manip what did u think of me?

VS trooper in LCB:

the only wars you've caused is no worse than bites from a mosquito//
funny though...it's more bloods than lines the way this pussy flows//
you disappoint me...you'll fail like the very last group of kakistocracy//
war addict...i take aversion seriously, like the American Democracy//
how he lost three games remains mystery...like his deadly tendenciez//
kid's missing...fell through cyberspace faster than sitcom industries//
kid's shit for brains...Da Vinci has started your own suicidal fame//
bitch look like he gets around...too bad he was never in this game//
cat's got no inner-strength...frankly we all knew you were terrible//
close fight with ArchAngel's one thing...but this is unacceptable//
"fuck you pay me", his misleading slogan to confront Kerry and GB//
guy's put his life to the risk, and his lack of proficience is amazing//
fluked into the army...by Arabian monkeys in cadets was you molested//
kid's been tested...it's your aiming skills that can't be manifested//

this is the only verse i can find, i'd like feedback on this Plz, holla at me through PM if i can be in

ALL yall sighn to ABB we bout to take over E-A-SKI young one more to come we gone have a fucken army who gon be wit it.

plutonium i liked ur verse.sum nice complexity in ya vocab.........very good flow,
nice multies........
only thing id say negative is maybe ur punches maybe were a lil soft.
by that i mean i felt sum of ur lines were tryin too much on vocab n complexity n maybe lacked a lil kick.

overall though i did like it a lot..........so u def in........

roster

MANIPULATION
DANGEROUSMYNDLUNTIC
ILL-GRAMMATIX
RED BULL
ALBATROSS
MENTAL MURDEROUS
PLUTONIUM

uppin 4 one gud tryout
only 1 more person needed......

oh sorry.........

mjgreen.u had gud structure and flow, ok vocab.........
basics were solid........
but ass i said ur rhymes were not hard......i wanna see a battle verse or a diss...

feel free to holla back wit sumthin harder if u want....
but i felt u wernt as gud as the others on the roster....but hey holla back n prove me wrong
peace...

ill grammatix.fluid bouncd coz she thought she was joinin a "better" crew i think.i dunno,but woteva we still cool so.......

iight im back again....

take my open mic as a tryout...hope its better..........y'all lemme know


peace


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ok Mental Murderous is out now......tryin 4 other crews n e way....
fuck him.from wot ive seen of him,hes an ignorant shit n e way......

ima put u in yyvone cos i know u cool.n aint no crew jumper..

aiight

u on tha roster..........

1 more needed uppin..

lol

i'm an ignorant shit.. because i left this crew :(

you`re gonna put him in cos you want your crew forum.. you aint serious.. this crew wont last..

lol .. your mad because i left this crew.. can you blaim me? how long did i join.


& lmfao @ ya fake pic's... i messaged that gurl from liverpool.. and she said she has no idea what i`m talking about.

nah im puttin HER in coz i know she cool...that counts for summert,u need members that gonna stay 4 a lil while at least.......

spose i was mad u left tha crew....but its like wots the point of sayin u gon b in,then jump b4 the forums even up....woteva n e way.

as 4 the pics......why talk shit????.......wow, wot cos sumone says they fake n u jump on there dick?....very intelligent........

I was told to come here by Manipulation................Im down fo da crew holla back

oooopppppps......^^^real sorry dawg....i thought u were sumone else......
drop a tryout by all means.but i cnt put u in.

sorry man,,,my bad.

i'm rippin' blazin' viet for fun i don't need rewrds, so fuck-prizes
until i met this bitch i didn't know they made negative cup-sizes!(lol)
this dude is played; reciting recycled lines shows this viet-lost
i always "pay for what i break", so how much does your neck-COST?!
you ain't no murderer man, this dude-will-lie
cuz you killed NOBODY, that means you "commited suicide"(think!)
stupid bitch, you tryin' too hard, this is a battle-of-wits
your creative juices ain't workin' they always 'call-in-sick'
i don't wanna hear your constand babbling, your talk-is-just-soft
we must be battlin' in dodger stadium, cuz this is just a walk-in-the-park

Yeah i know you saw that KO manipulation lol and that wasnt my best........ill try out hold up......

damn you are a newbie gettin ready to get smashed,
i knew i was goin to KO you even before we clashed,
should have thought about what you did you responded too fast,
homie dont even know what biting is,
only was he gonna win this battle is if is cut and paste's point and cliks and uses my shit,
cause im too dope to lose and my rhymes are too clean,
only way he gonna feel dope is if he touches my rhyme on the screen,
he claim he a soulja but he fake like saleen,
but he dont know im the real solja,
im to good to lose my name should have told ya,
with that christ you walk beside you still cant be a winner,
cause im that christ you cant beat me you tha sinner.....................................I KO'd christsidesoulja wit dis..........Peayce

hmmmm...i say it was ok... definitely need to fix the structure and come up with some wittier lines... ya styles more direct so kats on this site is gonna herb you cuz you don't use a lot of metaphors... show us what you can do with some metaphors... don't have to be a battle.... just drop some ill shit