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Tyler Durden 01-11-04 07:05 PM

30 Bars
 
Keystyle.....

Extremely toned facial muscles.. lifting weights with my tongue grip
That ain't nothing.. I'll be doing that shit spitting seventy minus a hundred
Get ya heart beat thumping.. then flat line it.. like valleys and plains
Been spitting with range 100 years and going.. with no talleys or strains
Tha palace is my brain.. don't even try.. cuz no way in hell you'd get in
Try trampling through tundras.. tip toing to text.. that Theory's twisting
Ya fucking mouth up side down.. stripping this clown.. ripping up sound
Bound to roam.. and petrafy every smiling bone in ya dome to a frown
Basically theres nothing to it.. stepping ta kaos.. end up broken or ruined
Ain't coming close to my shit.. sorta like a bum and paris hilton spooning
Better yet throw up ya dukes.. and get beat to a pulp.. fisting with me
You fake.. A bunch of fairy tales.. just a little pulp fiction bitch who speaked
You see every fucking line of this open mic.. deserves more than quotations
This dope occasion.. knocks even me out from tha jetlag of this elevation
Don't even compare.. I'm tearing at tha top of tha empire states building
Wait as I'm revealing.. tha secrets on how to drop a man without killing him
But I ain't talking matrix shit.. so when tha fucker hits.. he just bounce up
Advice: when ya falling.. You'll be swallowing flies.. so keep ya mouth shut
Then count up.. Now think lightly.. Ya prolly doing alright.. still breathing
And then smile for tha tourists.. who are taking pictures.. sight seeing
Okay now listen closely to this vital information.. trust that its massive
And if you don't remember it.. Your fucked.. and i garantee an accident
10 second mark.. and you just passed it.. so this is it.. please stay calm
..Cuz ya weight is prolly eqauvilent.. to tha weight of a nuclear bomb
You falling faster than a porsche.. with tha force of more than 1000 pounds
Its tha end.. he didn't die of tha fall.. he got shot before he hit tha ground
Blood squirted in a 100 foot radius.. tha shit was an ugly sight believe me
Worst thing you ever seen.. tha blood sprayed tha wall nicer than graffitti
When he hit looked like a 1000 muthafuckas bleeding all around him
Looked like tha texas chainsaw massacre when tha cops found him
Drowning in tha cement.. put cracks in tha pavement and made a crevace
He hit it so hard.. it made a damn indention.................. in this sentence
So hard.. left tha structure dented
Take my word for it.. far from plaesant.. if you just ate you would of lost it
It took fire hydrants hooked up with fire hoses just to try and wash it
This squashed shit.. had to fucking be scrubbed.. with 100 toothbrushes
Just made it more of a mess.. cuz everyone threw up when they toughed it
But after a couple days of elbow grease.. they finally repaired and cleaned it
Overgoing demons when flowing.. I'm both tha nicest plus tha meanest
Kaos will starngle every single last breath till ya bitch ass is past death
And then I'll keep my hands around ya neck.. untill theres nothing left
Choked blue.. learning how to summon energy molecules better than Goku
Then concentrate on a specific area.. release tha shit than roast you
I'll Put ya head in a curse.. don't attempt.. cuz I shredded ya verse
Feel me heel kick ya shoulder.. and leave you embedded in tha earth
And I'll do it again.. cuz you said it hurts.. faggot thats what you get
Like this is SafeCo field.. I'll split ya dome two shit with a handfull of bricks
My Blows kill bastards.. when i flow ill matic.. cuz it ain't hard to tell
Kaos is bench pressing a 1000 pounds easily.. when you can't lift tha barbell
We'll spar in hell.. after i strap a fucking heat sensing bomb to my belt
Then blow us both off tha face of this planet.. before you can yell help

Blah.........

Tyler Durden 01-11-04 08:23 PM

Any feed back??

Tyler Durden 01-11-04 10:50 PM

Uppin

mulletstation 01-12-04 01:00 AM

a bit confusing. like begathy';s poetry.

oh yeah. dawg

Tyler Durden 01-12-04 02:04 AM

Uhh.. thanks.. I guess

retard101 01-13-04 12:00 PM

not bad Kaos Theory perrty good rhyme had a poteray base

Tyler Durden 01-15-04 12:04 AM

Thanks... anymore?

Verbatim 01-15-04 12:10 AM

hmm, it was confusing indeed but good, very good vocab, the way i read it, it was kinda hard figuring out where the rhymes were, and where lines ended, i think the middle of it was the best part, Nice flow and all, nice drop.

peace

Castro XL 01-15-04 12:30 AM

uhh...a bit confusing I was lost but I liked the middle a little bit

Frequency 01-15-04 12:43 AM

... my head hurts... that right there was to much to read...

first things first nice vocab... vocab is kinda meaningless in ways cause it only makes ya sound smart... when really we all know most people use the word processors dictionary and ish... neways your flow was str8, you wordplay was decent overall this was a solid drop...

just try and make ya ish a lil shorter...

neways keep droppin str8 heat

PEACE...

Wise Ways 01-15-04 02:26 AM

theres gonna be one shorter.... then tha rest are not

¤KiNgPiN¤ 01-16-04 11:27 PM

Well,alot to read lol got me really bored =/
It's pretty confusin to,but I like it

It's Formula 01-16-04 11:36 PM

Ok Keystyle. . Your Content Kept Bouncing. . That's Why People Are Confused. . Next Keystyle, Stick To One Topic And Roll With It. . Flow Suffered Tremendously With The Extended Lines And Fucked Up Structure. . Hope If Flows Good To You. . Some Lines Were Quotable Tho. . And The Vocab Was Just Right. . Not Over Done And Under Done. . By The Way, This Wasn't 30 Bars. . 30 Bars Is The Equivalent Of 30 Lines, Not 60. . Pz.

SaRe 2 01-16-04 11:59 PM

fu* dat i aint readin that niggas already sayin it consusin so theres no point in botherin i already got a damn headaque but i saw some good lines up in there... when you spit somthin shorter just let me know... by the way thats not 30 bars that was more like 9,070,976 ... o1ne

Ambitious 01-23-04 09:08 AM

^ it was 30 you jack ass......ne way good read confusing at times but your vocab was real nice....metas were good and flow was a little choppy....try unstretchin the bars a little bit....but nice piece overall liked it....
keep it up

Penskills 01-23-04 09:12 AM

..like everyone else..a bit confusing..but a good read..good vocab and wordplay..


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