*antic* vs Carmelo
 

Battle Rules:

8 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 03-15-06 at 02:11 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

*Antic* has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-12-06 02:14 PM.

Carmelo has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-12-06 02:26 PM.

gonna try somethin' different wit my text...


This 'kid's wack' I'll 'pimp slap' and 'smack this tight vet's drop'
'Till the color leaves his face like his 'black and white head shot'*

His style's yellow grass cuz I'm 'rippin' this trained dog' to 'take loss' Only when 'he shits in the same spot' is he 'gittin his name dropped'

Smash him black and blue now you see tha 'face of a bruised man'
He couldn't "eat cats" if chinese restaurants 'gave'um a food stamp'!!

'Send stretchers' cuz I'ma lay out this 'geek of a trend setter'**
He couldn't "feel flow" sleepin' wit the 'sheets of a bed-wetter'


*His avy looks like a rapper's headshot...
**His avy says 'trend setter'.

-just some text shit, if ya don't understand, then don't vote.

Compare ya puns to Knock off antiques, old style aint worth jack-shit..
'Fuck-It' I'ma beat up this pussy faster than Pedos attackin-clit
You can brag a bit...My shits like Dragon spit..Its straight fire...
Fuck sex-sellin...
..................You couldnt Make A Page if you was to date-Mya
I hate-liars...Put away your ego, It Aint Impressin Or Stressin'-Me
I'ma School U Like 'Community College' cos' this Lessons-Free
Your more than less an emcee?...HA! I Think U Need to sit & Chill..
You dont have Subliminal disses..
............................ya just ''flappin ya jaw'' like you 'Spit on pills'*





Spit on pills= like ecstacy lol...peoples jaws start movin when they taken some ex lol.
& the first line about antiques cos his name is 'Antic'...but I guess y'all would of figured as much, so Yea'.

dont understand any of the verses? then dont vote, yo.

Thats ok....Not a bad verse, now lets get some voters on this....

man, if I had a buck for every time someone came at me with the antic/antique line...nice drop though, liked your last bar.

Voted For: *Antic*

damn, this was a hard DeCision

AnTiC:

Ya Multi's was on point....

i like this:Smash him black and blue now you see tha 'face of a bruised man'
He couldn't "eat cats" if chinese restaurants 'gave'um a food stamp'!!"

^^ that was funni as hell, cuz chinese people really be doing that shyt...

mmmm, i didnt recall seeing any personals though....but overall i liked ya structure..that was creative.... and the way ya shyt flowed...it was hot..


Carmelo:

Dude ya verse was on point too, but, it was'nt on point like AnTiCz....i like ya multis also, but i dont like ur structure...I Dunno, i like the quotes and swiggly lines structure thingy... ha..



this was a hard ass decions....but vote goes to

AnTiC

Voted For: Carmelo

carmelo had a bit more creativeness to hes verse but punches wasnt hard hitting flow was decent anttic verse was lackin punches creativeness was low you could of done better then this....

vote: carmelo...

This was feedback posted for Carmelo
 

Antic-
First off I think u should of dimmed down your multis a little bit because the flow fell of sometimes..Still important even in text..But anyways, the beginning was good, flow and structure fell off at times. Vocab was decent, and so was the punches and wordplay..Multis were good for the most part and same with the metas. Finisher seemed pretty played out.

Overall-Straight verse, just dim down your multis to work the flow better. Up your punches as well..

Carmelo-Beginning was nice..Flow was on point..Your structure was different though, Lol..Vocab was nice, punches and wordplay was def. dope..Multis were pretty good, and so was the metas..Finisher was nice..

Overall-Straight verse just up on your structure a bit..

VOTE-Carmelo because his punches were a little more effective then Antics even though he was nice as well, just Carm came a little stronger thats all..props to both emcees
~1~

Appreciate the feed/votes on this

y'all stay up and keep it poppin and active!!!


Drop links in th future and I'll be sure to rtf.

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Bo-Bo-Bo-Bo-Booooooo................Bumpin'.......

Voted For: Carmelo

Carmelo Got this 1 str8 up.....

U had pretty good structure.... nice flow & sum killa punches... plus ya structure was on point also... I like ya style Melo keep it real...

Antic _ Your structure was great... had a few punches... but wasn't enuff still think that Melo got u on this.....

-Deuce-

Voted For: *Antic*

*Antic*:
This 'kid's wack' I'll 'pimp slap' and 'smack this tight vet's drop'
'Till the color leaves his face like his 'black and white head shot'*
4/10 - OK Opener.

His style's yellow grass cuz I'm 'rippin' this trained dog' to 'take loss' Only when 'he shits in the same spot' is he 'gittin his name dropped'
5/10 - Good Punch.

Smash him black and blue now you see tha 'face of a bruised man'
He couldn't "eat cats" if chinese restaurants 'gave'um a food stamp'!!
7/10 - hahahhaha. Niiice.

'Send stretchers' cuz I'ma lay out this 'geek of a trend setter'**
He couldn't "feel flow" sleepin' wit the 'sheets of a bed-wetter'
5/10 - Good Closer.
21/40

This is one of the best verse I have seen you drop. You used some good punches and rhymes. it flowed well and had good multi's.


Carmelo:
Compare ya puns to Knock off antiques, old style aint worth jack-shit..
'Fuck-It' I'ma beat up this pussy faster than Pedos attackin-clit
2/10 - Weak Opener.
You can brag a bit...My shits like Dragon spit..Its straight fire...
Fuck sex-sellin...
..................You couldnt Make A Page if you was to date-Mya
4/10 - Ok Punch
I hate-liars...Put away your ego, It Aint Impressin Or Stressin'-Me
I'ma School U Like 'Community College' cos' this Lessons-Free
7/10 - Niice Punchline.
Your more than less an emcee?...HA! I Think U Need to sit & Chill..
You dont have Subliminal disses..
............................ya just ''flappin ya jaw'' like you 'Spit on pills'*
3/10 - Weak Closer.
16/40

You had a pretty weak verse, I wasnt feelin' your flow, or many of your punches, you used one good one.


OVERALL: This was a ok battle, but I give my vote to Ant. I liked his punches better, he used a better wordplay as well. Carmelo used the best punch in this battle but the rest of his bars were babblin' words. Didnt really like em. No HATE!

Vote - Ant.

Haaaaaaaaaa &

BO-BO-BO-BO-BO...

Bumpin'..../

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This was feedback posted for *Antic*
 

Those metas.... Funny as hell.
Cats?
ROFLROFL kkk

This was feedback posted for Carmelo
 

Carmelo is nuuuuuts......

:cool:


BLACK HAND....Yup, we are the gang

Bumpin This.......

Yup.....

......Mynamesgrafhyall.....

Voted For: Carmelo

Yo Antic Da Opener Wuz Not Good Bcuz He Haz A Babies Head Dere Yo

Otha Den Dat Yo Verse Wuz Kinna Nyce, Im Finna Drop Yo Hot Barz Na

Smash him black and blue now you see tha 'face of a bruised man'
He couldn't "eat cats" if chinese restaurants 'gave'um a food stamp'!!

'Send stretchers' cuz I'ma lay out this 'geek of a trend setter'**
He couldn't "feel flow" sleepin' wit the 'sheets of a bed-wetter'

Dem Wuz Iight On Da Breezy


Yo Carm Yo Verse Wuz Hot 2 Diz Wuzza Close Battle On Da Rilla

IP:


Compare ya puns to Knock off antiques, old style aint worth jack-shit..
'Fuck-It' I'ma beat up this pussy faster than Pedos attackin-clit
You can brag a bit...My shits like Dragon spit..Its straight fire...
Fuck sex-sellin...
..................You couldnt Make A Page if you was to date-Mya

Your more than less an emcee?...HA! I Think U Need to sit & Chill..
You dont have Subliminal disses..
............................ya just ''flappin ya jaw'' like you 'Spit on pills'*

Im Luv'n Dem Barz Ma Nucca Yall 2 Had Nyce Verses But Carm Getz Mah Vote But Barely Yo


Carm Getz Da Punz n Mettaz But Anticz Get Da Personalz sSo Mah Vote Goez 2 Carm Good Battle Booth

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This was feedback posted for Carmelo
 

Your more than less an emcee?...HA! I Think U Need to sit & Chill..
You dont have Subliminal disses..
............................ya just ''flappin ya jaw'' like you 'Spit on pills'

Game over. Carmelo should win.

Voted For: Carmelo

i still wanna battle u but this nigga weak tho. u might as well set us up

lol @ battlin you.

I'm not gonna be doin that, son.

lame...that dude's vote is unexplained. Fuck it, I don't care.

uppin'.

Voted For: *Antic*

antic:
ya punchez were pretty weak, but they were punchez. work on ya wordplay cuz the kind you have right now is pretty forced. just keep writin.

carm:
most of your shit was self glorification. only one or two punchez that really hit effectively. work on makin sure you make punchez and not self glorification shit.

v- antic

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Voted For: Carmelo

Carmelo get my vote just because i liked his verse better because of of the punches but they both had nice personal but i liked the punches

like this
I hate-liars...Put away your ego, It Aint Impressin Or Stressin'-Me
I'ma School U Like 'Community College' cos' this Lessons-Free