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Brethren vs. Danksta
10 lines MAX
5 vote win explain votes Due tomorrow, midnight House Rules Good Luck |
Check check swoosh!.....My verse will be up...............maybe tonite...................................
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Im in the mood to key...So here ya go
Opener-I'll do it once,So i wont have to Stomp-this-bitch-again,I'll drop-this-kid-with-pens,Fuck bein a flyweight...Allow me to introduce ya'll to REN-FROM-MICHIGAN Unleashin the terror-i aint on no ‘gay shit’ when i 'BUST-ON-YOU'/ cause i stay with 'SOMETHIN-AT-MY-SIDE', like the 'TWINS' from 'STUCK-ON-YOU'// brain-and-framework, equipped-with-an-ego/ like a 'LIFETIME-PHILIDELPHIA-FAN', i 'STAY-WITH-A-EAGLE'// like i said im-egotistical, the original-lyrical-cannibal, a hipocriteral-liberal, and hysterical when asked if Brethran is intellectual/ like messin-around with a ‘DOCTORS-CUSTOMERS’, this kid is ‘FUCKIN-WITH-MY-PATIENCE’/ you-a-ugly-bitch-too, Ren could fuck ‘ALEXANDER-HAMILTON’, and still couldnt ‘DATE-10s’// (yeah.. if you didnt know Hamilton is the guy on the 10 dollar bill) Aiight.....Tried a little different style....Lets see if it works |
Damn, shit just came up, I got to finish another battle, so I can't drop until I finish one of them, sorry. I'll drop as soon as one of them closes.
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Its cool yo................................................ .................................................. .......................................
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Uh.....No show? or wtf....................................
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No, I'ma drop today, some stupid shit came up. .
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I kill rap bitches, Danksta 'leaning towards heaven', so I'm 'Hell-bent'-when-I'm-chokin-her,
Ha, with verses so wak, no wonder you had to tell-them-what-was-your-opener, In the middle of your punch, your arm just takes a direction-change, Hit yourself in the face, like I was Jet Li, in my Lethal Weapon-stage, Rap isn't a game for midgets that don't tell the truth, that's what this 'imp-lied', A battle with me, like retarded kids opening Christmas presents, dude gets ripped-wide, Claiming you hard...is that blood or tomato sauce?, like scared troops-in-Italy, Your verse is like 'diving in the shallow end', I'm a giant shark, while you screaming super-fish-ally (LOL), Quit trying to rhyme, put the 'mouse' away, run away back to your 'crawl-spot', Little kid hasn't hit puberty, so he's 'sent-home', like baseball players when 'balls-drop'. Line #5) Imp is like a short person, lie means not telling the truth, also makes implied. Line #10) In puberty, your balls drop, in baseball, if you drop the ball, the players get to walk. If you don't get the rest of the wordplay don't vote, there's probably a wordplay in every line. |
...........I Don't Know Who got this but both verses looked pretty tight.... Nice Shit.....
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uppin # 1 .
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uppin #2 .
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I'm sick of this shit, I vote in 20 battles, and don't get any votes, you fucking selfish bitches.
O yea, uppin #3 |
vote you fucking cocklickers uppin #4 .
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flow- brethren
punchlines- brethren impact of disses- brethren overall vote- brethren this battle was one sided brethren came with better multies and punchlines.. peace |
thanks, last upp #5 .
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Brethan got this shit..decent battle between the both of you..Bret got this with better punches..wordplayed..like the implied..and punches..Danksta verse was average..well..a little below average..the dashes was gay..and that ren from michigan..was.umm..well..it didint make sense..and thats how your whole verse was...both of you elevate..
my vote/brethren http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...215#post1106215 ^^hit it up^^ |
ayo close battle! really really close! i was expectin more na'sayin? but i'ma have to vote for Brethren . . his punches hit hella harder.. dope shit! i can't vote yet . . my bad fellaz! easy!
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dan got this but a littel stronger punches better structuer,better flow..
my vote-DANN |
danksta - wack structure..........flow fell off due to ya structure........vocab was ok........some of the multis were pretty tight.........wordplay could have been better, but still aight........opener sucked........closer was ok.......i was feelin some of ya punches.........no real good personals.......
brethen - pretty good structure........flow was ok........vocab was pretty tight..........i was feelin most of ya multis.......wordplay was pretty ill.........ya opener was nice.......closer was ok..........most of ya punches hit hard........good personals...... conclusion - brethen takes this in wordplay, better opener, punches, and personals, so he gets my vote.... VOTE - BRETHEN yo since i took the time to leave my honest opinion id appreciate if u two did the same.... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108159 much appreciated.......... |
whoaaa.......very one sided
brethen takez it in every category........ punches: b...hit harder.... flow: b...smoother....n eazier 2 follow...... structure:......none vote: brethen good battle props 2 both hit dis battle up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109699 |
flow - brethen
metaphors - brethen wordplay - danksta personals - danksta overall - brethen close battle. nice work both. plz vote on thiz one: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109623 |
Good battle..
Danksta.. structure was flawed.. stretched lines messed the flow up at times.. some good similies/metas whateva.. a few nice punches.. the main thing it lacked was consistancy.. a good punch stood out amongst many weak ones really.. Tho a pretty good verse overall... Brethan.. same style, altho slightly better flow/structure.. more creative punches really, and it was kept pretty consistant throughout the whole verse... good use of wordplay etc.. Close battle.. but for the consistancy and originality.. Vote - Brethan |
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