lol,.man you are confuzed...lol....ill get at ya laters....
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murcinal your in...........pm me or fi-del......

ight yo i wanna tryout here. Da Vinci asked me so much before so heres some shit i tried i got bad imagery because of writing so much. i dont usually write so much but its for a tourney on rb so heres the verse

Running Water..
As the water runs smoothly I began to run Roughly
It seems as if I’m being chased by everyone around Me
All the pain just feels like god is bowling on my Soul
Lots tell lies, its hard not knowing I cant achieve my Goal
As I reminisce it seems like I aint moving Occupations
Its hard to tell, surely its hard proving my Frustrations
I held in the pain enough, its about time I shed a Tear
Cant this misery just stop, at least loves ahead of my Fear
Surely I will break and cry, even if there’s no Relation
If I don’t watch myself, the bad will hit & show Frustration
But no matter what the water never pushes me Harder
I’ll be defending myself cause I got the key to my Armor
All the lies can be lies, I’m still going to act Sarcastic
It seems like a habit, I cant surpass it and react Erratic
Hopefully I could get help with my troubles and Fears
Surpass my peers, stuck in doubles without a Career
Being 14 with parents that got Issues, dads on Welfare
Now he’s saying he has to move back to Ontario is Unfair
Moms trying to get money that he doesn’t even Got
Going to court, I know dad will win but thats a Thought
As the water runs down the stream I begin to Scream
People say im a fiend, well I wanna win cause im Extreme
Lots of lies but some truth but nothing is ever Relinquished
When I think my thoughts vanish, I seem to never Finish
No matter how hard I try my best to get good and Elevate
Someone always says don’t bother, even if I could Relate
No matter what I’ll never stop even if im covered in Hate
I’m sick of the critical statements, were the hell is Fate!
I tried to run, now I understand all this damn Confusion
Well I came up to a conclusion, stay tall its an Illusion
Theres no end to my life even when I die, I’ll be Resurrected
But no matter what I need to be ready for Unexpected
I’m gonna be around, even when the water ends it Peek
People call me unique, only because I fight, I aint Weak
All the lies are behind me so don’t bother it’ll never Work
The past few years were alright, still I sever being a Jerk
I preyed enough, why doesn’t God ever pay Attention
I’ve had many infections, still I try to obey his Ascension
The water line is soon to end, good-thing im Prepared
I’ve asked for a little attention and everything is Declared

couple questions
how long have you been writing?
are you really 14?
n how long ago did vinci ask ya to tryout?
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the verse was aight, i was feeling a couple bars that seemed real
personal n real to you(from a readers aspect)your direction was a bit cloudy
but overall i think rb has a lil different writing style the rv.........ill mention this to him
sit tight, should only take a day or so to get an answer on ya..

well i know you hate me Daz but im willing to drop the beef because its my fault we have beef. ive been writing topicals for 6 monthes. and i know this verse wasnt very great my imagery was on there cause i usually write a stroey out and then write my verse to each sentence i have on the story. it works better but in this case i had to write 40 lines and that would take to damn long and i have this shit for school today and shit. da vinci asked me 3 times he pmed me. does Parallel ring a bell;)

:thumbup: well at least you were mature n honest enough to admit
it was you.......vinci still aint been on today....but i would like you to write a 10 line verse on why you wanna be part of tc...i will forward it to vinci's desk
n if i like it i will put in a good word for you n my vote from the roundtable...
sound suffice...?...i just dont only wanna go on this piece alone
get me?.........(also include why you were bannedin the pm)

he was banned for cheating, and it's the second time it's happened to him...

cant i explain tho?. i didnt cheat, i battled some guy with the same IP as me, its like how eternal ahs the same IP and he got banned to for somin possibly he never did too. i swear i never cheated. i aint lieing either. but if ya dont want me cuz of that then fine. ill spit them lines in a sec.

Ayo...whadd up yall......Seein what i got to do to get in this crew...but yall know what iam capable of SO?................

read my post not anyone elses.....i set out a task for you
n if you wanna be considered for tc.complete the task...that is all
i hold no grudges para.....stay focused on what ya want man...
now pm me that 10 line verse or post it up here :thumbup:

hit up fi-del for an answer,.....................

i will when i have time i have school n shit, bunch of shit to do. ill get it to yall as soon as possible

Yo Wicked !
thought you was down with L.S, Hommie..

parellel you gto banned for cheating didnt you...
roundtable will have to seriously discuss you!....still drop those lines daz asked for.

wicked one....I say in.....check your pm.

yo fi-del u replied to my free agent thread this is (judicial) by the way yeah..changed my name.....here is a link to my latest topical battle....
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...325#post2084325

i think its council worthy

nelson^


I say yes...just waiting for roundtable to give me the word...
will have an answer shortly.