Da Vinci \\\s/// Neal
 

Alright, like I said in Bitch Slapped.

10-20 lines over or under is cool I don't give a shit
Normal rules apply no bull shit
Verses due by Saturday Mid-night
You drop first, no bullshit either.


Peace

This aint a battle dog this lyrical genocide/
Cuz im killing pussies off like u before dinnertime/
Yo dick so small yo rubber got to be magnified/
My MO is to go at the heart of these rappers/
Kill they "pride" like lions in africa/
Bitch im so sick throw up rhymes all the time/
I probably got u so scared that u wont show by the deadline/
Da vinci sound like some faggot rap/
Fits u perfectly like a fiitted cap/

Neal?
Your real name with lyrics like yours ya should be go’n for deception//
Can’t go out in public as your self, what makes RB and exception?//
At least ya got your priorities straight cause ya put “kneal” in you your name handle//
I spit so much mother fuka these people call me the camel//
True, you do spit sick shit, but I hate to break your spirit it ain’t the lyrics//
It’s the syphilis that’s attached to the upper lip tick//
I’m a rape this bitch like a virgin on prom night who’s drunk as shit
Ya still wouldn’t have a fan, if ya had six mothers//
Seen a lot heat but its been under the covers//
Been through some beef, referring to ya gay lovers//
I could paint the perfect picture but it’d be a waste of time/
Cause these people can see 20 lines of yours equals 1 of mine

Yo after I vote, return the favor and vote on my battles (check my sig).

Punches: Both of you used some tired stuff, but Da Vinci also used some new stuff. The personal was pretty decent, though the handle/camel rhyme is kinda weak. "Yo dick so small yo rubber got to be magnified" that makes no sense man, magnified means made bigger, get it straight. Da Vinci gets the edge on this one.

Open/close: Da Vinci also has the edge hear with a good line to go out on, Neal starter strong but the close was a bit weak.

Flow: Neal, cuz Da Vinci had some issues in the middle there, stretching rhymes and also some mispelling or something throws it off.

Other shit: Goes to Da Vinci, because he's got the nice worldplay and because Neal's African lion metaphor is kinda weak and I see nothing else there. The "tick" thing from Da Vinci was nice.

Vote: Da Vinci.

Now hit my battles up.

yo....da vinci had some sick shit yo....you got my vote dog...you got some sick punchlines and structure...vocab is good to...but yo, neal, yours was good, but it needed to be longer...and your kinda missing some punchlines yo...no h8, da vinci wins this one..

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yo, i voted on urs, return the favor yo....razor_slits vs. madd_hatter81....need some votes on that

cool, we need some more votes, and razor slits never voted on the poll, just on text does that count?

lol no it doesn't because it got discounted... shit happens you know

Well can i get some more votes than......................

or not.

Thanks, all we need is three more votes to wrap this one up,

hey, okay, kan ya fuk off an vote on dis bitch or what?

Hey we need a few more votes. .

Da vinci definatly took it. Creativity, Better punches and flow.

Neal was short simple and played. Work on it and you'll be good. You were just too short and too simple for me.

V/ Da Vinci

Hit up the battle in my siggy.

this battle was aight but i seen better both of u need to elevate in all catagories but i have to go wit da vinci cause he followed the rules by writing ten lines at least..both of u were goodbut i think u guys need a rematch both of u could do better

drop an honest vote on my battle http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=115753

itte here how i see it da vinci hade dis one
dvi
stru 10\10
punches im sayin 8\10
flow it was itte nuttin special 8\10
voca 9\10
ovall 9\10

neal
punch 8\10
flow 7\10
stru 9\10
voca 8\10
oval 8\10

v/di vin