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Lessons On Legends
My mind was progressin'..ahem..excuse me, class is in session, On how to handle my new obsession, achieveing O.M legends, The though of it had me stressin', Started with "Desperation", Writtin by Domain 9, you could see his respect for Bruk in each line, Made my heart welt, so though-out and deeply felt, this must of been a sign, Because for this, I read every written legend, and they all stayed in mind, Moved to pieces by Camarac, purest form of dope, I had to sit back, Replenish my mind, for another textual track, of which nothing it lacked, Recently read "Blood On The Pillow", I wondered how to visualize, What he saw through his eyes, the whole idea caught me for a suprise, The message it was sending, the concepts portrayed at the ending, Though, my feelings on Weezy's "America" is still pending, But the verse itself had me in my brain mending my questioning, Of what deserved to be considered an open mic legend, How would I reach my own space set in a sort of RB heaven, By now I make my way on to reading a Sand classic "Pain of Plane", I'd never remain the same, for my vocabulary had changed, I guess I could say Legends took me from a fetus into a writer, A born again writer, cleaning his mouth that was like a fighter, Had I of tried, I could've been "Almost Famous", yet I was "Napping Thru Reality", These senseless notions, causing myself all this mental comotion, So now I stick with myself this forum I always seem to open, And if I could accompish having a thread in this so say, perfect potion, The thought would be a "Reflection of Fate" , that I to showed magical devoution, ........Thank you for your time class, I hope this may have inspired you. |
Don't Sleep!
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please people..are you kidding me?
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Good idea but...
My mind was progressin'..ahem..excuse me, class is in session, On how to handle my new obsession, achieveing O.M legends, The though of it had me stressin', Started with "Desperation", ^^That part flowed pretty well...but... Writtin by Domain 9, you could see his respect for Bruk in each line, Made my heart welt, so though-out and deeply felt, this must of been a sign, Because for this, I read every written legend, and they all stayed in mind, ^^When you moved to that it just didn't flow off the opening section... Take out senseless words and sure maintain the content but don't forget about the flow and rhyming structure ay...Keep at it mate...Hit my piece up ay...Pz... |
alrightey.. i'll get to it...
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wow..o.m is going to hell...
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Yea agree try to use less fillers, .. flow was ok on most points, .. story was well i liked it .. nice concept.. good vocab usage.. = ) .., but try to remove words that are just being there lol..but still a nice read man props.
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Damn words..mysteriously find themselves there..their like bagladies...
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It was alright
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I enjoyed this..
but as said earlier, you had a lot of line fillers vocab was nice, so was structure and fillers this was quite nice. |
I did liek this quite a bit. Flow stayed mostly solid, and I dug the respect that you laid out for the other things people have been laying down. Cleaning up some of the extra syllables would make this top rate.
Hit me back, man. One |
take out those silly unneeded words
and your lines were really really long...cut them in 1/4 good shit but you will get better than this easily? |
word...love ya'll man...*sniff*sniff*
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Had some nice flow here, dope internals throughout, you pulled it off pretty well, but i thnk you overused alot of words n' terms here...it seemed the flow was stretched in places, but overall it was pretty good.
Liked the topic...it's good that some people can write shit about rb, lotta good relational shit in here, was a good read... "message it was sending, the concepts portrayed at the ending, Though, my feelings on Weezy's "America" is still pending," "And if I could accompish having a thread in this so say, perfect potion, The thought would be a "Reflection of Fate" , that I to showed magical devoution," - some dope bars... 3/5 if you have time can you return the favour?? http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=106501 |
dope..ill peep that..
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dope homos..where are you?
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I liked that piece... I come back for a visit and stop in to view an O.M. and happen to see someone mention me. That's pretty dope. It was good how you brought all the Legend's pieces in to make your verse. I respect the respect you've give to anyone in the Legends forum. Too bad I'm not a mod of the Legend's Forum or O.M. anymore. Aw well I deserve it for being gone for so long. Keep it up Sarcasm. I enjoyed this piece
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Thank very very much for checking out this piece Domain..
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"message it was sending, the concepts portrayed at the ending,
Though, my feelings on Weezy's "America" is still pending," ^liked this bar alot,flowed well and used nice vocab. As a whole the peice was a original idea,usin past legends to get there urself,wordplay was there in bits,flow was pretty good but as the others have said limit the fillers,i had the same problem tryna squeeze to much in.imagery was good aswell,vocab good too,internals so good drop man. P.S Hit mine if u can dawg. Peace |
Well...Very nice piece, Lots of internals and all of that. Like said before, many filler words were thrown in.. Kinda fucked up the flow. But this was very very dope, You had a nice flow whenever you kept it strong and I like how you finally gave respect to the pieces posted in Legends. Very nice..
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..thank u..all..
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People we can depend on..friends..
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Dopology..is my word...
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yo..hello..isquiero
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I wonder..when will the upping stop?
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hey deac where u at?
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hahhaha.....you really do want to be in legends......Legends is nothing but dr'n because your a popular bastid.....anyways decent flow i enjoyed...ive seen better in you but this hit the lucky medium...congrats
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lol..dope!..lucky medium...
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I've Never Actually Read Any Of Your Stuff, And To Be Honest, I Was Quite Impressed. Your Internals Were Nice And Flow Was Good In Most Areas. The Legends Idea Didnt Really Appeal To Me At First, But I Liked What You Produced Out Of It. A Nice Drop, I'll Be Checking Out More Of Your Stuff When You Drop Them.
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This Showed The Enjoyment You Have on This Site...
I Really Like How You Complemented The Peeps You Like On Here...My Big Inspiration is Emerge Too Me His art is Absolutely Phenomenal... 7/10 |
Thanks N and Figure...
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i liked this......liked the topic....you were pretty consistant with ur idea.....senseless werds as was said before.....but you had some ill flow, shorten the lines a little......your metas were nice......tech liked them
GOod piece......just a few kinks here and there, keep at It |
Sarcasm reduce ur uppin, else this will be closed.
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SAW-Ry...uppin..untill later..
Up once more &this is closed & deleted = 0 -Eddy |
Yeah i agree this was a good drop here....the topic was pretty good i thought...the flow in this seemed to be on point through out the piece, never got off really, pretty smooth....overall i thought this was a good piece you had some good imaginary..keep at it.
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i have like 5 more legends pieces, but i deleted them .. =)
respect the classics, respect the classics . |
^^Yeah..I remeber them..and then a bunch were deleted..thanks for bringing this back up..
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