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MichaelCorleone 01-31-04 06:45 PM

villagepimp versus proof
 
we doin it tournament style the rules
no crew hatin
no swayin votes
16 lines
vote and comment on the other battle

villagepimp 01-31-04 07:05 PM

yo Corleone dogg... I got 2 battles goin' right now... maybe next time

villagepimp 01-31-04 07:09 PM

Ah... fuck it.... me & Cupcake's battle is dead....
I'm checkin' in... Blind spit? JUst go? Is that what we're doin'?

PROOF 01-31-04 07:17 PM

yeah what we doin, and lol, why am i, Mr. 3 posts, battling a middleweight

villagepimp 01-31-04 07:32 PM

Ya wanna be like D12, what are you twelve, You gonna end up in a body bag on a shelf
Cuz There is no PROOF of you bein' a MC, I Drop The ROOF on you tryin' a beat me, you can beat meat
Listen to the Beat of your heart, before I pull it apart and feed it to ya, Rip out ya tonsils and shove it in ya nostrils
I do sick shit cuz I am a sick prick and proud of it, You from Denver you can't be proud of it
You shiver when my name is mentioned, Quit ya bitchin', yeah you new, but you go it too deep battlin' me
I'll lyrically juke you like I was DAnte Hall, Turn around and nuke you, fuck makin' you fall
I'm impossible to defeat, And in mouth is where I'll place your feet, Doesn't matter the weapon you better retreat
You need a tampon, your leakin', Words comin' out that don't make sense, It's Village PImp better than 50 Cent
I'll leave you like South Park kids, they Snowed in, Yeah, White like the color of ya skin, when you start rappin'
Bad start for ya Proof, To tell you the truth, I already don't like you, SO FUCK YOU, I know you can say you weren't blazed
BUT YOU ARE THE PROOF, And Guys are what made ya dick raise, SO continue on ya ass chase
But your about as good a rappa as Cartman, Corleone shouldn't have made you start man
Too bad, I wanna know ya thoughts, Remove ya brains, All over the walls and things, This is shit that you can't change
While I rip off ya dick and shove it in ya ass, Roll ya ankle and smoke it, Ya know I do sick shit they don't do in Denver
You come colder than December, While my flows hotta than June, Ice plus fire don't mix good
YOur lyrics are good for a cartoon, You ain't from the hood, you from the rich suburbs, I am bitch so I'll leave ya dead on the curbs

PROOF 01-31-04 07:36 PM

whats the problem with bein a fuckin true newb/
that doesnt mean u wont soon hear the statement u lose/
ill got to footlocker and buy myself new shoes/
and kick you with them till i get a black and blue bruise/
this muthafucka thinkin hes a P.I.M.P./
probably a dick but see me im friendly/
battlin me, only because im new/
and if you win, you know i'll find you/
u probly at home, doin drugs and meth/
if i could read ur future, id see slugs and death/
lookin somewhere in ur lungs for breath/
but u couldnt breath, the last one stung ya head/
when u read this, you wont deliver/
a better diss, busy killin ur liver/
but im done with this shit dawg its over/
take this diss to ur bitches house and show her/

villagepimp 01-31-04 07:43 PM

Nice Verse man.... you'll be pretty good if ya keep workin' on ya shit... aight?

PROOF 01-31-04 07:45 PM

hey thanks, this is my first battle on this website, ok ever, but yeah thanks

IceMan187 01-31-04 07:53 PM

village pimp gets this, even though he went way over the line limti!!

better personals, more personals
harder hittin personals bett punches
pretty much every category goes to village
except strucutre
your flow is off
and sum of your bars dont make sense

v/village pimp

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Axiom

PROOF 01-31-04 07:55 PM

ok, ok, constructive critism would be nice, its my first battle, what did i do wrong

villagepimp 01-31-04 07:55 PM

Eh... fuck it.... I'm lazy right now..... I wasn't thinkin' bars/lines.... Who fucking cares, either way... you know

IceMan187 01-31-04 07:58 PM

okay strucutre
lines didnt follow a storyline, jumped subject to subject
....this muthafucka thinkin hes a P.I.M.P./
probably a dick but see me im friendly/
battlin me, only because im new/
and if you win, you know i'll find you/
u probly at home, doin drugs and meth/

umm head does not rhyme with death
use better wordplay

construcutive enuff

IceMan187 01-31-04 07:59 PM

okay strucutre
lines didnt follow a storyline, jumped subject to subject
....this muthafucka thinkin hes a P.I.M.P./
probably a dick but see me im friendly/
battlin me, only because im new/
and if you win, you know i'll find you/
u probly at home, doin drugs and meth/

umm head does not rhyme with death
use better wordplay

construcutive enuff

and village pimp

your bars, although long, which is not a good thing, hit alot harder
your personals, there was plenty more, and they all made sense, and were used well

all in all, village pimp wins

v/ village

PROOF 01-31-04 08:01 PM

most of my lines seem ok to me, pimp used the words proud of it both times as a rhyme, and im trying to not just rhyme the last syllable

drugs and meth
slugs and death
lungs for breath

Potent 01-31-04 08:11 PM

long ass batte!!!....but village takes this wit complex punches and flow and real good vocab.. proof battle people on your level and work on punches, vocab and flow maybe try goin to the W.E.C maybe they can help you out...

Vote:Vill

will u drop an honest vote on this please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111122

Da_Killa_Kid 01-31-04 08:38 PM

Ok Proof. You had a nice structure adn ya flow was only off by a little bit. Your lines were a little simplistic and your punches weren't really that hard hittin. If youchange that youll be pretty good. Village came pretty good with the personals and punches(Played on his av and name too much)but ya structure was fucked up and threw ya flow off a bit. Alright battle though.

VOTE_VILLAGEPIMP
Open Battle
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111055

Austeeno 01-31-04 08:55 PM

If I could vote I would, But thid diffenitly goes to the pimp himself.

HellSpawn666 01-31-04 09:02 PM

ya'll vote on this it's blazin' lol
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111229

villagepimp 02-02-04 04:47 PM

Uppin' #1....... Ya'll need to stop sleepin' on this shit...
I will return votes if ya leave a link so stop sleepin'.

villagepimp 02-03-04 09:52 AM

Uppin' #2....... Ya'll need to stop sleepin' on this shit...
I will return votes if ya leave a link so stop sleepin'.

villagepimp 02-04-04 10:03 AM

Uppin' #3!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Come On....................i'll Return Tha Favor

menolin 02-04-04 10:14 AM

villgepimp
verse was pretty weak, you had sme nice attempts at wordplay, often lacked a little bit, punches were good an bad, no reall killers, strucutre was off, lines were stretched,
which kind of made i boring to read!!!

proof
nice structure, but everything else lacked, your pnches were more like one of those freestyle you just do pissin about, they wernt punches just filler, you attempted a few,
not much wordplay an i can't say your ryhme scheme was the best, you just need to elevate, an keep at it.


vote villagepimp
he had punches, wordplay, an proof didn't , both had weak verses though not an enjoyable battle to read, but there can only be one winner!!



plz drop an honest vote on this
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111834

villagepimp 02-05-04 09:58 AM

Uppin' #4................ COME ON!!!! END THIS!!! I WILL RETURN VOTES
Thanks to everyone who's voted so far

villagepimp 02-07-04 05:05 PM

C'mon...... You people are slow..... finish his ass off!!!!!!! Uppin' #5............

Brethren 02-07-04 05:20 PM

Punches: Village, Proof had no real punches, so Village takes this one wiyjout doubt
Wordplay: Neither, no worpdlay in both verse, get some in there
Multis: Proof, had a few 3 syllable rhymes, villages just barely rhymed even if it did
Personals: Village, had lines talking about he was a newb, Proof was trying to defend himslef in his verse
Opener: Village, proof had nothing but flow in his opener
Closer: Village, same as well, nothing but filler from Proof

Vote - VillagePimp

Proof you need to work on basic punches, a comparison between 2 things, think some up, and try again next time. All I can really say. Village, your ryhmes were barely there, make sure everything flows nicely.

villagepimp 02-07-04 06:14 PM

yo, thanks for the votes Brethren, menolin, & Killa.... It helps to have people who actually vote on others battles. I'll hit up your battle brethren

PiTcH Black 02-07-04 06:18 PM

my votes goin to village pimp check out my battle for teflon and vote too while your here

Impendance 03-11-04 03:59 AM

Village pimp continues his tenacity. I liked your punches flows etc, i also liked the sportsmanship displayed on villages account. No IM SO ILL HOMIE ADAD. Instead he congratulated to opponent on his skill etc.

V/1 Village.


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