upppiuppin uppin

that was very good in the beginning great multies but then you started to fall off but it was still good 9.3/10

hmm uppin......

yea this is an old OM but can someone new read it? lol

nice drop
 

yo yo this piece was tight,,,,
from beginin ta end caught my attenction i read i twice
keep that up an if ya feel up to it we can collab sometime
ive been off line for a few days been mixing it up in my studio but i gotta
bit to spit im a lay a few down for ya all in open mic...................CB83 HOLLA?

Thanks for getting me all scared to go to bed now! Meanie! The imagery was amazing, I could really picture those dreams inside my mind (and I fear I'll have similar ones tonight). The vocabulary you used was impeccable, adapted to the content of the piece and had a good balance between basic and complex. You managed to portray the sense of confusion and the struggle the person's going through. You let the readers get into his mind which I definately liked.Had your flow on lock and the structure was good. I absolutely love your writing style, dopeness!

Lmao @ you upping this old shit btw...

DQ

lol no problem.. and thanx ya.. more feed will be very appreciated

more feedback plz...

up up and awaaaaaaaaaaaay

Damn... That shit is str8 up fire, man... Awesome flow...Vocab is really good...Metaphors all over the place in this piece...Strusture was good... Easily 10/10...And you should be voted best open mic... Lyrikally no one has done anthing better that ive seen... good shit... ~1~

hahaha thanx man...

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The structure was great the vocab you used was nice i enjoyed this peice cause you wrote on a deep subject. heard good reviews about you, im looking at your previous work and i think you have skills.
please return the fav.
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183663
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183659

thanx man.. uppin for more feed

niiiiiice, very deep and didn't go off topic... i like your style too.. like that last line too, but this was very consistent... but um considering your record is 0-38... that was good... lol idk what that whole record thing is all about but it was hott... rtf