Teenage Love? Feedbacks
Aye sport, here's a thought from the old school crew
A serious situation we all go threw It deals wit your feelins, so here what I say It's like a dyke, but nothing seems to go your way Bust this, two people, they really like each other He says their's no one else And she claims they're is no other The feelins are same, and you receive a notion To reveal your inner thoughts deeply hit emotions Precious times, hopin they won't end Tell your mother bout your lover Or so your best friend Ya mighty proud while your holdin her hand Boys, yo that's my woman, and girls, yeah that's my man This pressure brings a sort of warmth to ya heart And everything seems so great at the start For she loves him, and he also loves her And it's hard to turn back to who the person you were But later on, problems start to occur And the bond, which combines, y'all turn into a blur For the feelins were the same, now here's the score You love him to much, and they don't love him anymore Or did you have to choose a number Or because your not bein true Or maybe they're just plain sick of seein you Word, now it might seem strange You better take his quick, and make the right change See just when you swore, the boy was wrong and Then they're gone, and part of ya heart's been stolen Get back on your feet, wit a hop and a skip But no, you rather go wit this dead relationship Hangin around, and buyin him stuff You seem him every darn day, you don't see him enough You follow them around, and they claim ya hawkin When conversation comes, you do all the talkin Not to mention, attention, we all need a bit Behind ya back they're sayin, yeah he's all on my tits They're gettin sick of you, and quite annoyed And if you had plans for the future, they're now destroyed You saw what was happenin, and you still let it And if you ever let him make love to ya girl, you can forget it Sweetheart, you been caught, spread around town Passin then ya thoughts And break up time, and your recitine the words Yo this is fromt the heart, and I know the part hearts Get over it, from now don't take short slick If it's not true love, you shouldn't deal wit it Just think of your future, and what is to above And pay attention to the words that's in this song of love |
what do yall think can yall look
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nice...nice...solid spit...poetry in motion if you ask me...but im just a newbie...what the fuck do i know...
i like your style...pure emotion...peace |
lol not really.........Even if ya are thanks for takin the time to read it and nobody else will
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aww, that was so nice!! lol, That was really good #I read it all the way through...Whens the sequal?? Thast was well gd!
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Thanks...........Im tryin to be the best open Mic person......Im goin to start doin this more often....aight thanks........Lets get some more....^^
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goin to probably be put up soon........Probably be ready for it though....probably wont be one....just think ahead
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i really liked that..that showed alot of emotion and alot of skill..on da reals..keep this up it's something different..and it's very smart how u rhymed it *ones*
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Thanks spoken.......Keep elevatin girl
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comeone lets get some feedbacks...............
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man that was awsoem very hot man do sum more stuff
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that's a tite ...showed emotion and it kept on topic......7/10
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Thanks lets uppin this....
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Rhymes were played wasnt really feelin this to much.
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I think it was good and unholy your the only wun that thinks its wack.....So that lets people know that you a hater.....and get mad when something is betta then yours...Just stop hatin for a change is what im sayin
No beef....Aight.... Dont talk stuff about me I just tell ya what I think...But No beef..So dont go arguing to me.....Both cool aight no beef |
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I need a lighter to wave in the air.
Put ya boots on everybody, its gettin deep in here. Nice stuff, Waitin for da followup |
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i liked it, it showed u n your emotion stay up 8/10
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You do wanna stay in A.I right?U asked for Feedback i gave U Feedback Idiot.Why Would i hate i dont evan Have OM's. |
damn that really wasnt what i was expecting, the thought was there but the lyrics could use some fuckin work
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yea not that great, i mean good concept but ya need to improve
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shut the hell up you noobs...You just agreein with unholy wun...LOOk at the other peoples post Then you decide...Dont let him Choose you dicision..Next time Noobs look at the Other Replys..
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Yea It Was OK, Could Expand The Vocabulary Abit Thought, Nice Topic.
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Wow that's Dumb Poeple dont look at other Poeple's Replys to Decide what they Think about what they have Read.Man poeple seem to Lose Intelligance more and more EveryDay. |
lol aight.....UPpin
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uppin, im a follower not a leader,
i dont see shit here wit a weena. so peace out here come da cleana :shoot: duck that shit bitch talkin shit like u rich |
Dis is not the spot to post spits...Good bye
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Clever and curious ryhmes, smart too good job!!!!
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Aight thanks for the opinion..Uppin
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