Teknique Vs. Freeman
 

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:cussing: ALRIGHT
10-12 LINES
U FIRST
NO HATIN, D/R, CREW VOTES

JUST DO WHAT U DO :cussing:

alright alright chekin in jus waitin on u to do whateva it is u do

da bell jus rang for my class but ill be back in half an hour, look IM BEIN HONEST YO ill even let u spit again but my teachas kickin me out.......

so basically be back in like.....30 minutes

ay yo i said what da deal was so ay u can eitha complain like a girl or jus accept da fact dat u bout to get beat.....

so like i said do u wanna spit again....or want me to jus post my verse

ok i guess u stayin wit dat verse bruh cuz im fittna spit...

im tired of this....

see i was jus tryin to spare u n prolong the inevitable/
the death of the freeman, carcass leakin red n beat like da vegetable/ (beet- a dark red vegetable)
rappin is like pullin a gun, dont do it if u dont know how to use it/
shoot n a miss, now u look pissed, cuz im trigga happy n bound 4 losin/
had to do it, had to show how to move correctly/
do u expect me to now swing back when a dude is in my face n tryin to check/
dont have to respect me, just be ready when da fist is balled up, GOD has picked up da phone, get ready free u bput to be called up/
cuz i dont need a weapon to do my work for me, trust i dont need an AK to spray/
10 knuckles its e-z, to leave freezy, in an i-c-u in da u-k/.....

i messed up part of it hold on ima repost it......

im tired of this....

see i was jus tryin to spare u n prolong the inevitable/
the death of the freeman, carcass leakin red n beat like da vegetable/ (beet- a dark red vegetable)
rappin is like pullin a gun, dont do it if u dont know how to use it/
shoot n a miss, now u look pissed, cuz im trigga happy n bound 4 losin/
had to do it, had to show how to move correctly/
do u expect me to not swing back when a dude is in my face n tryin to check me/
dont have to respect me, just be ready when da fist is balled up, GOD has picked up da phone, get ready free u bout to be called up/
cuz i dont need a weapon to do my work for me, trust i dont need an AK to spray/
10 knuckles its e-z, to leave freezy, in an i-c-u in da u-k/.....
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messed up again dammit i gonna repost it one more time cuz my spelling is bad

im tired of this....

see i was jus tryin to spare u n prolong the inevitable/
the death of the freeman, carcass leakin red n beat like da vegetable/ (beet- a dark red vegetable)
rappin is like pullin a gun, dont do it if u dont know how to use it/
shoot n a miss, now u look pissed, cuz im trigga happy n your bound 4 losin/
had to do it, had to show u how to move correctly/
do u expect me to not swing back when a dude is in my face n tryin to check me/
dont have to respect me/
just be ready when da fist is balled up, GOD has picked up da phone, get ready free u bout to be called up/
cuz i dont need a weapon to do my work for me, trust i dont need an AK to spray/
10 knuckles its e-z, to leave freezy, in an i-c-u in da u-k/.....

teck had the better flow easily, a few kool multis, a bar stretched here n there, good clean opener, kinda fell off toward the end with the spelling line.. but altho he had the flow freeman had the punches and personals.. feelin the self glorification and doe doe line, a few played concepts but content wise, and thats what matters in a battle as far as punches and disses i feel freeman edged this with a few extra hits.. teck gave him a fight tho he just kinda strayed off his opponent with the hard hitters toward the end.. vote freeman.. return an honest vote plz no hate or beef

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113774

honest vote i wasnt really tryin to spell tho it was jus....who cares....anyway we need sum poll votes so up #1

da bell jus rang so im goin to lunch ill check dis stuff lata

Imagine this.. Bitch.. You lie and have no technique
Even when your with your bum-buddies...
... You still come weak
NICE OPENER NOTHIN 2 STRONG BUT WAS IGHT
My verse will exterminate.. Leave you extinct like the 'doe-doe'
Hasnt anyone told you...
... Self-glorification is a no-no
LOL MADE ME LAUGH NICE PERSONAL
Im ripping up bitches.. Youve just stepped into the arena
This herb is so spotty...
... He is force fed Neutrogena
NICE LINE
Check first post^.. He really is hatin.. A loony toon
Drowning you in spit...
... Leave you stuck in a typhoon
NICE
Dont trust you.. So bitch.. This is a real threat
Im hittin you, leavin' you stubbed out...
... Just like a cigarette
LOL GOOD FINISHER



see i was jus tryin to spare u n prolong the inevitable/
the death of the freeman, carcass leakin red n beat like da vegetable/ (beet- a dark red vegetable)
DIDNT LIKE THIS
rappin is like pullin a gun, dont do it if u dont know how to use it/
shoot n a miss, now u look pissed, cuz im trigga happy n bound 4 losin/
DIDNT RHYME,LIKED THE USE OF MULTI
had to do it, had to show how to move correctly/
do u expect me to now swing back when a dude is in my face n tryin to check/
DIDNT RHYME AGEN HORRIBLE LINE
dont have to respect me, just be ready when da fist is balled up, GOD has picked up da phone, get ready free u bput to be called up/
cuz i dont need a weapon to do my work for me, trust i dont need an AK to spray/
10 knuckles its e-z, to leave freezy, in an i-c-u in da u-k/.....
STRETCHED ASS LINE I LIKED IT THO


OVERALL FREE TAKES THIS TECH HAD THE BETTA FLOW BUT FREE HAD THE BETTER STRUCTURE BETTER PUNCHES AND PERSONALS SO FREEMAN TAKES THIS 1

CUD BOTH YALL HIT THIS UP PLZ

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113858

freeman takes this because of the better flow structyre persdonals and punches

he killed the other guy because his punches were on point and hit way harder

nice verse and tek dont up it anymore or u will get dq'ed

for a better verse and better personals and punches my vote goes to

v/freeman

hit up the battle in my sig please

This line signifies the whole battle very nicely

rappin is like pullin a gun, dont do it if u dont know how to use it/
shoot n a miss, now u look pissed, cuz im trigga happy n bound 4 losin/

Because, no you don't know how to do it, and yes, you were bound for losing with things like this self diss.
Nothing hit hard, light attempts at wordplay usually result in light punches.
That's the case here, and that alphabet shit at the end? I've seen way, way better.
Freeman didn't blow me away but everything he sent was a good, decent diss directed right at his opponent.
Shit like this isn't directed at anyone.

dont have to respect me, just be ready when da fist is balled up, GOD has picked up da phone, get ready free u bout to be called up

That's why my vote goes to Freeman. Tek did too much of the above.

Okay Here it is.

FLow=Tech, it was just a bit better, even though I felt both of these verses Tech's flow was a little better.

Punches=Free, his punches just hit harder than Tech's, Tech work on developing your punches more and it will help out.

Personals=Free, he had some good personals in there that made me laugh, Here again Tech you need to work on your personals, good personals can win you a battle.

Vocab=Free, he had the better over all vocab here. Tech you had some okay vocab just didn't put it exactly right.

Over all=Free, you had a good drop here, even though your flow seemed a bit off I liked the style you used, you had some really nice punches and personals in here and it was an over all good drop, nice work and keep it up.
Tech, you had a good flow to it even though some of your lines didn't really rhyme, you need to work on your personals and punches a bit, your vocab was okay but you need to make better use out of it, just keep at it and you'll improve.

Vote=Free

Can you two give some honest votes on my battles, thanks.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112136
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108625

Freeman
Imagine this.. Bitch.. You lie and have no technique
Even when your with your bum-buddies...
... You still come weak
personal,punch = 5
My verse will exterminate.. Leave you extinct like the 'doe-doe'
Hasnt anyone told you...
... Self-glorification is a no-no
metiphore,punch,-filler = 4
Im ripping up bitches.. Youve just stepped into the arena
This herb is so spotty...
... He is force fed Neutrogena
metiphore,wordplay,metiphore,punch = 7
Check first post^.. He really is hatin.. A loony toon
Drowning you in spit...
... Leave you stuck in a typhoon
personal,personal,metiphore,punch = 6
Dont trust you.. So bitch.. This is a real threat
Im hittin you, leavin' you stubbed out...
... Just like a cigarette
-filler,metiphore,punch = 5

OK verse. Nothing special, you had some really nice concepts in here though, if you had kept this consistant it would have been nice. The neutrogena line was very nice along with your closer, the cigarette line, even though the top half of it was basicly a filler. Just a little less filler would be my advice.
Overall = 29
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Teknique
see i was jus tryin to spare u n prolong the inevitable/
the death of the freeman, carcass leakin red n beat like da vegetable/ (beet- a dark red vegetable)
metiphore,punch = 5
rappin is like pullin a gun, dont do it if u dont know how to use it/
shoot n a miss, now u look pissed, cuz im trigga happy n your bound 4 losin/
-indirect metiphore,multi,-flo = 2
had to do it, had to show u how to move correctly/
do u expect me to not swing back when a dude is in my face n tryin to check me/
-structure,-filler = 0
dont have to respect me/
just be ready when da fist is balled up, GOD has picked up da phone, get ready free u bout to be called up/
-structure,-flo,metiphore = 2
cuz i dont need a weapon to do my work for me, trust i dont need an AK to spray/
10 knuckles its e-z, to leave freezy, in an i-c-u in da u-k/.....
punch,personal,-structure = 4

Alright. You showed potential with that first bar, but then you fell apart like a wet box in a rain storm. It seemed to me that you were to focused on the guns and not Freeman. You need to fix that. This isn't a topical on AK's. Your last bar was OK but still, you need to even up your structure.
Overall = 13
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Vote = Freeman

i think that the verses were quite evenly matched, however, Freeman had a structured verse that made more sense to me, both came quite weak. But the other guy dropped ages later and upped it three times, that aint right, can;t do you much justice..Freemans finisher was coo! But both of the verses weren't that dope..

just my 2 centz

Vote: Freeman