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down 2 ride
(talkin)remember that shit my nigga those were the days
verse1--- yeah i know we always said a gangsta wouldnt cry// well that shit was a striaght up lie// but when you came down we were down to ride// every time we came togeather we was ready to die// cause we were true// now that your gone im missen you// i know it sounds kinda of gay// we had love in a brotherly way// ya'll could never feel the pain i felt that day// remember that day when we fought rob and keaith// with out you the hood aint the same// ill kill a nigga if they disrespect your name// chourus(x2) we were always down to ride what happends when white and black coliped ill tell you tell got each others side now that your gone good bye |
you needa leave 3 links that you replied to.........or this gets closed........so do so.......
i liked the piece.......it was good.......but dont space your bars....... good topic......... good consistancy but make it longer.... :wtf: |
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And Yes You Do Need To Leave 3 links or 3 Names Of People You Left Feedback To Or This Will Get Closed, Thanks. But this was ok....your structure needs work though....dont seperate the lines like that...also try keeping them the same length so it helps the flow out.....try adding some multies to your pieces to make them better as well...the emotion was there but just keep at it. |
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it was pretty good yo. keep droppin
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not bad i see a potential the seams exposed in soem and hidden in other lines you got a talent just buff it to be consitant.
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Nice Work, I liked it, really short, and kinda simple, but stil good verse
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thank you all this is just the start i got more just need time to think but there will be a pt bout this girl
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dis was ok
kinda simple but nice and short keep elevatin and u'll get better 7.5/10 |
more thoughts please i wanna know what you all really think be real with this please
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yo, honestly wasnt feelin this, good heart in it, but vocab needs some elevatin, fo example, throw rhymes in other places than the end of a line
with out you the hood aint the same// ill kill a nigga if they disrespect your name// with out you the hood just aint the same i'll kill a nigga good fa disrespectin ya name or something to that effect ...the final blesses state.... 1' |
iight nigga thanks you kept it real
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more votes i wanna know wut u really thin hit this up please
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ya it was really touchin ya know
a lil short, i mean ive done sum short ones but damn, but all else aside dis was hot keep it comin |
thank you kid more thoughts please
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Its Iight... Its A Good Piece I Guess... Some Lines Seemed To Be Fillers and Some Seem To Hit Really Hard On The Topic...It Flowed Well And All of That So I Guess I'll Give You 7 MICS/10
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iight good lookin still taken more thoughts
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more thoughts i wanna no if its hot or if its not
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Could have been structured better, but i liked it..... I think ya did well on the writing....
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good lookin thank you keeping it real more thoughts please
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dont sleep on this
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Its aight, you show some potential in this. I dont like how you set up the rap. Maybe be more open minded, and creative. Imagery will only make you better, just remember that. I thought it was aight. But it didnt really apeal to me...
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honest i likr it
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more thoughts
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???????more thoughts???????
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It was ok I'll go wit High Class in saying it has potential, but when u want 2 me and you can do a collaboration sometime dawg, welll hit me up
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I liked the topic, and I was feelin' the flow, it would of probably been better if you made it longer. Also work on your structure, and vocab a bit, other-wise it was okay.
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yeah dawg well get a clabiratin soon cause i got 2 years over my head i need to think
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yo man i liked dis piece u know...got me tihnking bout missin u by puff back in da day....its short yeh but its nice....i think tha hook lets it down though u know...i reckon if u worked on making tha verse longer, and work on a few more and dat hook, dis wud be hot
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you keeped it real my nigga i like that we gonna do a clabro some time be lookin for that it my girl echos shit up
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more thoughts (keep it real)
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still upin for thoughts
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still upin for thoughts
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..I thought tha piece was 'weak'..too simplistic..your flow..wordplay..vocab..content..all weak..
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honest iight guess you wana battle me set it up nigga
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uping more thoughts
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man you guys act like a bunch of chicken heads fighting ova the last tampon mayne....you jus need to battle and stop yah fucking bitching
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i liked it...it seemed like they put alota thought into it but the fact remains that that shit was kinda gay and also it wasnt that detailed and shit and it was a lil wack
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stop upping. write a new piece.
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