mizz fyre vs NiggaPlease
Battle Rules: topic:Broken Dreams
16-30 lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Me and mizz fyre will return the favor for all honest votes :thumbup: Minimum posts to vote: 150 Check in by: 08-27-05 at 02:59 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. Closed - Expired battle win |
mizz fyre has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-27-05 02:00 PM.
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NiggaPlease has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-27-05 02:00 PM.
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The day my life came to a hault was amazing you see Bodies were dropped lives were stopped it all started with me Drug hustlin the hoes was cum guzzlin the livin was great I was liven the black mans dream but did not no my brothers fate In 8th grade my brother was noticed for his athletic ability Jake his name was an all around athlete with great agility Followed my hustle he was a real classs act He carried a 9 cuz in fights he didnt know how to react Fast foward the story he was already a senior Colleges were after him, but he had to get leaner My guilty concious told him bout tha shit i use I call it my juice now knowing my bro wont refuse Leaner he got the colleges were jaw droppin astonished Star in the making what eva he wanted...my man he got it Not knowing the effects the juice really had on his body He was angry i saw him beatin up on the shotties Knowing what i did responsible for my brothers actions Jake did what i did now his personality is lackin The struggle gets greater the colleges begin to close they jaws Hopes were let down my brother met his only flaw His emotions got greater anger was always letting out Couldnt have a family dinner with out jake having to shout Hustlin 9 ta 5 my brother by my side.....angry as can be 80 dollars owed to the man my bro short 40 for the extasy selfless to himself my brothers emotions just collide He pulls out his nine.....but is shot first....and he lost his life Not happy with this mess, inside its all of my fault 9 bodies dead but not me my brothers dead my life comes to a hault Bodying my emotions to my family i let out a scream ITS ALL MY FAULT MOM, I KILLED JAKES ONLY DREAM! |
g/l mizz fyre!.....after she posts uppin for explained votes
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News alert
The rise in crime on our streets have sadly taken the lives of 3 young males In the hope of catching the killer, the mothers of the victims tell their tale Mother #1 Eyes of deep brown, tall in stature, physically fit and never challenged mentally That was my son, his life painfully taken, police claiming it was done accidentally He had so much to live for, he dreamt of working through college, succeeding While others were out partying each night, he stayed in continuously reading He rolled with only two friends and at times they seemed to much to handle Now as I light this candle, I hope to find his killer and put an end to the scandal Mother #2 Jealousy killed my son, he was enticed to a slow death by his vengeful peers All those years he worked so hard, for every one my eyes emitted tears He was everything I could have dreamed, a model object of perfection If only there was some hope that I could provide him with a resurrection Mother #3 I can’t believe what I’m hearing I’m thinking that maybe you two are deluded Mother one, did you forget the time that your son made you feel so excluded These three caused havoc in society, they only got exactly what they deserved Yeah I was the quiet one among us, but don’t be fooled, coz I sure observed Your sons brought mine down, captured him, then broke his every dream An act of supremacy that somehow managed to boost their self-esteem Appearances can be deceptive, that’s how I know the killer of these three I look you in the eyes today, hold my hands up and tell you it was……me! News breaking The mother of one of the victims, left us with these words spoken What’s the point in living, when it comes to having all your dreams broken? |
aight vote it up...................................
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uppin fo votes, g/l mizz fyre :thumbup:...........
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uppin for votes....................................atleast peep this lol
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This was feedback posted for NiggaPlease
yo that shit was deep...both of yall did madd nice...i cant vote cuz i dont have enuff pots but i can still post feedback...this is to both yall... nice job both of ya and i dont think i wouldnt vpted anyway cuz it was pretty evenly matched...nice job both of you...keep it up:thumbs up:
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^^^thanx ya'll.........uppin...........................
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B/S vote^^ please remove.....................UPPIN FO VOTES :thumbup:
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This was feedback posted for mizz fyre
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bump.............................................. .......
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uppin for more votes.......................................
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This was feedback posted for NiggaPlease
just looking threw......see the polls
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This was feedback posted for mizz fyre
checkin pollz............................................. ...
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Voted For: NiggaPlease
Niggaplease had better structure overall, his story was better more deeper, NiggaPlease ending was overall better than mizz fyre, his story, was more focused overall his was just better this vote goes to niggaplease |
^^thanks bump......................................
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bumpity bump.............................................. .....
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i believe once again im uppin :) :banghead: :thumbup: :banghead:
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This was feedback posted for NiggaPlease
Me and mizz fyre will return the favor for all honest votes :thumbup:
^^get off my balls faggot |
This was feedback posted for mizz fyre
I can't vote yet but i thought you won nice drop and good battle
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^^^thankyou for the feed................uppin ya'll..........
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uppin...........dont sleep on this vote it up...................oh yea fuck macreep
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This was feedback posted for mizz fyre
i cant vote but if i could i would vote for mizz fyre
her flow was better..and she had nice structure... overall her verse was better more clear and eaier to invision |
iight iight, bumpity bump..........................
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This was feedback posted for mizz fyre
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This was feedback posted for NiggaPlease
just check-in polls...................................
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checkin pollz checkin pollzz FUCKING VOTE :) :finger: :banghead:
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uppin this shit....bump...................................... ...
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This was feedback posted for NiggaPlease
props to both of you if this is n please then i was not expectign this from you lol i expected something wack but you actually came pretty decent.your flow was alot better than mizz's but she came more creative with her idea but props to both of you you're doing the damn thing
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^thanks for the props and feedback.......and yes i am Nplease.......uppin for votes
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