Telekinetic v\s DEF-STAR
 

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1/ MAN THIS DUDE SOUND REAL PATHETIC/
2/ TRYIN TA SCRAMBLE A DOWN PAYMENT SO YOU CAN BUILD YOUR CREDIT/
3/ SO IF YOU AINT GOT SKILLS THEN DEADIT/
4/ TEST THE KID WHEN HE SPIT GARANTED THAT YOU WILL REGRET IT/
5/ WHEN I SPLATER BRAIN AND REALY MAKE YOU TELEKINETIC/
6/ BUT ITS ALL GOOD ILL SEE WHAT YOUR REALY ABOUT/
7/ WHEN I LEAVE A HOLE IN YOUR CHEST THE SIZE OF YOUR MOUTH/
8/ COME ON DOG YOU CLAME THAT YOU SPITTIN SOME HEAT/
9/ BUT THE ONLY HIP HOP YOU DOIN IS WHEN I CLAP AT YOUR FEET/
10/ ITS DEF-STAR AND I DIDNT MEAN TA KILL YA LIKE THAT/
11/ BUT IT ONLY TOOK 11 BARS SO I GUESS YOU CAN CALL IT A RAP

You can't escape my lyrical state of mind got no time to debate
Like a model lookin at her chest you wont confess that you fake
Im straight ill to the core you get knocked to the floor when I drop
You got somthin missin in ya dissin like a doughnut without a cop
You need to stop writin, every verse is a curse to any an all authentic
Jus ten minutes of my time drunk would send this chump to the clinic
I took a minute to look at ya report it seems your sort of into the three G's
Your nineteen an a hustler "wanabe" to me you just a weak ass buster in 3D
I know ya gonna wanna mimic what I spoke cause well your a joke
You could be up in the joint with me, but still not ever seein a toke

THATS WHATS UP NIGGA COME HARD ITS AIGHT BUT WE KNOW WHOS THE VICTOR. COME ON PEOPLE START VOTIN............................................. .................................................

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Ill go ahead and leave something...

First off, you both are newby' s and it shows...need to elivate the vocab, on bothsides...

heres the breakdown individually..

Telekinetic, you need to upgrade your structure, your flows choppy, kinda hard to understand, like once verse goes really short and quick to rhyme then you rhym two words then try to rerhyme the quickly rhymed verse...too choppy for this site, good for toe -2- toe with a mic...

DEF-STAR-
you need to one up the punches, the ill kill you here and clap that don't mean shit, you gotta make the opponente feel belittled by something you see or sence, you cant be like "8/ COME ON DOG YOU CLAME THAT YOU SPITTIN SOME HEAT/
9/ BUT THE ONLY HIP HOP YOU DOIN IS WHEN I CLAP AT YOUR FEET/"(that a weak blow...need to elivate).....

VOTING TIME:
my vote goes to Def-Star, his structure was better, vocab was just as limited... but the blows were more crisp...this line did it for me....(WHEN I SPLATER BRAIN AND REALY MAKE YOU TELEKINETIC)

My vote goes to DEF-STAR cuz he came harder wit his rhymes............................................ .............

Do you people even understand my punches? Try readin my shit twice ;) .................................................. ...............................
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Need votes

Originally posted by: Unknown Skillz
My vote goes to DEF-STAR cuz he came harder wit his rhymes............................................ .............


The array of words u used already state the obvious.
You're a newb, & cleary didnt comprehend any if nothing of Tele's verse.
Telekinetic..took every catagory in my view..
The way i see it he generated a much better battle verse..
Some witty, creative punches.. i can't quote..
But there are some quotables in there.. nice work.
Skillz, just came to plain to win this..
For me there's no question..Telekinetic took this.

vote: Telekinetic

Please click here to vote & Return the favour...

thanks for the vote ace im glad sombody is seein my punches
you need to poll vote yo................................................ ........
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Drop a link an I will give feedback on your shit...................

yo this battle was pretty one sided man


flow- telekenetik
metas- telekenetik
impact of disses- telekenetik
Overall verse- telekenetik

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Drop a link I will vote on your battle................................
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Stop Sleepin On Me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
All I want is
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My vote goes to- ?

Its that easy lol

Help me out here people I will vote on your shit just drop a link
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tele got dis one it jus hit harder and flowed better.
but my vote doesnt count.


can anyone drop a few votes on dis one plz


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104412

Thanks for giving your input
I would vote on ya shit but the link dont work
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meta'z- tie
multi'z- telekinetic
structure- telekinetic
punches- def-star [BUT THE ONLY HIP HOP YOU DOIN IS WHEN I CLAP AT YOUR FEET]<~best line of the battle
wordplay- def-star

well.......I can't really decide a winner, my bad but I guess my votez a tie........

peep my battle w/ Slash....

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104566

YO WHATS GOOD DROP SOME VOTES IM TRYIN TO FINISH THIS AND BEFORE YOU VOTE READ MY SHIT CAREFULLY YOULL SEE WHATS UP.

NO DICK RIDIN EATHER I GOT NOBODY I ROLL DOLO SO JUST BE REAL.............................................. ..................................................

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STOP DICK RIDIN THAT AINT RIGHT!*****************************
UPPIN BE REAL!

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ok. How the hell can uz vote for Def - Star? Tele's shit was of another plenet. He was witty, with a structure and good vocab. I mean it was a verse 1000 times better than DEf-Start pathetic attempt.

Vote - Tele

plz retur a honest vote
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104909

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I wanna battle again.........................

What the fuck is wrong with this picture...................................
I vote in peoples battles an drop a link an still cant get a fuckin
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def star-wack shit didn't make sense wack structure didn't u like cap locks everytin lmao talkin bout herbs and shit lol u need to elevate son ur shit ws trash

tele=verse was straight i liked it it was better like the model line u came better and didn't need to try

vote=tele

vote for this battle and i will come vote in the poll

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104792

Yu bin you forgot to poll ya vote.............................................. .
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Sombody end this shit.............................................. ..........
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I'm going with Tele on this..Tele..for future reference do not put a link in any of my battles until you have poll voted...It's aginst the rules...pisses me off...and it is hella newbish.'
I vote for you in this battle though because you had the word play and the stronger verse...I won't vote the next time you pull some bullshit like this...I almost wish def would have beat you.

Def you need to up your skills bro...You had a decent drop..I felt what you was saying..but it ain't what you say..it's how you say it...You gotta come clever and be imaginative with the way you word things...Both of you elevate.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105120