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Mentor 02-05-05 12:06 PM

complicated freestyle
 
HOOK:
My vocabulary is complimentary
it's a combination of explanation
i use concentration wit' this occupation
and i'm sick of people leaving notifacation of elavation(2x)

VERSE:
yo....i'm still working for an education at the end of graduation
they say shit like i can't listen without medifacation
but i'm just workin' at my future proffession
leave 'em guessin that i'm usin' progression
i simply rap with so much aggression
to let 'em know i use protection without expectation
i'll cap any nigga wit' so much penetration
that it'll be a violation without specifacation
i use any motiviation without hesitation
and my heart is so cold like refrigaration
this here is just a simple creative creation
so good that you can't leave any sign of recommendation
my words hit ya like gravitation at the same time usin' levitation
there's no simpler way of putting this into classifacation
and this isn't no hallucination it's just a simple case of
complication, i'm so hungry that it turned into starvation
what i'm textin' is so complexin' that there's no correction
i'm just usin' this style for testin' to see who's the best n'
who's usin' prevention wit' convection
even if i fuck around and get a conviction
you're the plaque and i'm the vaccination
so let's end this song wit' a congratulation

HOOK:
My vocabulary is complimentary
it's a combination of explanation
i use concentration wit' this occupation
and i'm sick of people leaving notifacation of elavation(2x)

Kyleon 02-05-05 12:23 PM

that was ok drop hommie...why did ya call it hook on the verse also?..idk anywayz ya structure needs improvement...flow was ok here nice rythem....Wordplay was used good in dis drop...sum lines i thought were wack but some were dope...nice job its was ok...and work on ya chorus a lil more..thats all i have to say no hate

overall:7/1o

Mentor 02-05-05 12:32 PM

thanx for the feedback, i don't mean to sound cocky but i amazed myself with this cuz so far this is one of my personal favorites out of all my raps i did cuz i used kind of a diffrent method on this one and personally i think it worked alot more better, you're right i do need more elavation but this is sorta a sign that i am too me and thanx too you i just noticed that hook thing u mentioned i meant verse but i accidently swiched it around i fixed it now though

M.C. Streak 02-05-05 12:43 PM

I'd give an 8/10. u kept it consistent through out. i liked that. u gave good vocabs and multis respect on this one.

another thing is that really a freestyle. be honest with me

Mentor 02-05-05 12:47 PM

thanx man i'll remeba to return the favor whenever u come out wit' you're next

Kyleon 02-05-05 12:47 PM

dont forget to go peep my open mic fam...~1~

M.C. Streak 02-05-05 12:49 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by hood_dawg
thanx man i'll remeba to return the favor whenever u come out wit' you're next

there is another one called How it Got into me. I don't think it's even been reviewed i'd appreciate one. profilik i'll review yours 2

Mentor 02-05-05 12:50 PM

k i'll do that for both of ya

Mentor 02-05-05 03:17 PM

uppin on feedback.....

The Blacc Bar 02-05-05 04:12 PM

yo, i thought that was terrible homie, up ya game nigga

Mentor 02-05-05 05:32 PM

u only got 8 posts homie let's see who's got the best game..if u even could spit

Mentor 02-05-05 05:34 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by M.C. Streak
I'd give an 8/10. u kept it consistent through out. i liked that. u gave good vocabs and multis respect on this one.

another thing is that really a freestyle. be honest with me


ha not really don't think thats possible knowin that it's been typed but the name is the hardest thing to come up with for me i don't know why

Mentor 02-05-05 07:13 PM

uppin..............

Mentor 02-05-05 08:05 PM

still uppin.......

Mentor 02-06-05 12:02 AM

feedback.......

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 12:31 AM

yo nigga

havin 8 post makes me wack?

we can do dis nigga, u wack

yo ass need to calm down b4 u have a bitch fit

lil ho ass nigga

Mentor 02-06-05 02:14 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by -Mathmatics-
yo nigga

havin 8 post makes me wack?

we can do dis nigga, u wack

yo ass need to calm down b4 u have a bitch fit

lil ho ass nigga


doesn't matter u still wack bitch i checked ur feedback so shut the fuck up before u get bombed on

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 02:53 PM

wat u wanna do nigga

nuttin, lil bitch ass dont wanna do nuttin

lil jj_1 02-06-05 03:10 PM

ey yo HOOD dat was a nice piece,like streak said u kept it constant,good vocab u did ya thing man i give u a 8.5/10

Mentor 02-06-05 03:40 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by -Mathmatics-
wat u wanna do nigga

nuttin, lil bitch ass dont wanna do nuttin


whateva lil ho u ain't nuthin but a fuckin pussyfied whining bitch this a fuckin official beef now nigga

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 04:17 PM

yo nigga u aint shit

think u tight or sum tin, nigga dis aint no net shit

dis is CALI nigga, bodys get choped up out here

yo ass can get merked

u aint nuttin lil bitch made nigga

Mentor 02-06-05 04:25 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by -Mathmatics-
yo nigga u aint shit

think u tight or sum tin, nigga dis aint no net shit

dis is CALI nigga, bodys get choped up out here

yo ass can get merked

u aint nuttin lil bitch made nigga


will if i was over there you'd be wishin u were fuckin chopped up by the time i get done with your gay ass

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 04:29 PM

yo wat kinda nigga calls sum1 GAY

homo jokes or wayt eva da fuck u doin

dat shit aint koo, u mak'n ya self look bad

fuckin pussy as nigga

Mentor 02-06-05 04:32 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by -Mathmatics-
yo wat kinda nigga calls sum1 GAY

homo jokes or wayt eva da fuck u doin

dat shit aint koo, u mak'n ya self look bad

fuckin pussy as nigga


thats the only fuckin thing u know how to say "pussy ass nigga" and shit like that atleast i get pussy

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 04:33 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Hood_Dawg
i'm a white kid that'll love to get some respect in here and that'll kill for someone's thoughts on my flow


lmao, ^ dis nigga is gonna fuck me up?

Mentor 02-06-05 04:34 PM

yeah so what the fuck u gon do

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 04:37 PM

lol, i c rite now u jus a fake try'n to be hard

Mentor 02-06-05 04:45 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by -Mathmatics-
lol, i c rite now u jus a fake try'n to be hard


whatever i don't have to try to act hard u the fuckin hard ass

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 04:51 PM

i aint da 1 to fuck wit

if u call dat act'n hard then so be it Mista "Gangsta"

Mentor 02-06-05 04:52 PM

look who's talkin your ass ain't even close ta gangsta even though u claim ta be u nothin but fuckin soft

The Militant 02-06-05 04:55 PM

mathmatics stop runin ya fuckin mouth
yo hood dwag homie i liked it nice vocab and structre it was sorta like my open mic"ultimate rhyme slaughter"

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 04:57 PM

lmao, dam dis net shit is funny

yall got sum net egos, think'n i aint hard

lol, dam

The Militant 02-06-05 04:59 PM

if u live in cali come see ill give ya my addres and run ya mouth where i live see how long ya standin

Mentor 02-06-05 05:00 PM

thanx excell i appreciate that and yo mathematics u heard him ur the only fuckin one who's runnin ur mouth u start shit and i'll finish it so shut the hell up because we all know u ain't nuthin but a peice of shit

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 05:03 PM

yo, wat u wanna do XCell, wats up, u want sum to

yall niggas fuck'n each other or sumtin

Mentor 02-06-05 05:05 PM

what kind of nigga makes GAY homo jokes huh??

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 05:06 PM

u no wat, i take dat back

XCell, u from cali, and i aint beef'n wit no fam like dat so if u wanna take Hood's side, i dont care, but i aiint say'n shit

Mentor 02-06-05 05:07 PM

yeah that's what i thought u always pussy out

The Blacc Bar 02-06-05 05:12 PM

i said fuck u Hood Bitch, but XCell, i aint think'n bout him

Mentor 02-06-05 05:17 PM

sure u ain't is that the reason u were runnin ur mouth to him too bitch


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