dizzy dromel vs BaNE
 

10 lines
due tomorrow midnight

good luck

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im droppin sum rules down cu u didnt do ne!

Rules:
No h8,crew,D/R votes
No Recyclin
No Feedin
No Bitin
10-12lines
Checkin in 1st!

G'luck BaNE

i didn't do any cuz i figured u read the rules for front lines... oh well

goodl uck 2 you 2

Jus drop when ur ready ill be droppin 2morra nite but it will be b4 midnite.
if it aint dropped by midnite it'll be dropped b4 Noon the nxt day!
its bcus i got sum peeps cumin round 4 a party!

G'luck!

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bro u checked in already, if u don't post by midnight tomorrow u lose...

sorry to seem like an asshole but i'm sick of no shows... i'll be posting tomorrow as well

Ok dats fine ill drop by 2morra nite if u dnt trust me 2 show!lol!
i understand wat u mean doh!so ill drop by midnite 4sure!






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Now im jus wannin 2no did u grow up on the streetz,
Listenin 2 sum ill,siik beatz./
did u listenin 2 the lyrics waitin 4 inspiration,
thinkin 2urself wat am i gona do wiv my life?,weres my destination./
If u did think that,u neva thought u'd meet an ill rapper like me,
u looked around the streetz wunderin weres my family?/
ur parentz didnt want u at birth so they put u up 4 adoption,
Dnt get upset im ur new daddy so wat can u do,nuffin u hav no option!/
were related y didnt u say u went the doctors bcus u've got an infection,
dnt lie 2ur girl tellin her its in ur dik, thats y u cant get an Erection!/
jus tell her straight u prefer Gays,u dnt think she fine,
i'll comfort her say things like"cum 2 daddy u can be mine!"*1

Explanation:
*1 cus in line 8 ised im his daddy!

VOte

his shine's-dismissin, whackness and amateur defines-his-dissin/
how u gonna win a battle when all of ur punch lines-is-missin?/
no wonder u suck, probably fake, but honestly how real-is-he?/
you can spin the rap game in circles and it still wouldn't feel-dizzy!/
winstreaks have a tendency to end-in-me but u gotta have one-to-lose-it/
even wit all that 'homosexual anal' you couldn't 'come-wit-new-shit?'/
he lacks-a-hope to attack-but-yo from all of 'that crap-he-wrote'/
and the deriding 'laughs this cat-provokes', it's obvious that 'his rap's-a-joke!'/
if your tryin tah decide whether-its-a-shame that he'll never get better-in-the-game/
seems my words took so much out of him all he's got left is the last letter-of-his-name!/

uppin for votes (1)............................................... ......................................

i just checked this battle and u sed 2 homo that if he didnt spit by 12 he will lose but u didnt spit b4 12 so ur ass shud b dq'ed homo report his ass

and i cant blieve it took over a day 2 write up 10 wack lines and still cudnt meet a deadline yo ass is wack

i keyed it in 5 minutes... and its 9 pm... u fucking idiot

uppin for people to vote who are intelligent enough to tell time

Well Bane got this with some nice punches and clever wordplay. I would say this wasn't even a contest.

Banes Opener:
his shine's-dismissin, whackness and amateur defines-his-dissin/
how u gonna win a battle when all of ur punch lines-is-missin?/
Dizzys :
Now im jus wannin 2no did u grow up on the streetz,
Listenin 2 sum ill,siik beatz./

That reall sums up the whole battle, Dizzys shit was unimagitive... you have to come up with shit that makes voters go like " that was clever" or " he got him with that one" but your shit never did nothing for me really

Dizzys Closer:
jus tell her straight u prefer Gays,u dnt think she fine,
i'll comfort her say things like"cum 2 daddy u can be mine!"*1
^
Now thats wack. You cant expect to win any battles with shit like that. Anyoen oculd rhyme fine and mine.. you just have to use your imagination more.

Look at his closer:
if your tryin tah decide whether-its-a-shame that he'll never get better-in-the-game/
seems my words took so much out of him all he's got left is the last letter-of-his-name!/

^ it was a bit strached.. but the point came across well... and made the reader Go thats funny shit....

Bane your good.. maybe try not to strach your lines so much. But you go this one for me by a mile

plz return the fev since i took my time And vote honestly

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107765

bane were in diff time zones its 2:15 in the morning here now........n e ways i wil now vote on this battle c in as u did follow the rules...........bane took this 1 easily as his verse was overall bette.....closer was better finisher was better punches hit harder personals were good......homo the only thing uve got out of this battle is a loss....stay up playa

Punches-B
Opener-B
Closer-B
Flow-B
Peronals-None
Multi-B
Meta-None
Structure-B

Overal-B

This was most likely one of the weakest battles that I have ever seen. I mean Dizzy was ocmpletely whack, throwing stupid punches and ending with a gay invite. BaNE at least had the multi's and you could understand it better, both of you, elevate please.

uppin for votes... lol what can u expect from a 5 minute key?

uppin for votes...........................................

uppin this battle .................................................. ...........

uppin for votes.... thats the last time i can up :-/

Originality - Bane.. fresh concepts.. dizzy was mad played
Punches - Bane.. nice meta4s held together by smooth flow
Personals - Bane.. 4th line was ill
Flow - Bane.. smooth as.. dizzy was too choppy
Structure - Bane.. ^ see above
Multis - Bane.. nice use of them toward the end.. added to the flow

VoTe = Bane

All over this..

Drop a vote here:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...d.php?p=1120629

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rite ok iget it iwas wack ill admit it ijus want this endid soon im ashamed of this battle iwas realy bad! i hav beta dan dis!
uppin!

The start up was an idea ihad for an open mike about Myself!
But needed a quick opener so reversed that on BaNE!
jus thought id clear it up 4ya'll!
Uppin!

bane, good shit, tight punches, your intro was
dope dawg, i was feelim yo flow to, your structure,
was pretty good, but you need more personals, but
its all good, it was still good.

dizzy, you need to elevate dawg, you had some wack
punches, and your structure was horrible, flow was aight,
but still needs work, you had not one personal dawg, maybe
you should try tapdancing or somethin.

my vote: bane