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Brethren vs. JamesJr.
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Verses Due by 12 am (midnight) Mon. Feb 2nd Votes close feb 3 mid 12am 10 lines (minimum) -20 (max) House rules SORRY I am new ,..... |
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At 1st I thought I was dealing with a Vet again
Until, I met this mother fucker Brethren Like he's a member of an elite brotherhood Lyrics killed him 6ft deep, just so his mother could See em dead, done for good! 2nd he's 2 years under me, 2 years younger please My lyrics are hollows then guns release Feeding off dude's fear with a hunger to beef He's done I put em under the street, in a slump slumbered to sleep This youngster is WEAK! His raps aren't raw he's just wishing it is So go back to playing basketball in Michigan this is it This bitch is thin.... and brittle Bitch just quit you're insignificant and little Now this is the riddle in the middle of the verse... Caskets closed you'll get riddled in the church And tell us how many times you're gonna get roasted and come back in this place? Burnt his ass is toasted... a direct smack in the face James Jr. Waiting on your verse...... 11:38 Eastern time |
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You hard?! Fucking sun dials is the only way you did your time, Watch this bitch fall apart, like I fucking slit your spine, Ha, with that bio, I sense a fake ass Philly act, Interested in trees, hell, I'm battlin a dendrophiliac, JamesJr. PM's me, "can you beat me please", I accept with open arms, Leave this battle like cigarettes, close but no cigar, Rearrange your name, and get a 'mesaj' about this kid bruising himself, Like this kid was battling himself in the mirror, you're losing yaself, You asking to die battling me, just stick an axe in your thigh, You ain't an ass-pirate, then why you got a patch in ya eye?, You shut the fuck up now, only refer to me as father or pops, Girls be like, get your pause off me, like pick ups were comma's or stops, While you sweatin, anticipating, like you measurin water in drops, Ohio?! Alien abducted ass live on a farm, why don't you just offer them crops?, Challenge Brethren, Now you ripped, head shoulder knees and toes, Need to grow after I killed you, fuck 20 lines, I don't even need em yo, JamesJUNIOR, Dick so small, this idiot gets brain through thongs, When he says Grand Theft Auto, he just means playing a video game too long. Ouch |
At 1st I thought I was dealing with a Vet again
Until, I met this mother fucker Brethren Like he's a member of an elite brotherhood Lyrics killed him 6ft deep, just so his mother could weak punches and an attemp at a personal See em dead, done for good! 2nd he's 2 years under me, 2 years younger please My lyrics are hollows then guns release Feeding off dude's fear with a hunger to beef He's done I put em under the street, in a slump slumbered to sleep This youngster is WEAK! still no real punches His raps aren't raw he's just wishing it is So go back to playing basketball in Michigan this is it This bitch is thin.... and brittle Bitch just quit you're insignificant and little first punch...but weak Now this is the riddle in the middle of the verse... Caskets closed you'll get riddled in the church And tell us how many times you're gonna get roasted and come back in this place? Burnt his ass is toasted... a direct smack in the face you verse contained no creativity, jus simplistic stuff. Check out the Whackness Emergency Center for helpful battle tips. You hard?! Fucking sun dials is the only way you did your time, Watch this bitch fall apart, like I fucking slit your spine, ok personal, lil played Ha, with that bio, I sense a fake ass Philly act, Interested in trees, hell, I'm battlin a dendrophiliac, nice..good vocab JamesJr. PM's me, "can you beat me please", I accept with open arms, Leave this battle like cigarettes, close but no cigar, haha nice meta Rearrange your name, and get a 'mesaj' about this kid bruising himself, Like this kid was battling himself in the mirror, you're losing yaself, ok You asking to die battling me, just stick an axe in your thigh, You ain't an ass-pirate, then why you got a patch in ya eye?, um..kinda whack You shut the fuck up now, only refer to me as father or pops, Girls be like, get your pause off me, like pick ups were comma's or stops, weak punch and meta While you sweatin, anticipating, like you measurin water in drops, Ohio?! Alien abducted ass live on a farm, why don't you just offer them crops?, Challenge Brethren, Now you ripped, head shoulder knees and toes, Need to grow after I killed you, fuck 20 lines, I don't even need em yo, kinda filler JamesJUNIOR, Dick so small, this idiot gets brain through thongs, When he says Grand Theft Auto, he just means playing a video game too long. played Ouch dope lol OK, Brethren rippe JamesJr. He had a more elevated verse with good punches, personals, and metas. Some filler in there. Now to me James' verse was like a vets filler, weak punches and nothing to exciting. For the love of God please drop an honest vote here! It's been open for ever. Mad sleepage. Thanks guys http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110540 |
i'll do this one line by name
1st two lines give to brethren. the whole sun dials and split spines was dope. didn't like the open by james jr. 2nd two lines brethren. i hope that dendrophiliac was someone scared of trees. if so give it to him. for this word usage alone. its like a big word score in scrabble. 3rd bar goes to james jr. had to cut it off with the younger please/gun release. even though this wasn't great it was better than brethrens cause his didn't rhyme. this gone take a while so i'll skip to close calls 4th bar the best two bars so far brethren did a great job with the rearrange name bruising himself. in a mirror fighting, he losing himself. loved that. very original. jamesjr. did a great one as well with the hunger to beef. slump slumbered to sleep. this kid is weak. but brethren gets this one. 5th goes to brethren cause james jr repeated it is on both lines after that brethrenjust went on with punches and personals and vocab. goes to brethren |
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111506
do a nigg a favor and vote on this battle thanx to all who vote |
yo that was an aight battle but can any
of yall hook a brotha up wit some votes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111515 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111495 |
hit up this spot and return the favor and vote. aight
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111488 |
I'll return votes later, uppin #1 .
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battle was 1 sided......battle was weak...but brethren clearly took this 1.....1st cat seemed 2 elementary in yes rhyme......other punches werent hot........but the use of his wordplay outshined the first dude...........an iight battle
vote = brethren hit this battle up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110017 |
Ok Can we get some "real" votes now
I enjoy criticism, but not one sided bias criticism. |
It was a good battle, My vote goes to James cuz he had some good punchlines going with a nice flow, nothin outstandin but he gets my vote
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yo do me a favor and vote on Daffer22 vs Baz187
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^^^ no, you wak ass motherfucker .
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one-sided battle...an eazy win for brethen....he didnt have 2 try very hard...
james..ur flow waz ok...not thatttttt bad.....but work on that...and make ur punches stronger....add more excitment and vocabulary.....ok for a newb...keep elevating.... brethen- good shyt wit da flow....nice punches....n ok structure....nice vocab.....overall- ur verse waz good....not dat boring.... break d o w n .... punches: brethen- his came harder and were on the point.....(experience) flow: .....brethen barely.....both gotta work on that....u gotta catch a rhythm....n stay on da topic strucutre: brethen....he kept hiz verse neat....not all over the place...james- werk on that.......even out the linez.... vote: brethen....no hate ......no d/r.......1 keep elevating-james... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111358 ^^return da favor...... |
james jr takes dis,good battle but james puches hit harder just,flow and structure was taken by jamejr too.keep it up both of us.
v/james jr PLZ RETURN DA FAVA:http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110860 |
got to close this battle......
uping # 1 JamesJr. |
ima have to give this one to brethren he was spittin hard on punches anf flo all that shit.
other dude did aight he just need to elevate a lil bit vote=brethren hit this up: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...803#post1151803 |
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punches-breth style-tie wordplay-james personals-breth creativity-breth overall-breth Brethren had the harder punches, he did his homework too. james flow was lil choppy, the punches needed to be better, also work on the creativity as well. vote-breth fav line breth- Quote:
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Thanks, i'll hit those up later .
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Uppin #4, last vote, c'mon, drop a link, I will return the favor
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upping for the #3 time
just want to end this........ so I can battle more peeps |
James: i was feelin the first 3 lines, if you would've kept it up i'd be sreaming murder.
Bretheren: line one was clean, too nice... the second two what are you thinking? i realize act rhymes with dendropheliac, but c'mon. James: lines 6-10 i'm lovin em they flow well and they hit hard too Bretheren:"Rearrange your name, and get a 'mesaj' about this kid bruising himself, Like this kid was battling himself in the mirror, you're losing yaself, You asking to die battling me, just stick an axe in your thigh, You ain't an ass-pirate, then why you got a patch in ya eye?," Yeah they ryhme... and James:"This bitch is thin.... and brittle" NO, no, no, expunge this line from your mind, you didn't need a filler that bad. Bretheren:"Ohio?! Alien abducted ass live on a farm, why don't you just offer them crops?," LMAO that's great. James: closer was ok nothing spectacular, but it worked well Bretheren: That's how you end it? It's almost a toss up, if Bretheren had a closer that did something... anything, he'd have it, but i give this to JamesJr. Good job, work on the word play. |
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up n As I said gotta end this battle
there might be a Round 2 JamesJr. |
james has my vote cuz if u say this out loud his seemes to have more to it than brethans did, and
"Rearrange your name, and get a 'mesaj' about this kid bruising himself" that jus seemes reel childish 2 me vote = james jr. |
Brethren vs. JamesJr.
I can't vote because I dont have enough posts but heres my thoughts.
Flow - Both had decnet flow but Brethren to me flowed a little better. Punches-I have to go with Brethren on this one. His punches were more more creative and hit harder. Jame's Jr. had a few puches but they were kind of weak and lacked that certain originality. Personals- Brethren cleaned up with the personals. He did a good job of ripping on Jame's Bio and quote. Jame's didn't really have any personals, he tried with the Michigan line, but it came off too weak. Next time he should try using more personals. Try checking out your opponents info to find something to use against them. Vocab- Jame's vocab was a little to simple for my taste. He needs to elevate Brethren on the other, I thought, did a nice job on the vocab. Overall- To me this battle was one sided. James Jr was not bad, but needs to be more creative with his vocab and punches. It also couldn't hurt to use more personals. My vote goes to Brethren because simply he had better and stronger punches/Personals. Please vote on my battles or give feedback if you dont have enough posts thanks. apathy vs. jamie and apathy vs. Gravity |
upping for the last time
After this I dunno what to do, wait for the battle to close and have wasted the lyrics and time, just say fuck it and battle again hoping it don't happen again(stuck in battle without votes or waste lyrics) JamesJr. People just expect their shit to be posted on for no reason Me shit, I gave honest opinions on battles, open mics, poetry, etc I didn't expect nothing in return, but just goes to show ya prob 20- 30 I looked out for and gave them the time of day and real full attention Oh well keep it up all real lyricists and peots!!! I feel you, even if noone else does! |
good battle brethren took this shit with all together better metas, punches, originality, and flow j had a better opener and closer but it just wasnt good enough
hit up this battle http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=98529 |
Brethren obviously owned this battle....
his flow was a little stretched... but it was solid other than that wordplay was tight, some good punches and personals... James had a decent flow, multis were ok... punches werent hitting for me... i dont know if it was the setup or the content but they were just weak... like ya first line ... My vote definetly goes to BRETHREN |
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