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opt1k vs black~magik
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20-25 lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting no hate votes Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 07-17-05 at 07:54 PM Must drop verse in 120 minutes after check in. |
this is a topical battle and the topic is:inside my head homie!!!
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opt1k has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-17-05 07:01 PM.
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BLACK~MAGIK has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-17-05 07:06 PM.
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so many people all wonder of the things i think
but just pay attention and keep ur eyes insinc. now first i grew up in a bad neighborhood. my family always beat on me left me up to no good. so i was taought to never backdown from any fight even if i knew i was gon loose to my parents it was right. never understood them,why i was raised like that. but i could never question them so i aint never goin back. but now my wish has been granted they are truely gon both passed away in an accident they never knew what went wrong. so i always have anger and pain inside me killing me and drivin me crazy not takin it lightly. now most all think is this a real story........ yes it is but i dont no pity from you for me.... many people deprived ended up to lie and steal. i stabbed a store owner for turning me in poppin the pill so i went to juvy for maybe about 8 months as soon as i came out my uncles wanted to fuck me up so i ran very fast and never once did i look back... then one day i did beat 2 of my uncles wit a bat. then i split and ended up on an island called guam... never ever smiling people askin son whats wrong. and the memories start rushing through my head then i get up and scream bitch i wish i was dead. this a true story!!!!!!now i am 17 years old....... this all happen from age 8-14!!!!!!!!!!!parents died when i was 7...... |
Inside My Head While deep issues find something ta seep into I speak wit you I've seen the proud, break down, facing what we've been thru Satan wants me to repent to, but i cant ryhme wit a straight mental Tho i write, grippin it so tight, that i just break pencils To hates simple but i loathe the way my mind speaks How could i worship the cross, when im so lost, i cant even find me Its not tha danger behind beef or tha anger a mic breeds Its tha fact I was born, thats eating a hole inside me Pain has me unable to write deep so i sacrifice heeps ta ride beats From a world based on wide beliefs i have only a single thought Would i really risk, commercializin a gift, jus ta have my single drop? "Magik thats evil dawg dont set those people off", bein legal costs How could i ever equal god,when i cant get my head straight Will i rot in prison, if i take the compititions, breath away Cant find a mental resting place, so i ingest tha hate, as iner beef escalates On a search for escalades, my connection fades, wit the difference of right n wrong Which is why, u'll find more then lines,when you look inside my songs |
Uppin Thru The Fucking Roof...
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uppin homie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!uppin!!!!!!!!!!fasho ayo nuce drop homie!!!!!!!!!!!
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You too, nice drop
Uppin This Shit |
Voted For: BLACK~MAGIK
Ok, black gets this in my opinion its not that yours was bad optik, just it seems yours was too simple wheras blakcs was more complex, it had a better flow decent vocab and imagery was there in both. Optiks had the better emotion and that was the key thing in his. Just need to work on your structure and vocab. NO HATE |
Voted For: opt1k
damn...*tear...tear*...someone tell me how to vote on a topical... Removed |
my fault i didn't mean to vote...i meant for feedback
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Voted For: BLACK~MAGIK
black gets this however opt1k had a nice compelling story that got to me...it just shooda been worded and written better opt1k-great stroy, the fact that its true helps you out alot, however the way you wrote it wasnt very decriptive and didnt give me a great image, wordchoice coodve been better black-good vocab, nice wordchoice, had me feelign like i wzs inside your mind and reading your thoguhts, nice drop good imagery overall-i feel like black stayed on topic better, he also had good imagery and better wordchoice, so my vote gowes to him, very nice stroy though opt1k... v/black~magik |
This was feedback posted for BLACK~MAGIK
wow deep thats some deep shit. i think black came with a lot more multis n word play. thats a crazy story optik. oer all straight battle. keep it up n elevate
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Voted For: BLACK~MAGIK
Easily man... B.M. gets this... Topically off the shizzie. That line where you said you're so lost you can't even find yourself, dope man. Emotion was great, concept was simple but well brought about. Every topical peice you drop you get better and i'm not just saying that, real good shit dude. opt1k- good story but the emotion wasn't really there as well as it was in B.M.'s.. Waaaaaay too basic for going against BM... vocab was basic as well and you seem like a beginner. But I may be wrong. Elevate, the challenge him, own him, pat yourself on the back. Land with your feet on the bolts, ride away clean. Vote, BM |
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Uppin Thru The Fucking Roof...
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Caw Caw!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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ayo uppin this shit homie!!!!!!!!!!!!bump the votes homie!!!
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Voted For: opt1k
Hey man... You started of pretty bad but came out on top at the end so many people all wonder of the things i think but just pay attention and keep ur eyes insinc. it was good but needs elevation and the memories start rushing through my head then i get up and scream bitch i wish i was dead. Pretty nice bar goin on there You had good punches but didnt hav that much of a good structure.... Mutis i award to Black magik.....he came out with a good starter but ended pretty bad....u had also good punches but tiny bit weak.... This was a good battle but opt1k had better flows to black magik...... This vote goes to Opt1k!!! Word Up |
This is a topical battle, there weren't supposed to be punches involved.
Sorry Opt1k... |
Voted For: BLACK~MAGIK
Fuck y'alll ain't say topical battle in rules? But anyways....that Black Magic guy won. |
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