ZONE OUT - ShoW SoME ResPeCT ft. TOny Brown
 

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damn.. .

yes u do suck but i just liked your rhyming on this and ur quality and delivery they were more decent than zoneout's..and your flow was steady i liked it!

zone out i liked your hook...flows really well

your flow was kinna slacking compared to tony's..you kinna slipped off at severalspots..seemed like you were runningto catch up...i think it was due to breathe control..i'm not feeling your quality...u need a mic change i guess!...delivery is a 5/10..nothing new in your lyrics..they just there!

i prefered zone out on the hooks!...that actually made me stay listening till the end of this!

yeah beat is cool too..feeling it!


hit my sig if you feel like!

holla!

finally!!! some feed lol thanx yvonne. n yea ima hit up your track right after im done recording

tony tone flow was on point real smooth could add some bass to your verse should have soen something different with your adlibs add a little reverb or something
lyrics were cool i guees your flow was mad nice but your delivery didnt really fit the track
hook was nice will flow was nice throughout like the delivery on it

thats my crews mission line sounds off and yes they will clap adlib off barely but i could tell
besides that flow was flawless lyrically you came harder than tony lot of wordplay hottest shit ive heard from you you upped your game

I wonder why all trackson Myspace sound low? They need to fix that.

The beat is appropriate for a diss...very intense


I like the inside-outwards line

Delivery is creative here

Flow is good
good

Hook: I like the lyrics...but, it lacks a catchy phrase...

Verse 2: good flow...and rhyming isn't bad at all



7.5/10 track


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werd, i'll put this on sc when i get time

WTF do you do exactly?
You seem too slow to be giving feedback.

Aight man......beat's pretty nice. Your flow and shit sounds pretty nice on this. Feeling the lyrics. This is pretty nice man. Hook's pretty nice as well.....kinda catchy, which is good. Zone came in pretty nicely too. I think he had a better swag to his verse than Tony did. Overall nice song man.....ya'll sound pretty good together :thumbup:

ayo, u dissin my wifey? ima castrate u nigga

lol

thx for all the feed btw

...you seem like a woman on her period to me sometimes...and i'm not hating but being honest wichya!

change!..

Lmao, ok!
Dont make me sic Spul on you again.
He's gonna come with those disgusting pics of you! :laugh:

ugh niggaz aint got shit better to hate on a girl for other than common pics...pfft

^common pics? lmao son it's not common for fat girls to rub up on eachother with their grandma like saggy boobs hanging low and take pics of it. Stop being a slut, and act decent BIATCHHHHHHH


but word this track was tight. Zone killed hook. good shit from both. but hook crazy sons. WORD WORD!!!! MAS ON 'EM!!! MAS on Yvvone's hooker pics!!! YEA :shoot:

Damn tony you came in with a hot flow dude, I'm feelin ya swagger g and shit word up. You holdin it down, nice delivery man. I was feelin ya verse. This beat hot by the way....for zone outs hook, pretty catchy. Your verse is pretty dope, gangsta swagger word up. I'm feelin ya flow as well you came in hot man nice delivery too. I'm def feelin this track yall ncie job.

rtf on Look At This Chick..

LMFAO
Holla!

thanks for all the feedback, btw.

meh..at least i dont stink of onion or garlic and its pure evidence i am not as hungry as you and your family!



1 thing i abide on is Never argue with a Fool cos then u wudnt know the difference btw d 2...


so i hold my peace with a Fuck you and Fuck what u think!

End it!

LMFAOAOAOAO!!!
WTF are you talkin about?
Who stinks of onion and garlic!? and WHO THE HELL IS HUNGRY!?
Lmao, Vonnie, please stfu now while you have the chance to.
You're the wackest person to post in this thread, YES EVEN WACKER THAN PARANOID!!!
Fall back, before I show you who's boss.

LMAO @ those two false statements backed up by NOTHING, when I can back up my claims with pics. BIATCHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH HH :hump: <me and your grammy

you have DEF gotta be the ugliest and stupidest chick ever. you one of those chicks who so desperate for attention from opposite sex you'd adopt one of those starving ethiopian kids on TV just to rape them. you SICK BITCH!!!! MAS ON YYVONE!!! :shoot:

MAS ON YVONNE!!!!!!

hahHAHhHAHAHhahahahHAHAHAhahah
I only talked to her on aim cause I wanted to see naked pictures!!!!!!!!!!
roooooooooooooflmao

damn, yal niggas cloggin the fuck outta this thread

anymore feed? lol

btw, i love yvonne.....fall back niccas =PPP

lol @ cloggin up the thread
fuck rv..
who cares?

lol oh yea one more thing......keep feedin ppl

this should be featured

grrrrrrr

*sings "I'm in loveeeee with a crackwhoreeeeeee"*

lol....mayne this just another freepost thread now

beat:Beat is cool,I expect'd a lil more into it..it kept feelin like it was building up to something an then the loop came..but still nice ridin music...in the south sorta,but mid west shit almost east coast..lol..but coo.

Flow:The hook was tight...the only thing is yall couldve incorp'd a more aggressive flow with it..an the 1st person that drop'd..shouldve been the middle guy,an the middle guy shouldve been 1st cuz his flow iz catchy..it matches the beat..he did waayy better.1t dude just didnt sound gutter enough to begin that type of track,no hate to u homey,but thas true...but u still handle'd ur biz'ness with it..

Lyrics:The hook was tight like i said,I liked what u were sayin..1st person had cool lyrics..sum lines I felt his swagger carried a bit more than the actual impact of the lines..But still I felt u came decent,2nd person I felt came slugg'n,I liked the flow,but the lyrics are coo..nothin really over the top that would make u say 'damn'..yah know..but still ur voice,n flow carried ur words,made u feel'em because of your energy that u put into it..but the lyrics are on that young buck level,but props.
I'd bump it..just adjust ur hook a bit..an change the arrangement..then it'll be set..IMO..

props.

ROFL AT THE YVONNE ABUSE WOW..

haha ethipan sorry yvonne im cool with u but damn..WOW lmfao..

regarding the track nice shit yall ayo tony man u never hit me up...always say u will and n then bounce :( we STILL need to collab tight verse tho b zone MAS my nigga u killeed ya shit..hook=crack me=fiend which equals playback holla

WOW, I want to thank you alot for this feedback.

yes thx a bunch for that prosecutor. u too prah

n yea, i told about 6 ppl i'd collab with em =/ prob is, i didnt realize christmas was so close n me and my girl been havin issues lately. meh, we'll get somethin goin. we gotta collab before u get signed n shit lol

Lol & im already signed b but it ain't finalized yet so we good and ill still do it then

zone out i wasnt talking to u there!...and i'm not gonna trip on ur comparing me to paranoid..cos like i said 'i am still climbing the elevation mountain' ...i am ready to LEARN from whoeva minus you...


anyhow i dont have a shit to tell the both of you..i'm so not interessted in this joke..plus i dont believe in words but actions..
u both can continue ,for as long as u want i cud give a shit less,on whateva it is y'all wanna get from acting stupid over the net...gd luck on that!

^says the crackwhore who posts STUPID unsexy ass grandma boob sagging pics OVER THE INTERNET. sureeeeeeeeeeeeee........ :rolleyes:

ok...this song is okay fam...your quality could be uppin'd a bit...you lyrics are a bit up and down...Flow is good. Hook should have way more excitement to it..2nd verse was a bit better, But do has some kind of crazy ass lisp or speach inpediment...have em work on that. His lyrics are more on point with the song.

^Thats bullshit, nigga and you know it.

I'll give it a second listen in a minute fam...I rushed it a bit and I guess I didn't listen well...but if my opinion dont change then shut the fuck up and take the fact that life aint all good comments and lol's and shit fam...no hate...but give me a minute and I'll leave better feed back.

Ok...

Still dont like the Hook cos its night hype at all so it makes it not go to the hook in my opinion. Id like it a like more if dude got hype and just shouted the shit.

1st
Now, as far as creativity...this song lacks a topic to go to. Its just full of self glorifacation rhymes..."I dont gamble...but Im a morbid"? that line is just weird fam.
His flow is on point but his lyrics are too simplistic for what you guys were going for. "I earn greatness, I earn Curtains" what does that mean? 4.5/10

Hook
I like what dude says and all but, it just sounds like if he wasn't feeling it himself or like if he just couldn't get hype. Its catchy but it lacks what makes a hook sound good you know..just hypen dude up. 5/10

2nd
His lyrics and flow is better then the 1st cat. He's got a lisp still so that wont change anytime soon I guess. I like his verse coz its not lyrical but it has more hypeness and emotions then the first cat. A song doesn't have to be lyrical to be good but, it helps to tell the listeners that you put a lot of time and effort into this. I like his adlibs, and dubbs. Id like to see more from this cat then I would from the first dude. 6.5/10

Ok...now that I have listoned to this song like 6 times....I can stand by my opinions and judging more fermly...This song wasn't bad at all. Don't take what I say in offense, Im simply giving the point of view from a listeners perspective. Every song can always have something either added of taken away from it. In My opinion...your main focus should be your hook...Make it more hype because the instrumental goes up while the person who says the hook just stays in the same note. Hook is still catchy, just needs to be uppin to let niggaz know its the hook.

Creativity - 4/10
Flow - 6/10
Presentation - 3/10
Replayablity - 6.5/10
Overall Total - 19.5/40

nigga your slow lol u dont know what an iron curtain is???!!!! pfffttt
and in case u didnt notice, THIS IS A SELF GLORY TRACK
oooomg, the morbid line. when u gamble u keep bidding more and more. morbid=more bid. and my lyrics are simplistic? c' mon now. maybe i should dumb down my lyrics from now on so the slow ppl will get it

what the fuck? relax...I aint like the track...I aint slow...I refuse to listen to it again...and it is what it is. My opinion does not count for shit if other people like. You wont satisfy every one no matter how much try dawg...if you like it...thats fine, I tossed my 2 cents in and thats that. No reason for you to get mad about it. If you get negative feed back...thats just part of putting your work up like this, you know. You cant/wont get 100% good feed fam...just like you wont get 100% bad feed. but I refuse TO BE TOLD what I should and shouldn't like. I didn't say the song was wak or garbage or anything disrespectful so quit tripping dawg. If you want..just delete my post if it bothers you so much and you can live in this world of perfect feed back fam. make no difference to me. pc

lol idc if u liked it but, u said my lyrics were basic yet.....u didnt understand em =/