B-MAC vs opt1k
Topic: Stressful Days
Lines: 20-30 Due: 1-2 days Check in: Right away (20 Min) Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 07-18-05 at 02:17 PM Must drop verse in 2880 minutes after check in. |
opt1k has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-18-05 01:39 PM.
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B-MAC has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-18-05 01:40 PM.
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Stressful Day's Homie Caught In A Daze/
All In Lifes Plays,fun Games In A Stressful Maze/ Off The Chart Problems Still Stuck In Times/ Tryin To Define Better Things Goin Outta My Mind/ Lookin Into The Sky Found Out Im Real Lost/ Cannot Find A Solution Chaotic Problems The Cost./ Heir To The Throne Satan Wants Me To Exceed/ Many Things,defeat Good Truely At Evil I Succed/ Only Wanting Peace,not Caring For The Problems/ Just Wanting A Real Solution,to Try And Solve Em./ Cautious By The Minute Cuz It's A Crazy World/ Tryna To Make A Good Livin Watchin Over My Baby Girl/ She Means So Much To Me But The Price Is High/ I Love Her With Allmy Heart Til The Day I Die/ Drama,war,pain,revenge Fills Life/ No Room For Happiness,life Being Held In The Hands Of A Knife./ Over-zealous Maniacs,pride,greed Cloogin The Earth/ You Have To Sacrifice Most Of It All To Know What It's All Really Worth./ Makin Time For For This Rap Game Stay On The Grind/ Niggas Was Encouringin Me To Make Worth It All On My Own Time/ Clustery Thoughts Evil Deeds And No Good/ Its Leavein And Comin Back To Live Life Back In The Hood/ Runnin Away From The Hood And Then Comin Right Back/ So I Tell Myself Many Times "i Ain't Goin Down Like That"/ So I Look Up To The Almighty And Tell Him Nicely/ I Know What Ya Doin Homie Its A Test I Aint Takin Lightly/ Cuz I Know That Ima Survive Cuz I Was Born To Rep/ Though I Know The Pressure's On But The Anger Is Kept.held Within Cuz I Know It Aint Worth It All. Peace Out Homie One Love This Is Opt1k Ya'll/ Holla!!!!!! |
Week after week, Left with the same shitty pay
The Ashtray’s Full, From all the Stress Today Cant think straight anymore, When I’m this Poor Feel like iam walking a endless corridor, This Entrepreneur Stuck Between Being Mature and Going on tour I try so hard at this life, for what feels is not Good Enough Its Just Sucks when you see people given something You’ve been striving your whole life for to Arrive But I go on surviving , Giving Life a 110% Paying these Bills, and Popping these Anti-depressing Pills Wishing I lived in Beverley Hills, But Yet still that’s just a dream, that this rap can only fullfill Its Just sucks when you got 10 bucks until Sunday And its only Monday, Its Sucks when you exist on Telemarketers lists to conduct Welfare Study’s And they know you so well, His now a Good Buddy Am I the Only one who feels like this Where a Stressful Day does not Exist I Find My self Getting More Pissed and equipping this Pistol grip And saying Fuck life and all this Dumb shit But I stay strong, and learn from all my wrongs Make best of the stress that blurs my vision As long as I stayed focused and Concentrate on my mission And fuel my ambition, I’ll dispose of this trepidation |
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uppon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!this!!!!!!!!!!!!!
homie it's ill but yea even b's own |
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upppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn.. COme on guys..........
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This was feedback posted for B-MAC
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ayo uppun for more votes homies.......holla at cha boy
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This was feedback posted for B-MAC
tight all i can say
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This was feedback posted for B-MAC
both of yall came real hard so i cant make a choice so i posten feedback right now i voted later
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ayo.........aight wayne we'll be waitin homie.......uppin for more votes!!!!!!!!!!!
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This was feedback posted for opt1k
checking polls.............................cant vote opt1c in my crew......
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wat up narc........waitin for more votes people come on!!!!!!!!!!!
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uppin this homie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^come on!!!!!!!!!!!!!!^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^
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come opn people man vote man we need to close thise battle!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Voted For: B-MAC
B-Mac-Had some Ok vocab.Coulda been better.Flow was your best strenght here.All through the verse it stayed strong and consistant.But the content and wording may be your achilles heel.I see your concepts and ideas are good...but your wording was a little..meh.I think you were a little too direct.You stayed on topic through the whole verse though.Overall-7/10 Shodown-Man...you need work homie.Ok...first off..structure...stop making every word begin with a capital and don't end all ur lines with "/".That kinda shit makes it look newbish.If you had enough confidence in your verse..you wouldn't need to start every word with a capital.And for the content..you seem to have something to say...but you have trouble puttin it together in a captivating way.As for the rhyming...too basic.New rhyme scheme needed too. Vote-B-Mac RTF BELOW PLEASE http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203538 ^c'mon...ya'll know how long voting for topicals take.. |
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