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Voted For: Premanition

aigth these where both good...

FINAL: you had a great story about energy...but it was liek oyu where defiining energy rather then making a topical about it....although it was very good it did not reall grab my attention...as i was reading it i felt lost..i got real bored....now your structre was super stretched,,,,your vocab was nice but then agian nothing cought my attention..

premenition..
you cought my attention formt he get go..BANG.....that got me wanting to read it ....it was hela nice..i loved your ending..damn you structure was also nice.....vocab was nice....good shit.....you just had my attention fromt he begining....god shit

all in all preminition got this win becusse he kept my focuse...

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