PM

Voted For: Apostrophe

Apo...

who is this herb?? ur rec's nice.. but watch him get spanked this time..
and i know your eagor to get the win.. but kid im not doctor frankenstein..
LMAO...pretty good wordplay here...7/10

UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'
Nice....6/10

i'll strap on my kicks.. and just put the steal toed boots to your back..
and you could have some construction shoes and still be toe tally wack..
i like this...maybe could worded it better....6/10

F.uck Y.our I.ntelligence shit kid you know that we are next to none...
So BQ give me a holla back girl.. cause its no doubt i've already won....
i REALLY like the wordplay...but there wasnt really that good of a punch behind it...5/10

24/40


UNF

Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*
ehh...you mad multies...but thats it...weak punch 3/10

I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**
Decent....5/10

Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest****
LMAO...8/10

Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics
umm no...horrid closer...2/10

18/40



Apo just had an extremely more consistent verse....some of UNFs bars were just all multies and no real punch behind it...Apo had better wordplay...and just more complexity in his verse....although UNFs verse LOOKED to be more complex...in actuality it wasnt....and the structure on APos was better..

so overall i give this to APO for better structure, better punchlines, wordplay, and an overall more consistent verse

BloodVenom 08-25-05 09:18 PM

Voted For: -UNF-

Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*
6...some filler in here..decent multis in set-up..good personal
I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**
5...set-up had a forced multi...but a good punch again
Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest****
4....this was ite...but multis seemed to be off the punch again
.:: Finish It ::.
Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics
2...funny you say "finish it" when this is one of your worst bars

First thing you need to fix is your structure.It was good damn horrible.Some punches were really good and creative like the topical one in the first bar.But some was just..blah..like the last 2 ones.The 2nd to last bar..with the A thing...it woulda been better with some better wording.The set-up n shit was like...off.I notice you have too much filler.But overall..a decent verse with some good punches.

who is this herb?? ur rec's nice.. but watch him get spanked this time..
and i know your eagor to get the win.. but kid im not doctor frankenstein..
2...why in the world would you say he has a good rec?..punch was weak
UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'
4...better than the previous one
i'll strap on my kicks.. and just put the steal toed boots to your back..
and you could have some construction shoes and still be toe tally wack..
3...toe tally whack...horrible!!
F.uck Y.our I.ntelligence shit kid you know that we are next to none...
So BQ give me a holla back girl.. cause its no doubt i've already won....
1...now your self glorifing :cussing:

Best thing you had goin in that verse was the structure.The rest was BLAh.I absolutely hated that 1st line...why would you say "ur rec's nice' :nono: ?I understand you said he's gonna get spanked this time..but man...don't give props.And that last bar with the Bq shit...self glorifing.

Vote-UNF

BloodVenom 08-25-05 09:22 PM

LMAO!!....I swear...I may have never seen as many votes get DQ as the amount in this one!!

Cocaine 08-25-05 11:23 PM

cause the kid fucking DR's hop off his nuts faggot..

Reflekt 08-26-05 05:47 AM

Voted For: -UNF-

Let me break this down


-UNF-
Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*
3/5 it was an ok personal
I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**
3/5 not too good..coulda been more creative
Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest****
4/5 i was feelin this line..made me laugh

.:: Finish It ::.
Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics
3/5 ok wordplay..not really feelin it as a good closer

13/20 - You had consistent personals which is always good in a battle. A little wordplay at the end. Your flow was a little weird. You had some good multis also. The only thing I would say is that your lines I felt were a little streched. And the personals weren't the greatest but they worked alright for me.


Apostrophe
who is this herb?? ur rec's nice.. but watch him get spanked this time..
and i know your eagor to get the win.. but kid im not doctor frankenstein..
2/5 Yes I understand the frankenstein connection but it really didnt hit hard at all
UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'
4/5 had me laughing
i'll strap on my kicks.. and just put the steal toed boots to your back..
and you could have some construction shoes and still be toe tally wack..
2/5 wasnt feeling the wordplay
F.uck Y.our I.ntelligence shit kid you know that we are next to none...
So BQ give me a holla back girl.. cause its no doubt i've already won....
1/5 really wack closer


9/20 - You had some decent wordplay. The thing that I was missing from you is personals. I really didn't see any. You did have a good punch with the dill doe line. Your flow was good and your structure had no problems.




-UNF- wins this battle due to his ability to come out with consistent personals.


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