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JBrookz 01-12-04 01:08 PM

JBrookz VS Born To Kill
 
12 lines max
due in 30 mins
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no hate votes/crew/UNEXPLAINED votes

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Born To Kill 01-12-04 01:20 PM

Checkin in, my man...

Good luck to ya.

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Born To Kill 01-12-04 01:41 PM

Ya sunk like Titanic, <---that's played more than ya porn password...
So I'll smash tha Cristal over ya head, cuz I christen thee an herb.
Don't know ya, but heard ya so affectionate after beatings, ya squirt...
They say he holds his ground, after his dick's been knocked in tha dirt.
And that's all the pussy ya gettin, so ta tell tha truth, I'm behooved...
Brookz is gonna finally get blown, after he has a couple of ribs removed.
Kid get's flattened alot, like now, so he opened a pizzeria...
And he's depressed so he tried a pick me up, but got a hernia.
Ya overpower subliminal messaging, cuz it's clear ya suck...
Even Cher could slap ya inta orbit, and declare ya moonstruck.
You'll just come played out, probably ghostwritten at that...
Using tha skills of another, not making ME but THEM look bad.

JBrookz 01-12-04 01:44 PM

Born spits "comes out" more [half-assed] than [siamese twins] during "labour"/
Servin him more slugs than Chinese food waiters/
Like "Kleptomaniacs" next to [dope dealers] it's a fact/
His faggit ass can't stop "feeling on another man's [sack]"/
Fuck his eight to five, him puttin out effort to win this brawl is/
Nut'n new....jes him "workin to get merked like always"/
Like grafitti on documents Born getting signed is evil and fatal/
That's jes defacing the records like putting "Kelis on a label/ (ponder on those 2 lines)
Aint a fight...shit's more like chess when I'm droppin these bombs/
I'm putting dis bitch back in his place like he's one of my pawns/ (think bout it)
Like prostitute donors givin brains this man just keep suckin/
That shit was ass......hmmmmm....someone's been butt fuckin/


ppl wit skill wud get da lines...jes hope da rest of u really read dis shit

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good luck wit ya verse B

$pitacular 01-12-04 02:05 PM

ok...

born - some creative wordplay, nice use of the Cher "moonstruck" LOL hope these younger cats will get that one... the creativity was the best factor, the punches were eh, but the wordplay made up for it

Jbrooks - structure hurts the eyes... change the way you post ya verses, you're killin ya own flow with that shit looks like html attempts, punches were basic, elevate

not a great battle, but born gets this one. peace

JBrookz 01-12-04 02:08 PM

^^^ i always write ma shit 2 beats homie....i know dat shit flows...w/e.....i hope u aint votin cuz he got over 100+ posts.....cuz dat wud b jes wack...

JBrookz 01-12-04 03:30 PM

uppin this battle

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Gunman tha Great 01-12-04 03:37 PM

JBrookz took this battle easily punches punches punches punches punches punches. Whoever said it aint flow is an idiot. it flowed well enough to take this battle, i'mma punchline fan and Born didn't have any.......or any worth remembering. JBrookz won this battle easily to me, now go somewhere and do a dance or something.

Taktik 01-12-04 03:53 PM

V/Born

Alright battle.......came with a few good punches........no extreme filler....came decent....i can see ur improving

J....alot of filler, nothing really direct....wasnt feelin it.......elevate

Born To Kill 01-12-04 03:58 PM

Thanks for the votes, gentlemen...

Ya'll vote, drop links, all that regular shit...

Much appreciated.

Peace

Theo Ginn 01-12-04 04:05 PM

Flow: Tie
Punch: BTK
Meta: J
Structure: BTK
Personal: Blah

Vote: Born

this battle was decent both had decent punchs

J fix your structre

you got potential

Born To Kill 01-12-04 04:58 PM

Uppin...

Got the proverbial KO...

Now let's wrap it up with the last 2.

Throw this way...

I'll vote on yours in return, blah, blah, blah.

Peace

ClassX 01-12-04 05:07 PM

This was fuckin obvious that Born won..

I was feelin ya opener born that shit was mad ill.. haha had me laughin.. the rest of ur verse was consistently nice.. good use of wordplay and punches.. personals were average but hes a new member so there aint much to get on him.. nice verse

Brookz your structure had my eyes killing.. your punchs were played and not even that complex.. you got the essentials now just work on that shit man..

Overall - Born

tasty shakes 01-12-04 05:17 PM

i can't vote yet.. but good ish from both...check me out
if yall can...............................
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Born To Kill 01-12-04 05:40 PM

Uppin for more votes!!!

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prophacyz 01-12-04 05:49 PM

brookz you came alot harder than i expected...i think you took this over born...like gunman said....
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Originally posted by Gunman tha Great
Whoever said it aint flow is an idiot. it flowed well enough to take this battle.

ur flow was nice...

born you had some aight punches...but definitely nothin spectacular or win worthy....tsk tsk...shoulda done better..

vote-jbrookz

Born To Kill 01-12-04 05:57 PM

Sad, sad, sad...

These riders have no shame whatsoever.

They should be warned, then banned after they do it again.

Peace, RB

:) 01-12-04 05:58 PM

i think niggas are just ridding the dude with over 100 post
j brookz took this easily

Ya sunk like Titanic, <---that's played more than ya porn password...
So I'll smash tha Cristal over ya head, cuz I christen thee an herb.
weak opening to a battle and a very weak wordplay

Don't know ya, but heard ya so affectionate after beatings, ya squirt...
They say he holds his ground, after his dick's been knocked in tha dirt.
very elementary wordplay here

And that's all the pussy ya gettin, so ta tell tha truth, I'm behooved...
Brookz is gonna finally get blown, after he has a couple of ribs removed.
second line if probably the best punchline of this verse

Kid get's flattened alot, like now, so he opened a pizzeria...
And he's depressed so he tried a pick me up, but got a hernia.
Ya overpower subliminal messaging, cuz it's clear ya suck...
Even Cher could slap ya inta orbit, and declare ya moonstruck.
You'll just come played out, probably ghostwritten at that...
Using tha skills of another, not making ME but THEM look bad.
overall: this verse was weak.. only had really one ok punchline in here.. most of the wordplay in this verse was pretty basic and elementary i give this verse a 2.5/10

Born spits "comes out" more [half-assed] than [siamese twins] during "labour"/
Servin him more slugs than Chinese food waiters/
Like "Kleptomaniacs" next to [dope dealers] it's a fact/
His faggit ass can't stop "feeling on another man's [sack]"/
lol.. pretty clever lines here.. tight shit

Fuck his eight to five, him puttin out effort to win this brawl is/
Nut'n new....jes him "workin to get merked like always"/
Like grafitti on documents Born getting signed is evil and fatal/
That's jes defacing the records like putting "Kelis on a label/ (ponder on those 2 lines)
dont really know what the hell your talking bout on those lines but good wordplay

Aint a fight...shit's more like chess when I'm droppin these bombs/
I'm putting dis bitch back in his place like he's one of my pawns/ (think bout it)
Like prostitute donors givin brains this man just keep suckin/
That shit was ass......hmmmmm....someone's been butt fuckin/
nice pretty decent verse here i give this verse a 6.5/10

overall vote.. after reading this battle its clear to me that j brookz took this.. alot of born to kills shit was elementary.. he didnt have any creative lines.. j brook had better wordplay and disses in this battle .. vote j brookz

prophacyz 01-12-04 05:58 PM

^that wasn't a dr vote...that was honest...haha..................................... ......................

Freeman 01-12-04 06:00 PM

iight...

flow was pretty much the same... btk had more harder hittin punches...

thats wins battles... there was some nice meta's from J aswell tho...

btk took structure aswell... it looked so much cleaner...
wivout all them """!£$!"£!"£ <--------- ERGH...

Vote - Born To Kill...

hit this up... thanks

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...571#post1081571

good luck

Rappad 01-12-04 07:59 PM

Eh...pretty clear born came kinda weak....but more than enough to win.....one line I really liked....

Don't know ya, but heard ya so affectionate after beatings, ya squirt...
They say he holds his ground, after his dick's been knocked in tha dirt.

also, watch ya flow, like the hernia line, choppy flow there.

J-pretty decent verse, but work on ya punches. Add some flavor to your verse, if you know what I mean.......you came ok, but just need to add some multis and try attacking him from a personal standpoint...good job though.

blose battle, but Born takes this one.

Vote=Born


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