dazasta vs RB.com's father
 

*sigh* another sonning eh?
no hate votes
no d/r votes
fully explained votes
14 lines...?
NO biting
NO feeding
NO prewriting
Wanna go first? doesnt matter your choice...
drop 30 mins after check in

*sigh*waiting for check in..

no feeding kid...im cheggin in

i odnt need to feed...you going first or not?......

Don't try to defend it, I always rear end kids..
I'd love you to merk my ass, but this aint tennis
Your text sounds depressed *sigh* it wont last
Cuz RB.com's Father will *sigh*bur son your ass!
This battle is your end, I straight a-vent fools...
Even your crew will V.O.T. ... E against you!
You'd try flip my WORDPLAY concepts, thaz word
But sadly only reduce it to fucking PLAYEDWORDS!
Ya name sound gangsta in english, but start 'fessin..
But like ya life....
It only says 'thats after' in a dutch accent!
Feed YOUR verse?, I'll tell you something blatent
I'd feed off your career and still die of starvation
Fuck this battle, I could win with a no show...
You are a good head...with those fucking lowblows

shit i thought checking in automatically means im gunna spit...oh well

*sigh* as i thought....

There's no point in me trying...you'd probably win..sike..
the father?..i must be great grandaddy..chuz i just sonned you twice..
i guess it wasnt right...to try and show you up...
and of course you declare illness...your verse had me throwing up...
i know its tough...to try to get the hang dude...
but ur in desperate need of elevation..just like...fallen angels...
its the same dude..who tries to defend his cause...
sorry to tell you dad..your late..like menopause...
to prevent your fall...skill?..is what you lack...
proven fag...gives handjobs when i tell him to hit the sack..
just quit rap...toss you like a used pencil...
loyalty to you? shit even se7en didnt defend you...
guess i'll end you..shame i shoulda went first..
then you'd have a chance to win...if you quoted my whole verse...

Done..............

vote now..
and if u think ur cool with the whole sonned shit...ur kinda slow

you can all vote now..............................uppin 1

shut the fuck up kid...you lost..now.....hush and let people vote

sorry i don't have 100 votes to post officially but i think dazasta took this one nice punches and it flowed well and was an easy read, RB it was a little confusing but i like the closer and the dutch accent line decent flow and some ok punches but i'd say dazasta won this one by a hair.
return the favor:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...264#post1154264

thanx for the feedback anyway..any votes?.....on this battle?

yup sure....big egos usually mean small penis's...but not like i care

Father
Your opener was horrible..
After that it got slightly better but just..slightly.
You had some ok wordplay, but tried to point it out to much..
Some didnt really work well..
Also some of ur attempts at personals? no..
You had some ok punches & thats it, basically.
Expected much more from somewhere with such an loose jaw.
..Overall ok.

Dazasta
Started of pretty good, but got slightly worse..
What basically did it for you, where the comedic punches..
The funny lines that just made more of an impact, then
Fathers attempts at personals..
Overall u just had the slightly better verse..
& im pointin out punches as the main factor for my vote,
I felt you had the upper hand in them..
& since this is a battle, u get my vote.

Dazasta

0~2.....making dazasta feel special since..umm today

0~1 my B

Punches: Dazasta, both used the same 'sonned' concept, but Daz had better punches
Wordplay: RB, RB had about 2 wordplays, to Daz's none
Multis: Daz, day used a couple 2 and 3 syllable multis
Personals: Tie, both used the same concept
Opener: Daz, RB opener was on the very edge of rhyming, and it was a pretty weak opener also.
Closer: Daz, lowblows line was decent wordplay, quote my whole verse I thought was funny, so Daz takes this.

Vote - Dazasta

Same concept, but better overall punches from Dazasta.

then you'd have a chance to win...if you quoted my whole verse
Daz's best line

Cuz RB.com's Father will *sigh*bur son your ass!
RB's best line

Return the favor in my signature

cooo

0~2......damn daz i thought u just did topicals lol

i do those too................uppin 2.................

Father - You didnt start off to strong. After that it got alittle bit better, but not much. You had some decent wordplay, but trying to point it out didnt help it at all. you tried to include personals but they werent really hitting. You had some ok punches, some basic but some werent bad, decent overall i say. i think you should change your name..cuz u aint RB's father quite yet.

Dazasta - Started of pretty good, stayed consistent through out mostly, wit gettin worse towards the very end. you had some very good punches..adding comedy into them made them much more wittier and more fun to read. You had a good verse basically overall..u stayed smooth through out


V/ Dazasta...his punches were much harder and more wittier..he had a overall better verse to boot

werd...0~4..nice battle yall

0~3 i mean....

Okay

Flow=Daz, his flowed a bit better over all, it was easier to read which I like in a battle. RB, it seemed that some of your lines were a bit forced.

Punches=Daz, I like his punches more, he had some funny shit in there and I think that funny punches are always good. RB, the punches that you did throw seemed kind of weak to me, you should work on that, it'll make your over all verse better.

Personals=Dav, I have to give this to him as well, his personals were just a bit better. RB, if you had just one or two more personals or just better personals over all I would have given this to you, but it didn't seem like you really attempted any personals exept for that one.

Vocab=Daz, he had a higher level of vocab in his verse. RB, you had some vocab in there, but for the most part it was pretty basic vocab.

Over all=Daz, you had a pretty nice drop, I like your punches, comedy is a good way to go with those, I think that you should work on personals, you put in some but they just weren't up to as high a level as they could have been. Other than that nice drop and keep it up.
RB, You should work a bit on your punches, you had some punches they just didn't hit to hard, and you should work on personals as well, personals are a good tool to have in a battle, You had an okay flow even if stuff sounded a little forced sometimes, and okay vocab, but you should work on those two areas as well, but it was an okay drop, keep working at it and you should improve.

Vote=Daz

Please make an honest vote on this.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108625

f*k full explanation votes..all i no iz dat dazasta won n rb lost...wah elz is der to no..yall no who won dis battle

- :nono: S0ySaUCe

^^lol thanx.................one more vote................uppin 2

RB's Farther
Don't try to defend it, I always rear end kids..
I'd love you to merk my ass, but this aint tennis
pretty weak, 4/10

Your text sounds depressed *sigh* it wont last
Cuz RB.com's Father will *sigh*bur son your ass!
u seem to like ass, but u aint creative with it, 5/10

This battle is your end, I straight a-vent fools...
Even your crew will V.O.T. ... E against you!
lol, made me laff a lil, 6/10

You'd try flip my WORDPLAY concepts, thaz word
But sadly only reduce it to fucking PLAYEDWORDS!
not too bad, 6/10

Ya name sound gangsta in english, but start 'fessin..
But like ya life....
It only says 'thats after' in a dutch accent!
pretty weak, nice attempt, 5/10

Feed YOUR verse?, I'll tell you something blatent
I'd feed off your career and still die of starvation
lol, could of be worded better, 6/10

Fuck this battle, I could win with a no show...
You are a good head...with those fucking lowblows
blah, pretty weak 5/10

wordplay let u down, elevate, i thought u was a vet on an alias,

overall 37/70


dazasta
There's no point in me trying...you'd probably win..sike..
the father?..i must be great grandaddy..chuz i just sonned you twice..
not too strong, bad wording, 5/10

i guess it wasnt right...to try and show you up...
and of course you declare illness...your verse had me throwing up...
lol, nice 7/10

i know its tough...to try to get the hang dude...
but ur in desperate need of elevation..just like...fallen angels...
didn't even ryhme, 4/10

its the same dude..who tries to defend his cause...
sorry to tell you dad..your late..like menopause...
pretty played, 5/10

to prevent your fall...skill?..is what you lack...
proven fag...gives handjobs when i tell him to hit the sack..
lol, not too bad, 6/10

just quit rap...toss you like a used pencil...
loyalty to you? shit even se7en didnt defend you...
lol, nice 7/10

guess i'll end you..shame i shoulda went first..
then you'd have a chance to win...if you quoted my whole verse...
hmmm, im sure i seen that last line somewere before, 6/10

overall 40/70

again bad wording, an weak punches, made ur verse weak


my vote dazasta