Big Chase Vs. R-Rated
 

Sdizzle
Enygma
For$aken

The first day of school, the impressions would carry on
On the ride my dad decided to blast some Shania songs
I said turn that crap down but he smiled and blared it louder
I opened the door and ran out leaving wit Can you be cool for an hour
As I socialized my dad came up and said I forgot a bye kiss
he left me with that and a hug, my friends never stopped the diss
When I arrived home my parents asked how my day was I exploded in two
They yelled back but I replied with parents most dreaded words "I Hate You"
All The yelling ceased as they stood, their eyes dulled, spirits diminished
Silence signified all the confusion had started but the fight had finished
The next day as I woke from bed, my fathers smile no longer gleamed
His words were few and lifeless, my mom even refused to be seen
With my folks gone my status rose as I tormented others for theirs blunders
But I missed how my dad would yell my name with conviction and love booming like thunder
My life seemed better socially but for my parents happiness Id trade it all
Yet my emotions I never revealed until I was home in my bed curled in a ball
A week later form the incident it was 3:46 my parents unusually late
It was the week before Christmas, thoughts of presents fueled me to patiently wait
The nurse said I need to come into her office quick, I muttered "Oh great"
Little did I know my ignorance paid the price for a section of twisted fate
the call informed me my mom distracted by my former words, hysterical, crashed
The 5 days in the hospital, my dads back turned towards me as she slowly passed
my guilt consumed me totally but I held it in, my dad didn’t even leave the house
one day coming home, the yard was crowded wit objects, my dads rage over the loss of a spouse
I ran out of the car showered with tears showing my fears I had tried to suppress
I looked through the boxes like there was redemption and love but there was none left
A note in blood confirmed my suspicion, my heart gave way as I read(red)
"YOUR HATE HAS RUINED EVERYTHING, I HATE YOU, YOU BROKE MY HEART, SHE DEAD
NOW LEAVE OR YOUR DUE WILL COME, DECIDE YOUR END" crushed me as I cried to above
Lost God's greatest gift, my center for living ,my life gone without unconditional love..........


sorry i got banned form the comp for a couple of days.......me and torubel

plus I had no time to finish im still sneaking on and no time to ocunt lines so If theres a mistake please notify me thnx......


Thnx R for understandin and helpin me wit the due date...

So chase wins by no-show?Its been a week.

iono he made aa special advancement due to my buisy schedule and toruble but.......iono i think itsfair if I wait....

yo ill kill erryone in this tourney lol jk i dunno but i want in

its a torunament not a league god........................upppin plz voteo n dis....

R- nah man. some of that felt like i was readin a text battle and shit so it was very uninteresting. not much imagery and some bad lines definatly in there just wasnt feelin it at all...3/10
Chase- that was a very interesting story and it had bomb ass imagery i was just fuckin stumped to how someone could write that dope....especially a 13 year old. the tranisitions and shit was like, perfect. even tho the strechys gave u a ....9/10

not even close ...you fuckers happy now?

v//bigchase

ill come back and poll when i have my 200 posts u asses

Aight Cool....

BigChase Wins This...

~R~

damn damn damn chase fucking dope i didnt know you was good like this at topicals it started slow but built like a gasonline fire and the visualiual was fucking dope i was really feeling this sun a 9/10 you had vocab flow everything this was really good

r rated wasnt feeling it you aint create a visiual and thats most important in a topical battle you shit sounded more like a text battle it was ok dont get me wrong but it was nowhere near chase shit it aint provide a good view of the topic 6/10

vote-big chase

both of you return my honest vote

bigchase: shit.............

wow dude you had amazing imagery and emotion compounded
with your verse........it had depth and i enjoyed it really.......
overall: 9/10 BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

~R~- dude..........

i know you could of done better then this....................
it really did sound like a text battle verse to tell the truth......
emotion was decent but it wasn't really that great........
overall: 7/10

vote: bC

wow great drop

BigChase: Shit Was Dope :thumbup: I Could Picture The Whole Thing In My Head.. Good Flow N Vocab... Shit Was Really Deep 9/10

~R~ : From What Ive Read Before N Shit Ive Heard, I Knew You Could Have Done ALOT Better.. Delorean Was Right, Sounded Like A Text Battle.. Dissapointment From You 7.5/10

Winner: Big Chase

uppin.............IT's been dope R-Rated...dont let this turn to beef :)

^LoL Look At Him Still Trying To Get This Win..

Nah Dog Cause You Got A Big Mouth and You Won't Battle Me Again..

I Dropped That Like 10 Minutes LOL...It Was A Shitty Drop..

~R~

no really :)

I know I was suprised you dropped like that but I cant battle now FLu......I haven't eaten in 6 days :(

I do have a big mouth I was bored n shit so I was thinkin n sayin hmmmmm

But you are the topical king until the tournie is re-openedand finished which enygma or someone elseprolly wouldv'e won

uppin this old ish....

Don't Be Gay....Let It Die....

I'ma PM Strobe and Have Him Close This..

~R~