da saviour vs puertoricanelly
 

ok 10 lines
u drop first
15 minutes after checkin
me, 15 minutes after you drop
no dkriding votes

bastard not checking in....
what are we playing??

uppin it 4 your newby ass
show up now cuz this is so exasperating

i want you to go first you have been here longer than me so Ladys first ma guy

ba, gay, you want to be staring at my ass or what?
anyway, im going first if you want

im gonna be paitently waiting for you to say sometn

this newby guy thinks im about giving him a tight welcome,
but i wont, not to anyone where are you from
you cant just come along and say lets battle or lets play,
its not that easy, cuz you dont have the slightesr idea of what 2 say
just get out of here and gimme your mommy`s phone
i dont like her, but i want u to see this and i feel alone
youre just prewritting something so you can say some shit
i can concentrate, im looking for your lil sister`s clit
dont be so motherfucking jealous, puertoricanelly,
suck my cock and try Da Saviour`s special flavours jelly!

8 minutes and im out
you ve got 15 minutes, good luck!

in line 8, i meant cant instead of can...
pz

hey it passed more than 15 minutes.. anyway spit it quickly, dont have all night

who the fuck named u da savior,i was gonna be nice but now im giving you time to leave and do yo self a favor/yo i might be a newbie but im still number #1,yo girl said you were her first but shes havin my son/where you get off talkin about cocks, i didnt know you roll like that i was tryin a put dis battle on lock/but if you wanna get hard i fuck yo ass up like your the prisoner and im the gaurd/u seem ta be the kinda nigga that make me sick ta ma belly, cuz you dont rap you rape girls like r kelly/lets be real dawg that in conclusion its no confusion that yo ass is losin

what about respecting the rules?
 

hey it passed more than 15 minutes.. anyway spit it quickly, dont have all night

damn... again posting and reading the other guy shit after it..
sorry, anyway its fair

ay your was alright but i cant understnad whatchu meant on half of it. when do we know who won because i wanna know cuddy

yo this battle was aight but can
u hook a brotha up wit some
votes here da link

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110581

well, people is suposed to vote and dont give a fucking link like this bastard did..
what you didnt understood man?
this gonna take some time, it always does

Saviour

this newby guy thinks im about giving him a tight welcome,
but i wont, not to anyone where are you from
weak opening, not understanding it, wack punch and horrible rhyme
you cant just come along and say lets battle or lets play,
its not that easy, cuz you dont have the slightesr idea of what 2 say
wow.. no punch at all, you just stated things, no diss
just get out of here and gimme your mommy`s phone
i dont like her, but i want u to see this and i feel alone
wow.... your alone? u just made fun of ya self, try to diss him not u
youre just prewritting something so you can say some shit
i can concentrate, im looking for your lil sister`s clit
no punch again.. lil sister shit was just wrong and wack, how u know he has one? and the rhyme was basic, clit and shit..
dont be so motherfucking jealous, puertoricanelly,
suck my cock and try Da Saviour`s special flavours jelly!
horrible closer with no punch at all...expand on ya idea even though it wasnt that good

Saviour - try to expand on ya punches.. to start just write out some ideas and disses and no rhyme at all...then go back and add in a first line.....u dont have to make that rhyme either. then you will have your idea down on what you want to say so then u can edit the words and make the diss rhyme, changing it into a punch. Take a trip to Wackness Emergancy Center too and i can help u more there


Puertorican


ok first of all, ya struct was wack and i couldnt break it down the way it was so i made it better for u

who the fuck named u da savior,
i was gonna be nice but now im giving you time to leave and do yo self a favor/
first line had no punch and was weak, 2nd line was played but ok
yo i might be a newbie but im still number #1,
yo girl said you were her first but shes havin my son/
not really a direct punch...coula re-worded it to make it better
where you get off talkin about cocks,
i didnt know you roll like that i was tryin a put dis battle on lock/
not a punch really again...try to be more direct and diss him
but if you wanna get hard
i fuck yo ass up like your the prisoner and im the gaurd/
actually was the best punch in this battle.. again you coulda re worded it and made it much better
u seem ta be the kinda nigga that make me sick ta ma belly,
cuz you dont rap you rape girls like r kelly/
the r kelly line was played.. and the first line wasnt good[/b]
lets be real dawg that in conclusion
its no confusion that yo ass is losin
basic closer that just stated the truth

overall - both werent very good and need Extreme elevation...both of you go to Wackness Emergancy Center and find out how to make better punches...all of ya punches were basic, try to add metas and personals in them...wordplay makes the verse more complex also and if your rhyme scheme is good that will do it too...dont rhyme simple words like cock and lock, shit and clit etc..but Puertorican took this for actually having 1 ok punch, the rest were dumb and played from both..

hey bastard, you took it down and as you can see 14 fucking lines, you need to buy a new brain and read rules before voting, asshole...

Both were pretty wack...need elevation but despite that
Nelly hit hardher w/ punches and personals, though ds had a tighter structure
Flow was pretty close Pretty much a tie, Nelly wouldve had it if he had a better structure...wordplay...both had barely any creativity words and rhymes were played but over all Nelly hit harder
V/PNelly

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uppin 4 some votes

wha up dog
 

hey dog serve this fool :shoot: for the puerto ricans write back alright
lunatic
A.K.A
Boricua

Dis Battle Was Aight//

Puerto Rico//

Punches 6/10
Flowz 5/10

U Had Good Punches

Da Savior
Punches 4/10 (weak)
Flowz 5/10

Yall Know Who Da Battle// Yo Work On Yo Punches And Yo Wordplay// U Get A Lil Betta

Vote=puerto Rico//

puertoricanelly- nice flow, could have been better but i liked the verse about his girl having ur son. anyway i give u a 5/10
Da saviour- u were very basic, all that basic shit, ill cap u blah blah, anyway no real good punches. i give u an 3/10

vote : puertoricanelly

p nelly...

ok da saviour got murdered... his flow was off and plus welcome and from dont rhyme and you had less than one punch... you aslo call him a newby when your name says new to rb and he is a lightwieght so how you supposed to use that against him and wehn he gets on here and kills you with better punches and flow..,.

voe p nell... hit up my battle wit ny state of mind its in da frontlines

both were ok and i think that da saviour had better flow and opener. Puertoricanelly had the good r kelly line that it... oh and press enter on that shit it look better my vote da saviour

Uppin Votes Peeps Come On Just One More Vote!!!!!!

here a link i'll return the favor and be honest. oh and sorry you didn't get a ko pnelly
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=123295

yes
I will also have to vote for da savior
he or she?????
had a better verse
better structure
better punches-in my eyes
and better flow
I didnt like nelly's shit
it was too mediocre
although both verses was weak
keep elevating
both of yall
v/savior
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=123431
hit this shit up

v/puertoricanelly

The battle wasnt all that good but im givin him the vote coz he sucked less simple as. It wasnt that both verses were wack but they were too simple i mean the wordplay wasnt there all it was, was personals hardly any punches well in my opinon anyway but theres my explination anyway.