Boot Camp Da Army Edition
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thats right there wont be nothin left when i finish this breath right now im shootin hand guns.. but the ak is next.. gettin trained to aim str8 for the brain then one to the chest lay em to rest crawlin thru this fuckin swamp like ses cuz in this army you cant harm me son im fighting for this elevation for the nation of these gods that spit but if you think of fuckin with me i ask you to cease and assist or its the fatigues in green and boots that gleam and kill you right quik :shoot: :thefinger now drained my brain is strained from these war l simulations down and out theres no doubt that im down for the situation strugglin huddlin with peeps like me that see what we facin who rep the streets indeed we liven it.. but still be complacent doin it pursuing shit and its easy to see that this army life is trife just the life for me some would agree others wanna be haten on we who unite to lite the mic allright thats plain to see but i keep it tight day or nite take flight you cant catch me when i return you feel the burn of bullets right at thee there be many in good and plenty that will try to capture me but that wont happen i hurt the masses and cause cotastrophies react with action You heard the captain get down on your knees beg and plead but we do our job like the mob causin casulties those refugees will be shattered from :shoot: impressions thats lasting................ |
G , L, O ...........On the feedback dawg i tweeked it a lil holla back!!!!!
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way 2 represent nice piece
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i liked the internal rhyming
flow was off a bit in places up vocab and imagery not bad yo 1 |
shit was good.
did your thing. keep it up. |
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uppin for feedback yall...............................
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thanks for the feedback keep it up....................ill return the favor
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Feedback Yall Feedback I Need Feedback Like A Horse Needs A Feedbag Ya Heard!
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now drained my brain is strained from these war l simulations
down and out theres no doubt that im down for the situation strugglin huddlin with peeps like me that see what we facin who rep the streets indeed we liven it.. but still be complacent Dat SHit was SIck ON MY chartz damn Nigga u GETT up derre i hope 2 see u in 2 weeks u gon b sick dogg b ez i likedat rhyme ^^ |
thanks for the feedback yalll i really appreciate it
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That shit is tough.Keep your head up my nigga keep it gully
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Yeah man your rhyme was dope. I liked the structure and the flow.
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i like i like thats some hard shit keep it up
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hey iam new to this site i axcidently put the wrong name for my rapperz can i change it
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uppin....fo ....feedback.........................yo
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yo feed me back ack ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
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yo i thought that shit was hot dog.......
really sick verse...holla!....... |
yea that was some hott shyt keep it comin kid...............................................
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That was Heavy T keep that shit coming, uping some feedback for my boi..
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dat shit was hott keep elevatin
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yea gd shit, nice wordplay n word order......gd shit wun
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