Hmmmmm Dopium I'm feeling 2-faced right now, meaning I can say yes, but the other side of my brain is saying no. Your Imaginary is cool, needs to elevate on Emotion, your structure is ok, learn how to put puntuations like commas and all the other stuff cause you asdgjlak;dsgjad s;lfgj. Ending a line with a period, that's telling me "Ok he's finished with that Line" but on the next Line you have the same theme, that's what Commas for, if you have the same theme then put commas by at the end of the line, so therefore what I want you to do is

alg;adjgla;ksdjg,
adgnja;lkjgjlk;a.

^^ Like that, but if your describing the same theme, pleae feel free to

adg;ljajd;glkj,
gal;kdsgjakdg,
adsg;jlakdsjgg,

Ya know? And Your imaginary is ok, but it needs to be more detailed, that's like me saying

"HEY I WENT ON A VACATION"
"HOW WAS IT?"
"COOL"
That's it?...You want more details, feel me?

Elevate on Vocab, Don't use ALOT of vocab just another words to express a Basic word, like a synonyms. Use a Thesaurus for that. Thesarus.com

Hmmm Your Concept is pretty Basic, it's pretty predictable. I want you to take a word and another word that is TOTALLY the Opposite or a random word and then blend them together to make one big giagantic Idea, and write a verse about it. I got this lesson from Atticus, currently trying to elevate on revising, Yes revising is what you need to do too so get @ Atticus for that, but anyway try this

Tree-Soup

^^ Blend them two words together, how is it Link/common with eachother. This a good lesson for Metaphors too.

Hmm That's all I have for you right now boo, so hmmm Get @ Me once you done these things.

Bye.

-Lola Cruez

yea thats why i asked if its 50 50 to let me in and so i can get elavation help cus to be honest i need help and i elavate alot when someones helpin me lola

cus Dv and alot of people say im elavating slow but if someone was coo enough to sit with me and take time to help me elavate then it should be cake so Lola can I join A.I and be in elavation part of crew or whatever? :thumbup:

Cool, well I don't know what to say. Carm.A well get @ You with her Opinion.

Well If it's Cool with DV, then yeah but you'll have to work hard. First thing first


To become a good writer you'll have to make love with a person named "English" :)

LOOOL Sigged...

does the other person get on usally?

I ain't got prob with him joinin but like Lola said, we'll have to work with em :hump:

I talked to Lola...she said you need more work so did Carm.A

Dopium sorry i have to no in joining.

^CS accepted the call-out btw

ooh word you interested in doing topical on that battle.

Yup, definitely

so charm u dont care if i join cus like i said if i do lolas gonna sit down with me and help me out like weekly assignments

aight i will put you in charge for that crew battle...

BTW get on aim

I am on AIM foo lmao

charm so wats up did u get the message I wrote up top at all? :huh:

her name is Carm.

where the fuck do u get a h from?

:wtf: lol oops my mistake.

theres a AI sig. OH IM New at photoshop so what you think of it? :huh:

Ight fam so what you think.

am i able to join AI?

nope .

it aint ur decision. :bored:

nice sig^^.....

coo coo thanks fam umm so do you guys know if im in or not cus im also runnin for cs atm too and im seein which one accepts me first. :thumbup:

give it up dickheads lol