"My Little Insecurities" ft. OneStepBeyond
 

um.... uppin...

dope drop great vocab and flow i liked this drop yall busted this up
ill be readin more of your drops atticus good stuff homie 9/10 one of tha best and most complex ive read yet......

this was a pretty nice piece.....had good emotion....imagry was aiight
atticus had good vocab and wordplay....i like how some lines just flowed right off my tongue........good structure and i liked the topic for this collab......
onestep you flow was good....good emotions....structure was good.....you need to throw in some better vocab....it was good but it coulda been a lil better.......this was a good collab tho
keep it up fellas

Nice concept you worked with here, don't think I have seen it being used before on RV. Both had nice pieces, Atticus picked up pace bit more but he had more opportunity to show his talent of course. I was feeling the imagery of course, especially in chorus and the emotion was strong and pure. Was feeling the flow and had some insightful lines in there that made me think about shit

For instance:

Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's", Never Dones Continue To Run
Through A Life Of Light Blind To Strive With Eyes Fused Up.
^nice lines...

Keep it up boys and rtf on my open mic please (link in sig)...

Yeah Atticus...dat was cool..u dropped some complex shit there!Multies were off d hook man! Waitin 4 d audio.....

I liked OSB's verse...both had pretty dope drops. The verses comingled well, vocabulary was fine. Good multis, nice concept... Keep dropping pieces like this. Sound pretty good in audio. Favorite Lines:

Attached mentally to my girl in which I struggle to fix,
I always fall One Step short, now failures strung in the mix,
___

Tucked Under-Over Realities Blacklist At The Back Misunder-
Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's", Never Dones Continue To Run

.....ight fam that was a hot drop yah came wit real shit....i really felt the hook it was different i liked that u both came wit perfect structure...the vocab in both verse were perfect for a drop like this Real Talk the whole time....the last verse i give props to Atticus he ended it wit a fire verse to leave a point....also osb came good wit his verse....My insecurities are endless, life with dozens of twists,
Running from myself... and my purity, it doesn't exsist....
^^^this line was hot....
This was a good idea by both of yah.....an u did it perfect....9/10....an thats really good from me ...i tell the truth striaght out..ight..1

shit that was a hot callabo right there....
structure was great
vocab was great
thats some real good OM talent keep it up both of you...good things are in your future
9/10

yeah this was heavy stuff!! lol i dont really read all the open mics as much but im glad i read this! lots of tight vocabulary and very nice original lines from both! i preferred atticus's second verse as i feel it flowed better as the first one was more poetic! OSB jus killed it! lol, this is one of the best om's i've read so far!
Bottle up my firing emotions and when the molten builds,
One day they explode, flaming, burning, igniting the fuse,
fighting the fueds within myself, i'm frightened to choose,
^^these were my favourite lines from OSB, i dont no y, i suppose we all can identify with those feelins and i liked the way he described them

Lavish Covers Tucked Under-Over Realities Blacklist At The Back Misunder-
Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's"
^^favourite lines from Atticus, lol this was deep man keep this up! u 2 should collab more often both of ur styles worked well together as atticus's was more poetry based and complex, OSB jus came wit it n hit hard n used simpler but effective vocabulary! Thats my opinion anyway! :thumbup:

GOTDAMN!...Damn...Damn...Damn Dat Was Flames On Both Side...Luv'd Da Chorus Too Dat Shit Was Serious

Atticus You Used Alotta Imagery, Vocab, Nice Structure...Wordplay Was On Point Fareal

OSB You Used Imagery Also, Nice Wordplay, Structure Was Fine...You Laced Ya Shit

Real Talk...One Of Da Best OM's I've Read So Far...Keep It Up Niggaz


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:eek: :shocked: :thumbup: WOW. amazing shit right here... attitcus, you had str8 multies, and nice rhyming, nothing seemed forced, sounded like some str8 nas level shit... dope def....

OSB, daaayyyummmm killeed this!, deep emotional type words like i could picture scarface and this... dope to the max...

nice drop yall everything was on point, flow, topic, structure, great OM... damn, good drop!!

Wow I am really feeling this shit here...Most definetly an OM of the week nominee

Real deep shit from both, feeling the vocab and imagery put into this...Nice topic, very creative

I loved the concept, and I am really looking forward to another one from you two...

Very nice

RTF and hit up my battle with Skriptz whenever...

real talk...dis is hotness wrapped in a rap...structure, imagery was on point...really felt every line, and could relate to sum...dis is dopeness at a peak dat i havent even seen from neither of u...and Att, when u get a nice deep topic in mind, PM me, cuz im not dat good thinkin bout topics...we gotz ta collab kid...9/10...real talk

*rolls in with a wicked beat pounding*

this was awesome, seriously......i read it 3 times over, wordness, seemed like this was a difficult topic to write on, well seeing how you two both came out, ever so subtle explainging your insecurities, but managed to explode with emotion and everything, haha

i think i liked your second verse the most atticus, but i read the first one over, and it was still really good, your style is pretty complex, but yet at the same time, works very effectively with how you portray your topics....if that makes sense, word.....emotion was kickin' in this man, great write man, really feeling it

word to OSB, little different approach than usual eh, but it worked nicely...good message, nice flow, great emotion, you really hit the nail on this one man, definately write more, nah sayin?

big props to both here, this was a killer OM, keep up to both fo-sho

a yo now i see i jumped o nthe right team here vocab was there and shit deffintly running this this the post of the day right ere young bankz out holla fam stay up continue dropping that fire and ill be ther with chu holla

This piece was good, I liked the topic & I feel you portrayed it well here. Vocabulary seemed on-point. Structure made it hard to follow but it was still good. You both had different approach's which was a good thing. Keep dropping.

i agree, good shit yall......keep that shit up.....structure was iiight...good use of vocab keep that up..yall flow was good on it and i think yall should collab more often. good shit yall :thumbup:

[[Verse One: Atticus]]
Cold... So Self Aware Nearly Swelled With Null
Pain There Remains No Clearly Well, Hell All Fates Fallin Dull.
^I have no idea what this means
Full With Great Opportunities Dropped Late Pages Erased
Scribbled Blank Classics Seem Lacluster, To Muster Greatness
^kinda fillery but not too bad...
Deems Its Placement As This Obsene Dream... Lavish Covers
Tucked Under-Over Realities Blacklist At The Back Misunder-
Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's", Never Dones Continue To Run
Through A Life Of Light Blind To Strive With Eyes Fused Up.
^I have no idea what this means
As I Search For Comfort... Last Resort To Sore Is Some Form
More Or Less More Less Than More Yet The Love Makes This One A Whore.
Hunt For The Touch Of Anyone One That Can Form The Sence
Of Sudden Abundance... Fuck Me! Free Me From Poor Judgments!
this is too much for me...im like on multi overload...and i really dont understand what you mean by any of this...maybe im just stupid or maybe it doesnt make any sense

[[Chorus x2]]
Inpurity, How Pure They See...
Please Let Them See Me Bleed For Acceptance
Cuz My Wrists Slit And... I Think I Saw A Smile Seep
Against His Lips, "DAMN!"... Quick Razor Rip And Dance
To Please My Little Insecurities Rants.

[[Verse Two: OneStepBeyond]]
My insecurities are endless, life with dozens of twists,
Running from myself... and my purity, it doesn't exsist,
werd...
Attached mentally to my girl in which I struggle to fix,
I always fall One Step short, now failures strung in the mix,
Can't juggle the shits, so the pressure on my shoulder builds,
Yet to have soul instilled... still showing colder shrills,
youre reachin for multis with the showing colder shrills but i was feelin these two bars as a whole...i can understand what youre talking about and the feel is pretty cool...
Sposed to be a souljah, losing prides giving me colder chills,
Bottle up my firing emotions and when the molten builds,
One day they explode, flaming, burning, igniting the fuse,
fighting the fueds within myself, i'm frightened to choose,
real nice right here
Wether to change my life, but I descent still to badness,
The ability to do so is there... but my will is absent...
werd...this capped shit off...really nice stuff here...

[[Chorus x2]]
Inpurity, How Pure They See...
Please Let Them See Me Bleed For Acceptance
Cuz My Wrists Slit And... I Think I Saw A Smile Seep
Against His Lips, "DAMN!"... Quick Razor Rip And Dance
To Please My Little Insecurities Rants.

[[Verse Three: Atticus]]
Drift Through Days In Haze Of Blur Blue Shades Asume
A Tune That Drones Quick In Flash... Come To Play A Few
Hours Past... Waste Away The Class My Last Grade
A Fail Stale Brained... Maine's Influence Henced That Blaze
Of Smoke, Clouds Dround Out The Sounds Of Hope
Beyond The Pond Of Poison Possitioned In This Frown Of Rope.
The Drugs My Freedom Fiefdom Of Peace Piece Of Mind
Just Dug Its Grave-Lay-Pray One Day The Gates Free A Bind.
Now The Highs Familiar Still Your Frown Finds Out How
To Renounce This Drugs Feel Your Fucked, So You Cut Down To Cut... "OOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!"
pretty nice...i understand this more than the last one but still not totally...you should work on making more verses like this...not just like drifting off into nonsensical flowery language like the first verse...

hit up my gfx battle with hattrick... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=192021

this shit's moving. it's a very complex, deep type subject. almost like an extended metaphor of life's ups and downs. i really enjoyed reading this. ya'll seem to have great chemistry workin 2getha. this almost shouldn't even be considered rap, it seems more like insightful poetry. i give it 5/5 mics up...rtf......1

Yo, i'ma tell u like this. I dun usually read long drops from niggas, but yours actually kept my interest. The wordplay in Atticus verses was very good. I've yet 2 seen any good wordplay on this site until i read that. And OSB was mad serious. I felt the punches in that and everything flowed so good. The chourus i didn't get until i read it a few times but an overal good chourus 2. I was really feelin that tho. Good job @ both of you guys. Keep that up, i wish i could read more good drops like that. EZ

yo this is hott

both a you dropped solid....not one stands out from the other...this is one a thos collabs that without the other person it wouldnt be as dope! So you both worked in with each other well on this
structures are good.flow is good..entire drop is a good read...
RTF!

Hey I liked this one it was cool. I didn't understand this line though...
"To Please My Little Insecurities Rants." The Rants.. I dont know what your trying to say..

Now Atticus
"Cold... So Self Aware Nearly Swelled With Null
Pain There Remains No Clearly Well, Hell All Fates Fallin Dull."
Your maltis was good but you need to work way more on your vocab.. I really do like your style and will want to work with you sometime.. My fav line from you was..
"Tucked Under-Over Realities Blacklist At The Back Misunder-
Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's", Never Dones Continue To Run"
Wow word play was sick and made me think about my life. But Im stuck by just doing and don't think. Im hella sparadic.

OneStepBehind..
I really got caught into your verse.. I love how you started off..
"My insecurities are endless, life with dozens of twists,
Running from myself... and my purity, it doesn't exsist,
Attached mentally to my girl in which I struggle to fix,
I always fall One Step short, now failures strung in the mix,"
But as I said you need to work on vocalb, The word play was nice in here I liked how you added your name by an action.. really nice.
Honestly structure was dope by both of you.. good colab and worth the read.. to be honest I want to work with both of you...
Ah, and if you wanna return the favor just hit up "psst" or "WHAT! ask me why im in TC!"
Overall this was like, hmm 7.989/10 (LoL)

Sweft

.. I just realized.. this was the best feed back I gave yet on RV.. wow

cause this is dope :thumbup:

damn!!! that wuz sum really good shit, I liked the vocab and the multies alot, you got a complex theme but that make me like this shit more, tight rhymes dawg keep it like that

Yo dat was ill fo real.
Feelin both of you. theres some real talent there.
Flow was real tight.You two got some nice vocab.
Keep it goin people you two need to keep doin this for real.

Dope. Keep reppin chryme, great peice!!!

not bad my spiccaz, but dayum, u wuz usin sum werds that KOOL COL-B iznt smart enuff 2 understand, lmao, but good shit anywayz, werd

(Atticus) this was a good topic very deep and creative of course. You use excellent vocab. My brother S.V. told me to keep an eye out for your work. From what i read im impressed with your writing. When i have time ill try to leave responces for your other open mics. (Onestep) nice struture, vocab and word-play. Your verse was entertaining to me as well.
8.5/10 Good collab and shit.

good drop fams...hook ran too long tho...isn't a hook sposed to be 4 lines?? ehh ooo well great vocab..and i was feelin the structure.....this would sound cool audio..what beats u had in mind? well good drop from both - Overall - 8/10

good shit
~1

Yo this was real hot, u pm'ed me to look at it, I didnt know it would be this good. This should get OM of the month. Both of yall hit hard, great topic, great OM overall. I love the imagery i got from dis, yall should do dis again....hit up my battle wit murdz

LoL^ ANYWAYZ Atticuz N OSB!(Ummm) THAT SHYT WAS FCKIN DOPE!Dawg I Was Feelin every damn linez!
Atticus verse Was Really Dope N OSB was A Lil better!Shyt Was OFF DA HOOK!
rhyme Scheme=8/10
Wordplay=7/10
Stayin On Topic=8/10
Line VOCAB=7/10
Creativity=8/10!
Mayne no need no more to say!Shyt was Dope Mayne!Would prolly sound alot better on AUDIO!but HONESTLY this Collab Was hot!RTF on Ma OM!LoL!DEUCEZ!

Atticus is my favorite topical head on this site.

This OM was pretty sick.

The structure was good.. as was the flow.. which was expected..

It seemed like Atticus went for the more complex look and it turned out nicely. There was quite a bit of multis.. and the imagery was good. The emotion was also present.

I liked OneStepBeyond's verses too. His lines were worded dopely, and imagery and emotion were also there.

The hook was also very nice.

Just an overall dope track. For real..

Real Good..... The vocab was great nigga.... Verrgood topic, creativity n shit, both is good...
keep dropin like dat niggaz.... never missed flow, u good my nigga!!! keep up

RTF :thumbup: