i love you too much
eva since i saw ashlee simpson
i've been thinkin of her since than a dream come true would be me and you i'll put on a charm to get you in my arm i'll even protect you from harm under this misery i made a big discovery i need a lover see and your the one for me so believe me i'll make it easy for you all you gotta do is always be true if you eva sad i'll be there to comfort you i wont ask for much and baby i got the perfect touch so come on my level you could pick the place where we could settle your so sweet that you sweep me of my feet baby im super nice and with me around niggas will think twice my love for you i'll spit it and with you i will kick it you always in my dreams my love for you aint a skeme we could keep it on the low or every1 could know ashlee your so fine you really blow my mind |
this is specail so dont hate on it.just view and if dont like it or if you just hate it dont reply
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how is anyone gonna give you constructive critism then so you can elavate then?
Personally I thought it was too basic and it didn't flow that well |
thats fine
what should i do to make better. :help:
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dawg, you need to elevate ya rhymes to a higher level, you need more depth, consistency and wordplay
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aight. your advice helps. every1 says im too basic.
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yeah dawg you need to think up some depth.....What do you listen to?
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dawg, peep tha song Resevoir Dogs off Jay-z Vol 2. listen to both sauce and jay on that song dawg, they got sick deep verses....
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aight thanx.
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good shit but like they say work on ur flow n wordplay expand ur skill use more punches,multies,wordplay depending da track otha than dat good drop i feel it cuz i kno how u feel peace out dawg 1 luv holla
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use bigger words to ryme other then like ryme and time or hoe flow get what im sayin u need to elevate more aight holla
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aight thanx all to all who replyed
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c'mon ppl view ma shit plz i leave feed back fo you
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hey try something like this yo
Faced trashy exemption but ASHLEE SIMPSON is like A respected logo feel rejected as a bozo going loco with hype Wanna lick you like ice cream boo, have nice dreams of you My love grow like a farm, use glow and charm to throw you In my arms, discover the lover I Am a clubber with a damn Lex drop ram sex hot. |
how the fuck do you come up wit that shit i wish i thought like that thanx
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Ashlee Simpson...............isn't that Jessica Simpson's little sis????? |
hell yeah i like brats ha ha. i know she aint the hottest but shes ma type
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yo right now im in love wit this girl named idyllic queen.
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