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yeah im not trying to be a dick, but whats a heavyweight match without the champ?
not a heavyweight match thats for sure..........and i happen to think those votes were just as valid as his............to each his own opinion |
It just sucked you guys didn't get many votes, 5 isn't a lot for the battle when most here get a lot more than that, but I guess you guys should have dropped earlier then.
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^^yea wered earlier more votes u get............
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I was out with my girlfriend all week. I'm super inactive cause I'm chillin with her before she moves off to go to uni..
Meh, I'll probably drop when Skriptz drops.. And Hotty, I still wuv you don't worry../I think my punch was better..;).. |
yep cuz i dropped early n im winnin like 9-0:D
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yea im never droppin early again.....lol i got a black eye now^^^......lol
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lol i know.....n y u got a black eye???
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o forget me u on about mi punch!!!!
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fuck all that shit.... yo trust make sure i dont go agianst sum pud next week
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what's a pud? lol
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Aiyo, anyone give me feedback on this verse i'm going to use at RB? I'm facing someone dope as hell. This is just a draft and a couple personals might not make sense, but here it goes.
Fuck you and ya small weener, my raps prove that I'm meaner N' ya school never took ya on fieldtrips, so i'm taking ya to the cleaners Better spend time on concepts or I'll slash ya eye sockets But if ya have a brain dump, world pollution will skyrocket Winning? You can't cop it, this joke will say what the worst is What has no beginning, middle, or end? A doughnut and quote's verses Kid's fillin' with curses, he's a sick fuck and not one to scare Fag only let the cat outta the bag to kidnap a little girl in there You n' wackness compare, seems tokens in arcades need order N' if your the alien attack champ... ...............why are so many mexicans crossin' the border Ya fucking wack, yeah I said it, ya dropped ass n' you'll regret it Bitch, I could make a monkey out of you, but I don't wanna take the credit N' ho ya better go n' roam or I'll be clippin' ya dome But dawg if ya cry wolf, remember ya girl will run home N' That's how it goes, you say peaceful? I think ya bluffin In fact i know ya like war, cuz ya good for ABSOLUTELY nothing Clown you ain't good for something, not even a good rhyme scheme N' ya fall's been in the brewers so long, it'd bankrupt the team You suck it would seem, and Kap and Born already made it clear And I quote Quote:
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nice... some off dat is real nice there was some fingz i dint get but people over at rb would... you shudda posted 1 of his battles to see what we can expect them compare em...
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Alright, well which lines did you like specifically and which do you think I need to fix up a lot or drop? Here's his most recent verse against someone else... also filled with some personals that won't make sense, but this shows what kinda writer he is.
more lines dont mean ya nice, i dont get what your point is but thanks for the info.. ..now do us a favor & get the link, click it, n' join it Quote got things under control, my punches'll threaten him bitch i'm behind the wheel while Jay Walkers under the rest of em' i own you, i've had it w/ you dumb fucks n' skanks bitch, you're only down w/ the rest cuz i'm movin up in ranks know n' diss you by name? nah, im just testin ya health i'll refer to you in abbreviations & have you double guessin yourself JW .. talkin shit? man fuck this veteran imposter & btw, i've had the last word w/ literally half of your roster you wanna talk about LW? buncha fuckin lightweights for your info .. ..ya leader begged me to join after I put him in the right place thought about it a bit for spit, just to shut up the dude & after this .. i'ma be the Last Word in ya sig - n' I aint joinin ya crew sayin i got no life, you're fuckin ironic, dont even try to fight it somehow you managed to drop 30 lines before i could sign on and realize it i'ma bring ya whole life to the floor, ya date total dikes wreck ya career & have Jay W. down like I was a motor bike i hate wastin lines on wack heads, there aint nothin worse didn't wanna spend 30 on you in the first place.. ..& that was BEFORE i read your verse fuck this fakin flake, i'll grip ya fuckin neck and crank it & have dudes mistake you for Lynus the way i'll leave you attatched to a blanket call us prejudice, call us racist, either way u should flee bitch - you'll never fit in here, except foreign ya own league you w/ a girl? nah, those views have long been tinted & how you expect jay to get w/ the program.. ..when not one person in it is interested shit, you were born a cripple, you come bored n' wack & i'd cut you from the computer if I could find the ambilical chord in the back half ya verse was filler bitch, i could stitch 15 staples up it in the future, dont try to go fuckin 30 if u aint capable of it |
heres what i think...
Fuck you and ya small weener, my raps prove that I'm meaner N' ya school never took ya on fieldtrips, so i'm taking ya to the cleaners nice opener, but you could get it fit fit into the concept of cleaners more if u get me? Better spend time on concepts or I'll slash ya eye sockets But if ya have a brain dump, world pollution will skyrocket ^^ lol i liekd this bar, hit him hard Winning? You can't cop it, this joke will say what the worst is What has no beginning, middle, or end? A doughnut and quote's verses lol, original... like it Kid's fillin' with curses, he's a sick fuck and not one to scare Fag only let the cat outta the bag to kidnap a little girl in there lmao, nice concept and u flipped the phrase good You n' wackness compare, seems tokens in arcades need order N' if your the alien attack champ... ...............why are so many mexicans crossin' the border lol, anuva original concept flipped nicely Ya fucking wack, yeah I said it, ya dropped ass n' you'll regret it Bitch, I could make a monkey out of you, but I don't wanna take the credit i dont really get this one N' ho ya better go n' roam or I'll be clippin' ya dome But dawg if ya cry wolf, remember ya girl will run home lol simple but effective N' That's how it goes, you say peaceful? I think ya bluffin In fact i know ya like war, cuz ya good for ABSOLUTELY nothing nice punch here..... getting back on track Clown you ain't good for something, not even a good rhyme scheme N' ya fall's been in the brewers so long, it'd bankrupt the team not really feelni this, dno y tho somethnig missing You suck it would seem, and Kap and Born already made it clear And I quote Quote: Originally Posted by Born To Kill Quote Loses ... so why the fuck you still here? decent closure, nice punch ight there was some real nice punches in there and a couople that didnt make sense or i wasnt feeling, but other than that i would think you could take the battle with that verse i liked it alot good job man |
Thanks for the detailed feed man, I appreciate it.
Btw, Ya fucking wack, yeah I said it, ya dropped ass n' you'll regret it Bitch, I could make a monkey out of you, but I don't wanna take the credit What I'm saying is basically I don't want to make him a monkey and have people think it was me. I'm saying he's already a monkey without my help. I think it makes sense and doesn't need rewording, but anyone else not get it? The brewers line is referring to the Milwaukee brewers, but maybe it's a bit forced and I'll drop that bar and remove it with something else. Anymore feedback? |
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