who's wrong? ~street science~
Introductions~
Yo in life we all make our own decisions on how we choose to live,but some times things go wrong because of it,, But when it becomes hard just trying to survive The streets is all we got for a living,,, But we cant make it if we're still being prosecuted After our prison time has been searved,,, So who really needs to change,,if your asking for us to change? Follow me on this one.. ~Verse~ Yo im looking in the mirror checking out my reflection. The killer that i've become is far from prefection. The streets done got me changed an now im looking for directions. God forgive me for my deceptions The devil is using my weakness for his hotel an now he's checking in, To keep me from making corrections daum its stressing. Now im skipping breakfast the temptation has got me worried up. I never killed forreal ,but i still feel that im a murderer. On the the block serving a young mother with 3 kids, An no place to live an just been evicted its hard to live with this. Only God is my witness im holding a tight fist with nothing to grip. Dropping my chips over a fence where a body lays limp In his days you know he played pimp. What goes up must come down just like shawn kemp. Life goes on,but you got to know when to give in. We born in sin,but we got to ask for forgiveness. An we didnt bring the dope in the hood the white man did. We born black an ain't owning shit,but the white man is. Im tired of this shit! it was all a set up from the begaining! So whos "wining" the white man is because we all in prison! Man im getting older an jobs want hire because I been locked up. Incarcerated and remaining jobless some body got to stop this. Because they treating us like we opposites. When God made us all equal ,so why am I profitless? Looking for work an the proper respect they call us regects. Im looking for justice because ain't nobody else gone love us. The whole fucking world is under cover an trying to crush us. Instead of you giving us some thing you giving us nothing. You put us in this hole, Like a rat in a maze with cheese an let us go. To get us to entrap our selves or inslave our souls. Either way it goes you got to have some kind of control. Powers a pot of gold like the sun light an the rain. Every body want it so Im on the block just to maintain. Just to regain every thing i lost to the game. Survival of the fittest my only question is who given names? :nono: ~Outro~ Some times we end up locked up for trying to live an make money But if we're told that we can make a change then why is it so hard to get jobs after release? I'll tell you why if your a felon you want be hired in most of the cases. But not all,,,but how can we make it if the world want give us a second chance Thats why I wrote this because its the truth an it should be told.. Im not racist at all so lets not come at me with that type of feed back. im just writing the facts so lets make that clear! Music is a form of expression so im expressing my self through words I pray every day that God free's man of his evil ways An guide us in to the path of his will, God bless you all :thumbup: Copyright through:ASCAP:2004 Wrote by:Charles moody |
daum i guess it takes time to get feed so i'll wait.
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Now this is some messes up busines
I know i gave feed to some of you before i posted Daum can i get a what the hell or some thing? |
DEEP. Enough said. DEEP. I liek the structure
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thanks atleast some one knows im here,,,i'll return the feed
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well if any one wants feed then give i already gave so until i get it im not giving
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hmmmmm? looks like every one wants feed,,,but i posted before all of the new shit jumped up an none of yall gave so im not giving
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Shit just ain't changed around here....
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at all............................................... .........
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Im going to lose it real quick an snap like peas on some bitches
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I respect this.. FUCK the lazy people who dont drop feedback..
I liked this.. it had emotion.. some tenstion . . decent vocab but it dint need to be complex But is who is WE? you said about trying to make money and being locked up in jail . . i hope your not fake i hope this is real because. . I had hard times when my family were in trouble i did get tempted to try rob people because ssometimes when your broke as fuck that's the only thing that's comes in your mind.. but you know my mom got the job and now it's all good.. GOD came threw .. so it upsets me when people make fake raps about being broke and having to rob and go to jaill.. so i hope its real Anyway other than that it was good 8/10.. Peace. |
i liked it man....it was deep....you could feel the realness and the emotion in it.......i also hate the fuckers who dont give feed.....i have 2 open mics and no feed on either one......try n return the favor......one is called true life hero and the other is called everything....thanks
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Thanks my life has not been the best
but God has taken over an he's really showing me the way These feeling are real theres nothing fake about hard times Thanks for the feed an feed back will be given back,, right about now,,,brb |
done,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,thanks again for the feed
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next,,,,well......???????????????/
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speechlessness has come over me after reading that piece.100/100.keep em' comin'.
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First off u think ur life is hard, Depends how u look at it, dependz how u play ur card, im tellin u straight that ur thinkin like a retard, now remember n regard that everybody in life gets scarred..
N Right now ur outta jail, it dont matta if u out on bail, u can still go an look up at tha starz, feel happy dat u aint still behind barz, Jus dont be crazy, dont be thinkin 2 go out n rob a few carz... Don't sit down n think, start makin ureself depressed, ur alive so think of ureself as blessed... Sumtimes even i feel down, an insted of wearin a smile i wear a frown... Im jus a white 16 yr old livin in a UK ghetto keepin it real, racism is ma biggest problem, u feel.. Unlike otha white ppl i aint rich.. bein round black ppl all tha time, hearin dem call eachotha nigga's startin to feel a bitch, sumtimes i feel i dont fit in ... wen ppl say shit like coz im white i shuddnt spit, sayin i shud learn da violin :nono: Be happy in life n u'll survive, let ure happiness thrive.. for as long as ur alive... Seriously, u need to start thinkin differently... |
i liked had a solid flow nice muiltis i could picture the image well!
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Thanks i'll return the feed back
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hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm?
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“Look girl it’s your birthday and Its Thursday the worse
Can say is I love you and I’m a thug too like your purse And the mini-skirt wanna do plenty work girl as you know Rhymes I thrust them in my script right now wanna go Custom fit your lips// to mine when kissing and stuff Can hear you puff don’t wear earmuff so I’m clear and ruff With sex like KOBE body drove me MADD” “wait MADD You want pound cake so don’t clown or fake I’m glad My butt round and great, |
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Oh yea flywhiteguy i know you might have ment well but daum hommie i asked for feed back not insults look at what you wrote
First off u think ur life is hard, Depends how u look at it, dependz how u play ur card, im tellin u straight that ur thinkin like a retard, Where im from you think what you were tought an you learn from what you go through So how do you think im going to think for the time being until change comes in to my life,we all got hard times im just stating some of the facts not all So people are always going to have there own way of thinking When i write i write for a sulution not to cause problems I write to release stress an to clear my mind and it works So thanks for the feed back but people are always going to have problems no matter where you go or what you do thats just the way it is But out of it all God still loves you,,but some of us even refuse to believe Just because they cant see him or touch him,,but he's always been there for me And im sure he's always been there for you and others Dont get me wrong i wrote this to release my stress im feeling some times But in hip hop you got to watch what you say to people dog in the future dont post a flow just give me feed back I would never tell some to think differently if i dont know what they been through But i will offer the word of God ,because only he can help us think differently And only he can bring change into any ones life even minds,,, But thanks for the responce just give feed back instead of a flow because you could have put that up for the whole site to see now the only way they see it is through minds not a good thing I want them to see your work so it can stand alone a shine like all of our work should 1 Your words Seriously, u need to start thinkin differently... My words Only God can change my way of thinking And its not like im out to kill any one so theres not much to change But only to share my creativity with the world through my pain |
Madrapper now i dont know what you were thinking
but feed back wasnt one of them atleast from what i can tell any way ~Your words~ Look girl it’s your birthday and Its Thursday the worse Can say is I love you and I’m a thug too like your purse And the mini-skirt wanna do plenty work girl as you know Rhymes I thrust them in my script right now wanna go Custom fit your lips// to mine when kissing and stuff Can hear you puff don’t wear earmuff so I’m clear and ruff With sex like KOBE body drove me MADD” “wait MADD You want pound cake so don’t clown or fake I’m glad My butt round and great, ~My words~ I only needed feed back daum hommie,,lol its not doing me any good to here about pound cake, Like i told ol boy just drop some feed an i'lll be happy with that, Now the only way your flow will be seen is through minds, Not a good thing it should stand alone and shine like every one elses. 1 |
feed back wouldnt hurt people
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Not badd "G" $$$$ :shoot:
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aight now we going some where...upping
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yo jus remember...jus because white "men"(more like pussies) are in power dont mean white people are...it took my mom 14 years to get us out.....so i kno what its like to struggle...and im white and u kno i got much luv 4 u...keep ur head up cause life is hard iight much luv peace ~1~...
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K... so u want sum feedback huh... i aint flowin now... im talkin... well, typin...
i thought dat ur flo woz gud, needz a few more rhymez but yea, it woz gud, gettin ur point across about how u feel well... Keep em cummin..... .........safe. PS.. not all flowz 'Shine'... Tha woz jus sumthin i typed back @ u cos i was bored... tried 2 get ma point bout ur flo back @ u thru another flo... anywayyz l8rzz.... |
yo sup mic still no holla or pm lol....u didnt forget about me did u i gave u feed on dis and ya other piece...its insane16 boy i changed my anme but still the same mane i kno u remember my ass....cuz i will neva forget u homie....
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Whats up Soul Sickness long time no see,,,I only got a minute i have to go,
But thanks for keeping it real with me,, an thanks to all of those who did give feed back to me I dont get it much,,but its all good i just want post until i see more feed on these then i'll post again daum writting an waisting my time God bless all 1 |
Words spoken only by a friend who has never left my side
Its good to be back,,but yo people on here like mad rapper saying dumb shit like pound cake lol,,,stupid shit like that,,,when all i wanted was feed back daum,,,,,,lol Thanks fly guy for the feed back you know your aight by me,, |
man dat was hell thurl,i like dat man it was deep
keep doin ya thing man.return da fav. will ya? |
Thanks i'll return the feed right about.....now..brb
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Feeding is healthy,,lol
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