Rebel......Citizen
 

Yo, listen up...

I have been used and wasted, you haven't felt the tears that I have tasted
My soul has been pasted, she took my heart, and tore it, and encased it...

Here's the story...

The setting...first day of grade eleven, didn't care...I was the school's rebel
Until i saw her face...graceful...like heaven...heart's bass pumped, and maxed trebel

And it kept going...for 2 months with precision I had to make my decision
She was a good citizen, I was the rebel...but our hearts had a collision...

...or so I had thought then...
the same shit would happen again...only worse than then...

The Plunge

I had it all set up...I was going to buy her a flower...
I was gonna ask...every minuted seemed like a half an hour

My "friends" all said that I would be heart-broke...
Denial...I tasted so much of it I could choke...

Lunch came...I had to make my move...it was the moment
She said she would talk to me later...I thought...did I own it?

The Verdict....

The bell rang...the minute I had been waiting for...
I grabbed my books...and hurried out the door....

She was standing at her locker...admiring the rose I had given her
...She said we should just be friends...and I was like "Okay, whatever..."

But we wasn't friends...she became a real bitch...fuck...
I thought it would have been a good year...but i was outta luck

Anger....

A'ight bitch...this is my fuckin' note to you...
Did this shit seem like some big joke to you!?

I hope when you sleep...you fuckin' dream about me...
And you wake up and scream...and wish you never woulda doubted me!

You fucked wit my mind...like I was a box of fuckin leggo...
"ya, were friends..." but to fuckin' diss eachother is okay tho...

Fuck that! I don't even fuckin care anymore...ya that's right Hilary
No more mista nice guy...Ima show you tha fuckin misery you gave to me!

No mroe suckers, no more shit...no more fuckin' rydin my dick...
I was I nice guy before...NOW IMA BE A STAIGHT OUT PRIC!

But you DESERVE even more than that...who the fuck is next?
Well whoever it is...I hope he goes farther than me...

...and puts a fuckin' bullet into your fuckin chest!

Bitch...

Hit these up....

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105299

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105319

Uppin...............

i like ya shit dawg, i hear the em in it but with your own fuckin anger, and my dawg fuck bitches, there fuckin trifflin just wait though, god just teaches patience and one day your girl will be 10 times better that her

^^^Thx dawg....uppin fo some mo....

You told me to lengthen my bars, that actually flow - when your bars have a length of like, 18 syllables? Tell me what type of beat that would flow to ..

I loved this peice coz I was goin through the same shit like a month ago and I dropped tracks like this.....they were called 'Friends no more' and 'Love you,Hate you'.
Anyway the flow was great and I loved the way you switched from calm and quiet to the anger and hatred. It was dope.
You vocab was good but this was like tellin a story so I wont judge ya on that.
Overall this was dope.....9/10

Hit this up.....one of my more lighter peices:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105926

Thx dawgz....Aye Bee, I the beat I had in mind when I wrote this is Stan (Eminem for those of you who don't know...dumb fucks...)...Uppin...

You would have to spit MAD, Twista-like fast to be able to fit almost 20 syllables into a line ..

^^^^^^^Ya, werd, but I dunno...w.w/e...........

dis is dope i was feelin it all the way keep it up

A'ight thx dawg....Uppin.................................plz hit up the battles in my sig...they bein slept on...

Uppin.....................................

..nice...good topic...promising...

yo homie i was feelin this shit all de way, this shit was flame n evrything else in it...oh yea thats tight how u was able to fit up to 18 syllables in line...damn...u might b the next em son

Peace

Haha, thx dawg...I dunno if I could be the next Marshall Mathers...but Ima try. Im puttin together a demo right now.

LMMMMMMFAO ! The next Eminem !? LMMFAO! You're doing TEXT!

Bahahahaha, This kid saying he's the next Marshall Mathers is like saying Aye Bee and I Aren't Dope. . It's Just Not True.

I do audio too, bitch.

Yeah, but notice this is a text thread, and he said you could be the next Eminem.

Oh ya, I see where ya comin from now...sorry bout tha bitch thang dawg...haha...