spiky2k8 vs Da Jokah
 

rules are: 10 line min to 30 line max
no d/r hate votes..honest and explained votes only
no recyclin' or bitin
u spit first

chekin in........

new rule due in 30 mins.........forgot to put that in tha rules aight one....drop homie

yo drop ya muh fuckin shit nigga ...u spit first lets go....

i see yo name jokah its more like me playn a
game of pokah/
its more your da joke and i'm da pranksta caus
i'll show that i'm a gangsta/
u typen while i'm spitn but i think u petn som
kittens/
sorry to put u on the spot but i'm on fire and
your not/
people wont give me vote cause they they
awoke yet /
i'm da future of rapperz not a amateur/
its like u a extra in life and i'm here to kill yo ass
with a knife b4 another nigga take yo life/
do u think i'm playn or do u here what i'm say/
yo raps is weak and it puts me to sleep aint
sad are u getting/
i'm only 13 and i'm rockn mic so maybe u can
get out my sight/
or i just might keep go'n n go'n like a durecell
battery/
i hope i win this caus i just wasted my time
try'n to rhyme against u/
so what i'm do /

i'm done son
peace


vote 4 me b4 u vote against me
ight

see ya
i'm gone and long gone for now on
just playn but i'm done with this battle

vote for me dont vote against me vote
for ight
thanx

also sorry it took me so long my computer
froze
sorry

??????????

need some votes please give me some votes
i need them
ight

ayo chek it

i dont wanna fuck up dis lil nigga and get charged for underage shit//
and ya mom been round da block and nigga she got a undapayed clit//
and iam a make dis nigga like LOSTCHILD and make up a crew to vote for him//
this nigga is so pussy he gettin his home boiz to toke for him//
this lil kid is 13 ..but he runnin around actin like he big cheese//
and u spiky nigga and u aint commin out till 2k8..nigga pleaze//
and iam pettin a cat bcuz rounbd herre iam da kingping//
ayo ja iam mean spiky tel me waats da next "rap" song u gon' sing-in?//
u da battery right nigga but iam da bunny u see on ya t.v//
bang ya drums and shit..look in ya moms room..who da nigga u see?//
fuck u nigga tellin ppl vote for me vote for me..shut up motha fuckah//
wen i was fuckin ya mom i just should have slapped her..na i should have stuck her//
and dont get mad cuz u loosin to a nigga named da jokah//
dis yung nigga runnin round tellin his bois*ayo ayo im gonna poke her*//
fuckin bitch u probably jus gettin ya wet dreams//
aight here we go ..u da rookie iam da vet..QUEENZ//

wun muh fuckah..

uppin fo votes^^^^

uppin for votes
uppin for votes
need those votes

spiky:


i see yo name jokah its more like me playn a
game of pokah/
its more your da joke and i'm da pranksta caus
i'll show that i'm a gangsta/
-not a very good start
or i just might keep go'n n go'n like a durecell
battery/
i hope i win this caus i just wasted my time
try'n to rhyme against u/
so what i'm do /
-the ending screwed ur chance of winning...
okay overall u was wack.. u had no consistent flow and ur structure sucked ass.. ur rhymes arent good either'

Da Jokah:
i dont wanna fuck up dis lil nigga and get charged for underage shit//
and ya mom been round da block and nigga she got a undapayed clit//
-nice start, even tho i think its a bit forced
and iam a make dis nigga like LOSTCHILD and make up a crew to vote for him//
this nigga is so pussy he gettin his home boiz to toke for him//
-another nice one, seems a little forced
fuckin bitch u probably jus gettin ya wet dreams//
aight here we go ..u da rookie iam da vet..QUEENZ//
-weak ending.. but its all u need

jokah stayed consistent till he got to the end.. but its more than wut spiky had... jokah also came hard wit some punches.. vote=jokah

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

aight thanx uppin fo votes.........

i think spikey won cause he had a better rhyme
it was as marvelous as of something i cant
describe spikey structure was marvelous and
wacky

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

hahaha ok w.e uppin fo votes...*cough* dick rydah*cough*

uppin fo votes^^^^^^^^^^^

Flow-DJ
Multis-DJ
Personals-DJ
Punches-DJ
Structure-DJ
Overall-Dj

Kinda one sided but good battle.
Return honost votes plz(in sig)

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

uppin fo votes****

Yo return with honost vote plz

aight wen i get back in 20 mins aight wun

this was a okay battle both was in it untill rthe end but jokah had beeta flow and pucnhes and ending he win by a long shot spiky u getting betta way beeat than yo other battle jokah u need to stop taking easy on these rook iight vote on my battle aginst spikey honestly iight

aight upppin fo votes....

jokah go vote on my battle aginst spikey2k8
sorry i dont have link and vote honestly

i'm askn ya'll for some votes vote me please
thanx

ayo bitch u cant just ask ppl fo votes u gotta earn tha fuckin votes aight...

i dont wanna fuck up dis lil nigga and get charged for underage shit//
and ya mom been round da block and nigga she got a undapayed clit//
and iam a make dis nigga like LOSTCHILD and make up a crew to vote for him//
this nigga is so pussy he gettin his home boiz to toke for him//
this lil kid is 13 ..but he runnin around actin like he big cheese//
and u spiky nigga and u aint commin out till 2k8..nigga pleaze//
and iam pettin a cat bcuz rounbd herre iam da kingping//
ayo ja iam mean spiky tel me waats da next "rap" song u gon' sing-in?//
u da battery right nigga but iam da bunny u see on ya t.v//
bang ya drums and shit..look in ya moms room..who da nigga u see?//
fuck u nigga tellin ppl vote for me vote for me..shut up motha fuckah//
wen i was fuckin ya mom i just should have slapped her..na i should have stuck her//
and dont get mad cuz u loosin to a nigga named da jokah//
dis yung nigga runnin round tellin his bois*ayo ayo im gonna poke her*//
fuckin bitch u probably jus gettin ya wet dreams//
aight here we go ..u da rookie iam da vet..QUEENZ//

decent verse but spiky look at his structure and try doin the same with your verse it makes it flow better and not looked so fucked up to where you gotta look an read your lines 4 times to find the punchs in the mjust elevate and REALLY REALLY work on your structure

waat he said.........and dont jus asume cuz u fuckin ask u gon get votes yo

come on vote for me please i will return
tha favor aight thanx people i thank u all
ight peace
bye

u dont fuckin undastand do u hahaha damn u thick headed homie...
uppin fo votes////////

i see yo name jokah its more like me playn a
game of pokah/
its more your da joke and i'm da pranksta caus
i'll show that i'm a gangsta/
wtf...no punch...
u typen while i'm spitn but i think u petn som
kittens/
sorry to put u on the spot but i'm on fire and
your not/
pettin kittens....gay...
people wont give me vote cause they they
awoke yet /
i'm da future of rapperz not a amateur/
people wont give u votes cuz u dont even rhyme...
its like u a extra in life and i'm here to kill yo ass
with a knife b4 another nigga take yo life/
do u think i'm playn or do u here what i'm say/
no punch...
yo raps is weak and it puts me to sleep aint
sad are u getting/
i'm only 13 and i'm rockn mic so maybe u can
get out my sight/
no punch here either...
or i just might keep go'n n go'n like a durecell
battery/
i hope i win this caus i just wasted my time
try'n to rhyme against u/
so what i'm do /
dude its energizer...

Okay your verse SUCKED....GO TO TUTUORIALS AND READ ABOUT PUNCHES.....nothin else i can say but elevate....

i dont wanna fuck up dis lil nigga and get charged for underage shit//
and ya mom been round da block and nigga she got a undapayed clit//
not that great of a punch...
and iam a make dis nigga like LOSTCHILD and make up a crew to vote for him//
this nigga is so pussy he gettin his home boiz to toke for him//
not feelin it...
this lil kid is 13 ..but he runnin around actin like he big cheese//
and u spiky nigga and u aint commin out till 2k8..nigga pleaze//
not feelin this either....
and iam pettin a cat bcuz rounbd herre iam da kingping//
ayo ja iam mean spiky tel me waats da next "rap" song u gon' sing-in?//
ehh....
u da battery right nigga but iam da bunny u see on ya t.v//
bang ya drums and shit..look in ya moms room..who da nigga u see?//
come on...
fuck u nigga tellin ppl vote for me vote for me..shut up motha fuckah//
wen i was fuckin ya mom i just should have slapped her..na i should have stuck her//
wack....
and dont get mad cuz u loosin to a nigga named da jokah//
dis yung nigga runnin round tellin his bois*ayo ayo im gonna poke her*//
weak...
fuckin bitch u probably jus gettin ya wet dreams//
aight here we go ..u da rookie iam da vet..QUEENZ//
horrible...

Okay you had rhyme scheme at least....but no punches...u attempted ish but it was wack....jus elevate and practice punches......elevate....

Vote - da jokah cuz his rhymed and he attempted punches...

need yo vote man vote for me please i'll return tha ffavor please vote
for me
uppin for some votes
man

da jokah ripped thi s fake ass nucca
punches - d
flow - d
everything else - d

yo bitch stop askin ppl to vote for yur worthless ass aight....uppin fo votes

yo ma man jokah got this shit. you won homie. QUEEEEEENS TILL I DIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1