MichaelCorleone vs. kuniva
 

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its hard to believe you 14 and already labeled as kuniva
this dude is weak probably a broad should call this pussy vagina
he soft as charmin when its wet so i'll go through him like bullet holes
My flow be ammo when i spit leave you shot up and bleedin in hos-pi-tolls
Shouldn't call me out learn to keep michael corleone off your tongue.
i'll give you a reprieve from you mistake cause you so fuckin young.
listen to ya daddy cause i been fuckin ya mom since round 82.
but then again, you might not be, she was fuckin ten other niggas i knew.
this muthafucka shouldn't have stepped up, like ugly girls, to fuck with me
he too stupid and too young. 14 and this kid aint passed grade level 3.
you just a nother misguided colorado youth like them boys in little-ton.
tired of life and me banging ya mother so you run up like jackers with no guns.

never mind to the private message i just sent you

aiyyo because your older, and cause ur in made men
doesnt mean u got more eperience, i been rappin since age ten
im sorry but i think that when im twenty three
i wont battle, ill have a job wit a salary
and to say im like those mothafuckaz in columbine
now im pissed if u wanna see a slaughter than "YALL" in time
yo, i know im attractive but its up to YOU to keep MichaelCorleone off my tounge
and thank god im under 18, cause thats rape when im that young
lets to the math mike, umm... grade level 3
yeah im only a freshman, but soon ill take the SAT
i dont even need to go the full fourteen lines
hey mike u should go again, heres the green light

mistake in line two, should be experience not eperience

uppin (#1)

c'mon guyz, please vote on this, i would really like for my first battle to be a win(#2)

dont fall asleep on this please, good first time battle for me(#3)

yo that was an aight battle but can any
of yall hook a brotha up wit some votes

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111515

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111495

and my vote goes to kuniva cause he had way better punch lines
and real good stucture i see lots of word play in this charicter

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ur the only one out of the three of us that can vote, so vote on this thread please, i would vote if i could

no, no, no, no, no, M.C. shadow, ur vote is gonna get deleted, u didnt give enough info as to why i won and Mikey lost (5) more votes please, dont let this battle get slept on

mad played out rhymes w/ the soft as charmins, and jackers wit no guns lines. what i read from this battles it was close, but damn da things kaniva said in his uppins. u faught a complete pussy here.
vote- michael cus da other guys real weak

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weak as fuck battle!!...mike u had an ok flow, and structure, couple disses but nuthin too hard, also the moms shit is played out. kuniva u ahd an ok structure, the flow was lilchoppy, diss comebacks were weak as hell, u both needa elevate. but my vote-michael

cuz he came with more punches no need to break it down.

peep my battle in the sig and vote
thanks

thats ok ppduece cause u didnt give adequate feedback, so soon that vote wont matter anymore

its hard to believe you 14 and already labeled as kuniva
this dude is weak probably a broad should call this pussy vagina
weak opening i thought... alright attemped at a personal
he soft as charmin when its wet so i'll go through him like bullet holes
My flow be ammo when i spit leave you shot up and bleedin in hos-pi-tolls
eh the end of your follow through needs more of a set to really built a good flow off connect rhyming.. no directed punchs.. weak
Shouldn't call me out learn to keep michael corleone off your tongue.
i'll give you a reprieve from you mistake cause you so fuckin young.
alright attemps.. but your punchs arer lacking strength and arent doing much
listen to ya daddy cause i been fuckin ya mom since round 82.
but then again, you might not be, she was fuckin ten other niggas i knew.
generic, played concepted.. this bar was alright for 1980[b]
this muthafucka shouldn't have stepped up, like ugly girls, to fuck with me
he too stupid and too young. 14 and this kid aint passed grade level 3.
[b] not much strength but the punch is there.. set could have been worded better
you just a nother misguided colorado youth like them boys in little-ton.
tired of life and me banging ya mother so you run up like jackers with no guns.
good ending concept on the follow through but it fell off. wasnt feeling the set up at all, your concept...

over all your verse didnt punch much and you really lacked strength when you did, your flow could have been smooth and your metaphors weren very hard either..Try going at punchs more





aiyyo because your older, and cause ur in made men
doesnt mean u got more eperience, i been rappin since age ten
eh your opening could have been worded better, not much in a punch though
im sorry but i think that when im twenty three
i wont battle, ill have a job wit a salary
dope bar kid, good punch, im taking it as a personal :)
and to say im like those mothafuckaz in columbine
now im pissed if u wanna see a slaughter than "YALL" in time
not diggin the columbine lines... sort of fucked up in my eyes...
yo, i know im attractive but its up to YOU to keep MichaelCorleone off my tounge
and thank god im under 18, cause thats rape when im that young
set punch was decent.. not really feeling your follow through
lets to the math mike, umm... grade level 3
yeah im only a freshman, but soon ill take the SAT
follow through needed more of a directed punch, feeding off his verse isnt my thing
i dont even need to go the full fourteen lines
hey mike u should go again, heres the green light
seems like you could have ended better, the concept you were working at was alright. but you lacked on punchs and metaphors..

Over all LoL your 2nd bar almost took the battle for you no joke, its ish like that that that shows creativity and wittyness.. thats what punchs and wordplay should be about.. Over all your punchs were sub par, they really didnt hit with direction or strength.. Your metaphors needed some work but i thought you had talent nice job...

OH and i want you to re peep my battle you just did, truthfully there ARE personals in that verse, i take shots off his crew he was joinging, his profile and his name.. Maybe if you find those then youll be a lil better and spitting..

Vote Michael Coleone
He came with more to his verse, had better metaphors and rhyme scheme, punchs were all that great, pretty equal much up there.. Over all a close battle

uppppppin for votes

Punches: Mike
Wordplay: Neither
Multis: Neither
Personals: Tie
Wakness: Kaniva

Vote - Mike

Overall weak battle, flip some multis next time, think of comparisons to make better punches.

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Michael Corleone is DQed for having more than 2 active battles at once.