Dope Name -versus- Ven0m
 

you know the rules this is my check in, alright check in and drop within the twenty minutes

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Venom is losin' a battle that's way too hard in the begining
As hard as you try third time wasn't the charm for winning

Startin' a riot, and takin' on the giant, venom's now silent
Let this get to the end, this is now for your t.v too violent

Cancel the orders and battle me with some big yet small balls
I'm a wreckin' ball tearin' down the walls and watchin' you fall

Nothin's in comparison with how you will surely fall and tumble
Without trippin' you you stumble and your foundation crumbles
While i come out all loud and proud you are quiet and mumble
Your loss can be a a 4 to the collection as your throw and fumble

Let you ask your friends for lines I'll bend the time and lend a rhyme
When you wonder where the win I'll let the dope one commit the crime

nineteen minutes


and an explenation for the fumble line, (Packers and Eagles game, last few plays favre threw a bomb that was intercepted)

and yo, you got a minute

Imma tell you like this, I can't even call you a contender
so save your ass embarrassment, walk away and surrender
you've wasted 20 mins of your life thinking your gonna win
by the way how does it feel to have my balls on your chin
Imma alwayz ahead of you, you don't have enough skill
your played out rhymes are older then the 2 dollar bill
I rushed this in this rhyme but its still better then your verse
u had a prewritten freestyle, but u still needed to reherse
you gotta work on your shit before you bring it to RB
or theres employment for sucka mc's down at harveyz

o my god.... dope name should win due to takin flow,punches, n damn near everything, n for the good of this kid... some one ban him from this forum till he elevates a lil....


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Whack vote gone.
-Axe

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Cprogress

thanks for the vote

um.....uppin

that was a d/r vote no doubt he should be banned..

opener venom dope was corny
punches venoms hit harder none of dope names really hit
personals didnt have any
structure tie kinda gay how dope names was structured
flow tie
overall vote venom punches chit alot ahrder dn didnt have any good punchlines
both need 2 work on personals and vocab

Vague vote is gone.
-Axe

uping#1...........................................

venom kilt dopename with punches that won me over. VENOMS SHIT WAS HELLA FUNNY TOO. so vote= VENOM

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Feeble Minded

^ is that even an explaination?

what the hell



I'ma get a mod in here, really none of these votes were properly explained

Ajax:o my god.... dope name should win due to takin flow,punches, n damn near everything, n for the good of this kid... some one ban him from this forum till he elevates a lil.......

and that was?????? stop whining...

^ dumbass I said none of the votes were explained not just yours it's just if you would like me to put a blank in my next gay ass people quote, I won't have a problem doin' it i never said that my votes should stay, god...

Dope name you need to relax nigg, jus cuz you dont have my vote is the only reason your pissed.

^Yes because it's been my life dream to have pnemonia boy reppin' an area code three hours away from him come and vote on my battle, you can see right through me, it's true...


you're all herbs, i don't know what's goin' on anymore

I'll just battle you all and shut you up, but for now i need to rest and stuff

hmm...good battle.....close.....let's see...
Dope: structure was very good....metas were average.....wordplay too....
punches were ehh....wasnt really feelin too many of them.... work on combinin ur punches and personals, u attempted a few....good multies...you should keep your verse all together..no spaces between bars.....overall not a bad verse at all....i'd say 12/20 punches need to get better...

Venom: also very good strcuture....liked your punches...definitley better....more direct....made me laugh....no multies really....good attempts at personals....wordplay good....meats nice....overall good verse...i'd say 14/20 .....

good battle dope you just gotta elevate your punches...potential have you...
venom good battle use multies sometimes there fun....
vote-venom

Uppinggggg........................................ .........

I vote Venom
He had a gud flow cuz he had better rhymes than Dope
Venom also had a lot more punchlines an dthey were quite good
He also had a better struture than Dope so my vote goes out to Venom

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Axiom

upping............................................ ...

Yeah...this is becoming a pathetic thread..with all the freeposting..any way...
Dope Name..you had a clean structure...easy flow..and some good punches...nothing too extraodinary though...
Venom...your strucure was also good..you had a more complex technique to your drop and you had some decent punches...nothing special either though...

Meta's- Venom..you had the witty meta's..the harvey line..the two dollar bill thing..good.
Wordplay-Dope Name..you had a lot of good multi's infused with good word usage that made a "ring" to your flow...
Punches-Venom..you had punchlines that made you think..while dope name was to the point..I prefer Venom's wit.
Sust-Dope Name..You had a more complete verse with really no filler..just a few weak punches..
Structure-Tie...you had different styles but both were easy to read...
overall...Dope Name...Venom was cool but Dope Name came consistent and had ne filler

Shit.....................sorry I meant to paste it in my last post.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112093

uping.............................................

flow-venom
style-tie
punches-venom
creativity-venom
personals-venom
wordplay-tie
overall-venom

I don't kno bout this battle. dope you had an ok flow, but the punches were pretty much worthless, even done in 20 min's, work on those, style is aight. venom you had a good flow, couple ok punches, personals, you dropped sum reality bs on him and came better imo vote-venom