_JooKsta_ vs CeleriTy
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8 - 16 Line No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 05-14-05 at 03:12 AM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. Closed - Expired / old battle win |
_JooKsta_ has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-14-05 12:13 AM.
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CeleriTy has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-14-05 12:13 AM.
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Niceness concurs you lost from the start, this kid simply not got the spark Stoppin' ya hart, chance of winnin', drinkin' in shadows, a shot in the dark Amateur RV kids, are like birthday candles, stand to get blown quick Throw in the towel, then use it to hide your head Bin-Laden associates Sonn choosing to lie or bluff, claimed flames, but ya fire's snuffed Ya style's rough, as though you stopped tryin' like a retired judge Having to fight fool's advances so we know who rightful champ is Cut ya up, cuz my punches are spiked, supplying high-school dances :thumbup: |
imma come at u wit da verses-of-death...dat'll KiLL u lyrically, so sleep cuz in da herse-u'd-rest...
i'll crack ya skull,bullets hit u wit im-pac...ya RhyMeZ AnOreXiC why u kickin them SLiM-RaPz... i SpiT FiRe,so WiNtEr FreSh cant CoOL-Me...i graduated fr0m PuNcHLiNe UnIvErsiTy so h0w u g0ne ScHoOL-Me... my barz TuRN StOmaChs like BeaStiaLiy*...and they gone MuRdEr U like DriVe ByEs and im SpEaKiN ReaLiTy... y0u a new casualty to my list-of-foes...stab u a thousand times leaven u ReD like ChRisTMaS CLoTheS... or VaLen-tiNes,i handle-mine wit battle-rhymes...er'body a ThUg but CeLeRity neva handled-nines... he sit back on da comp StuFFin-His-FaCe...tawkin bout turnin GoSpeL like he be FuCKiN-WiT-MaSe... i might as well clear-my-head,cuz dis queer-is-dead...got murder in ScReEn FoNts like i poked em wit led... good luck homie |
Beastiality*= when a human being has sex wit animals
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lol u got ripped....its whatever tho.. good luck on the voting..
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tahaa,ay dont gas yaself cuz u can lose homeboi lol....smh
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upping for some more votes on dis ish..............
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Voted For: _JooKsta_
votin for jook jook gets this due to harder punches and more creative wordplay jook nice verse ya had nice punches some where very creative, ide like to see somne personals out of u man but ya punches made up for them.. You had a nice flow, good strucutre, very creative wordplay nice verse cele ya came a bit soft with ya verse nuttin seemed to hard fam, elevate on harder punches and get some heavier personals, ya had a good flow n strucutre but the punches n personals fell short elevatr on hard personals and punches stay elevatin fams v/Jook BE SURE TO RTF link below sig Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
lmao if da armada honestly thought i lost he needs to leave this site immediately.. huge DR vote..
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upinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn n tryna shut dis guy down if possible
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Upping............................................ ........
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This was feedback posted for CeleriTy
Change your fucking font size. Hurts my eyes. . . . .
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upping............................................ ................
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do u muthafuckaz vote on here?........................................
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This was feedback posted for _JooKsta_
your jawnt was pretty nice....but, he had a better finisher...
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Voted For: CeleriTy
Celerity-- Text so small...lol..nah but your verse flowed good, creative in parts, punches were ok.... Jooksta-- Multis were ok, though i hate the way u write ur shit hurts my eyes man, flow was ok, and punches were alright... Punches-- Tie Flow- Celerity Multis- Jooksta Structure-- Tie Creativity-- Celerity Wordplay-- Jooksta Metaphors-- Celerity Final Vote----- Celerity...... Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: _JooKsta_
Aii Man This Is what I Think Aii .. Joksta Niec drop Man You came Very nice with exceptions of your first bar Bcuz that one wasnt all dat but all the rest were on Q Far as I can Tell all You need to Do Is Str8en Out Ya Structure a Lil Bit More And Then Leave All Those Lil ~!@## Marks outta Ya Verse Then You will Be str8 Man Celerity Aii Man Jus becuase your verse Was in red doesnt mean it will be on fir LOL J/k Man You dropped very nice and I thin kYou Wouldve had this battle if you wouldntve Let Go of that Strong verse you Was Dropping fdrom Teh begining Man ......Sp Im Sorry Ima Have to give it to the other guy SOryy No Hate man You Nice RTF In the battle link i8n my Sig pleas Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
upin dis fuckin battle for votes.................................
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upping nicca............................................. ...
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Voted For: CeleriTy
alrite man let me break this down... Celerity- your font was really hard to read.. and most of ur punches were multi-use.. but your flow stayed on the whole way thru.. and the structure was alright. Jooksta- you really need to work on writing harder hitting punches. you had some but they were really basic and they werent anything that really caught the eye. your structure was the most annoying thing i have ever read.. but beside that decent for a beginner. Vote. Celerity for harder hitting punches and an easier to read structure.. no hate.. elevate |
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