roc tha mic or sit down n write?
aight heres two battle verses i made against two different people tell me wot u think..........
[laugh] look at ‘Luke Thurlow’ ayo he got less flow den Choobbaka and hand so-lo, cruising through tha galaxy at high speeds/ who needs booze ‘Luke’ u amusing me to easily, I thought we were battle rapping?/ standing wit ur mouth open fly catching, yeh shit does happen but I didn’t think it came out ur gob/ yo if emcee’in woz in classes “hey ima snob”, spittin my shit to ollie twist/ spittin ur shit like its dissin me, u better quit quickerly before u submit to a suicidal fatality n get hit lyricly/ a mimic of electric exorcist, withdrawing tha happiness from ur chest at high pressure compressed till u callapse/ hittin wit so hard contact u cant react, it’s a fact u wont leave dis battle intact/ perhaps u should go back home and pick up a pencil, use tha utensil to produce a sensible rhyme/ instead of dis wack ass lines u speaking, u aint worth competing coz my mental words are creditable, invincible to be infused by my opposition/ my position is too tense to not release my fusion [2] my style neva fades away its a renegade, mind made to slave ur brain changing its maintain to insane, crumbling like clay ina palige of 2 mill rats, hoo listend to craig chattin like he all dat , blah bloo blah yo u aint gonna get too far, woz dat suppose to be a punch in dat bar? Mo like a raw compliment bout my bra Ill tell ur doc-tor to prevent ur treatment coz u cant teach a whack emcee how to speak n bounce to tha beat yo dats suminc u cant do u can be who? U cant be me never be on tha level of roxy Tha majority of me sayin let him leave Tha rest disagrees telling u to bleed My words r tha nightmare to ur fear Reacting dracular bittin ur neck till ur nearves screem Pleed for mercey im rockin tha earth see Tha looniest dopest ferocious femcee walkin dis world like a pulse eater, illest speeker, dream seeker, mic freaker |
ha, i think ur responses to him were great- ya better have beat him on that battle, nice nice- i could use some advice from ya with my raps- see whatcha can do- for now, keep that style up-
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thanx PeaseDEase, wot u need help on? yeh i hope ima win too or ill look like a fool im still confused on wen we battlin :confused:
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First Of All, Dont Talk About Urself In A Battle.....Thats What Open Mics Are For.......Just Throw Punches And Personals........And About That Roc The Mic Or Sit Down And Write Question.....Do Both..... Write Ya Verse, Then Roc The Mic With That Verse!!!!
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ELEVATE. that's first off 2. i'm not trying to diss but i wasn't feeling any of those. what the hell is "he got less flow then choobaka and han solo
crusin thorugh the galaxy at high speeds" that was just wack, what does no flow and han solo got to do with anything? alot of your attempted punchlines didn't make any sense IE what the hell is open fly catching is that some UK diss? ELEVATE _________________________________________________ Death poems are mere delusion Death is death -SAMAUARI POEM |
the second flow was better but they were not all that good keep droppin and practicing and listinen to "all" advice whether good or bad and try it. try a more consistant rhyme structure, neva talk bout yourself, concentrate on the one u battlin, thats just my advice take it or leave it, sup to u
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another god idea is to listen to a battle no one has heard then write the lyrics down and post it
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aight thanx fo tha replys ima elivate, yo SyNiKaL 'mouth open fly catchin'= like wen ur mouths open flys can get it, it aint nutin to do wit were im at.
'fo'trill' i aint no copywrite kinda bycth i write my own dont want no1 elses. peace ~roX~ |
some pretty wack shit in ur lyrics and a few bars dont even rhyme
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PRACTICE MAKES PERFCT just keep worken at it...the verses were decent but just kep rhymen...aight holla ak 1
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aight cheers 'X Ecution' ayo 'fgee' if u gonna coment give me sum good feedback wot dont ryhme? wot i need to work on? eh?
peace ~roX~ |
that was tight
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aight cheers mr.spit much love peace
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ayo, that shit is raw. I got no complaints. wish i could here it with a beat.
keep spitt'n that shit. Holla, JVibe |
they were both kinda cute, im gonna reply to a few more posts before i start trying to start beef with anyone
up your vocabulary a bit and you'll be straight, make your verses a little bit more longer and like some of the other cats said don't talk about yourself unless its just a freeform flow, if its a battle or you're talking about another cat then leave all the lyrics to them and their attitudes talking about what you can do and what not is bragging elevate ~1~ |
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thas wat im sayin! :) |
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no dont do that.....uggghhhh ....you bit you will be banned |
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