uppin................i gots to do....what i gots to do.............

This was feedback posted for final
 

topicals are dumb, people should stop with them all together... and this is feedback for both not just this cat.

uppin for votes on this battle..........................

rofl at picture perfect...the man in your sig did topicals dumbass

Voted For: final

wow this was a good piece... both came very hard.. i really liked this, both of urs flow was good.. untrace you fell of at points. also the emotion and imagery were nice i was feeling final's just a tad bit more.. untraceable your verse was fire... the only things i thought u were a bit off on were the over used vocab.. i hate it. i mean hate it when vocab is overused .. it just makes ur topical sound to stiff.. also i didnt like the fact that on points your flow was off.. as to where final's flow was on point the whole way thru as well as his emotion and imagery.. so no hate vote goes to Final

Voted For: final

Untraceable-Meh not your best shit but i've seen better. Ok mane you got imagianary down fam...shit was good. Emotion i didn't feel any that's strong mane...I mean you had...but it wasn't strong enough. Vocab was good. The flow was good. The angle you approached in this topical battle is good. But the emotion was kinda was the weak point of your verse, but good imaginary.


Final-Ok mane, You had some good ass imaginary, again like untraceable he's weakest and the same as your's final emotion was the weakest thing in your verses. Imaginary was good and decent final.


Overall=this battle was dope, both head's putted down some good verses. Ok untraceable nice imaginary i felt the image in my mind as i was reading your verse, But you got to put down "Harder" Emotions. Final you too put down some harder emotions, but you had a decent imaginary and that's what made me voted for you. Final shit was complex picture pefect verse. Untraceable no hate but final came harder with the imaginary.

Pz

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Voted For: final

Alright this was probably the best topical battle i have seen in a while so im going to break this one down extensively.

Final:

Good verse, you stayed on topic and stayed consistent the whole way through.

Vocabulary: In some places it was great, In others it was nonexistant. I definately feel you could spend a little more time in this area.

Emotion/Imagery: Two of the most important things in a topical battle, And you had them in your piece. The emotion was definately felt by the reader, you told a story which can sometimes be hard to do, so you intertwined imagery with the story, and it gave more impact. When someone can pull everything together it ends up a terrific piece.

Wordplay,Structure,Multies,Consistency: Your wordplay i would have to say was pretty good, you made sure that the bars rhymed and some people fuck that up with big words, thinking the rhyme when they just sound alike so good job there. Structure was OK could have been better. Multies were perfect, not alot but there were a couple just like i do. Dont ever overflow a topical with multies it kills the feeling. As i said before you stayed consistent all the way through, stuck on topic. Good piece.

Overall : 9.2/10

Untraceable:

Vocabulary: You definately took this category, i mean just read the first 10 lines and look at all the vocab there that went good with the topic.

Emotion/Imagery: This is where you went downhill as i stated before. These are the two most important aspects of a topical. And your imagery was sub par. And your emotion didnt satnd out like how i know you can make it.

Wordplay,Structure,Multies,Consistency: Well your wordplay was practically perfect, but you did one thing that really made you lose this battle... And that is the over-use of multies. They are uneeded in a topical. I can understand a few multies but basically every other line is chocked full of them. It killed your flow, and the structure was by far better, and you were about tied with final in the creativity and consistency areas.

Overall: 8.3/10

Vote: Final

Great Battle

Please return the favor with an honest vote on any battle in my sig. TY